Love Kills

I love you,
though, can't tell if you do.
You hate yourself and others, too.
Your life is what you often screw.

The small gleam in your eyes,
takes my breath away and my heart cries,
for I could never win you as a prize. 
My lungs die whilst my soul flies.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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February 26, 2016 at 10:38 PM
Poetry Lover, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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February 25, 2016 at 12:02 PM
About your poem, it's a great form. Nice to see someone is not giving up where they might be a spark. 7+.... LINDA
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February 25, 2016 at 12:01 PM
Don't look at it as a prize but as something you share...lovely piece
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February 25, 2016 at 12:28 PM
Good point. Thank you
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February 25, 2016 at 11:49 AM
Poetry Lover,, Welcome to Poetry soup I hope you enjoy the community. You'll find friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Other than that I will read, enjoy and comment with positive feedback. Remember, keep posting, stay in touch, TAP my shoulder when you have a new poem. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. You might find my support addictive. I've been a SOUP Poet for 6 years. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. I'm from Texas, How about you? Tell me a little about your poetic skills. I will enjoy following you and your poetry :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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February 25, 2016 at 12:29 PM
Thank you for your positive feedback, I appreciate that. I am sure I will enjoy the community here. I will make sure to notify you when I have a new poem uploaded. Also, I am going to check some of your poems right away; I am certain that I'd like them. Again, thank you. Your new poet friend, Cassandra.
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