Love In a Far Off Place- For Contest

We'd made a dawn start that day, following in his footsteps, as
apparently Jesus used to get up early.
Our group had gathered for a reading, and to pray, along with
fruit and cereals our first staples of the day. 
The good Lord had gifted us a painted morning of Coeruleum blue, 
 and a warm spiced breeze flossed my smile.
I turned and watched the city for a while. 
Amidst the pink and beige jigsaw of the old city, the Dome of the rock
had caught the morning rays and was now bragging about it, 
shamelessly blinging, 
competing with the shouts of Minarets
 and Church bells ringing.
Few things can compete with an Israel morning, but you did.
Perched like an Owl on a low wall, cross-legged, your head moved
from side to side, scanning the mount, sharing our glass,
drinking the moment.
You wore white cotton, an arm hung with beads, an evil eye bracelet 
and what looked like a Kara, glistening. 
Styled by the Gods, with three quarters of a straw hat 
wedged in the bricks.
And then I found myself before you,
 Lord knows how, and I was trying to remember how my mouth worked.
Your head cocked to one side you watched me for a while
then nodded me a soft hello, and finished with a smile.
Ice broken, we gathered intelligence- you, a 'gap year Guerilla'
on a global reconnaissance , armed with just a shoulder bag and a credit card.
Me, a lapsed Catholic with an empty soul, seeking a childhood faith long discarded.
A shout from the tour guide burst our intimate bubble and I retreated,
backwards, gesturing, as if in the presence of a Shah.
She waved back, almost lost her balance, and a gust of wind would
have placed her gently among the sleeping of the Kidron 
if she hadn't grabbed her hat.
And that was that.
I went back to the wall that evening, and the following morning,
I don't know why-  she'd be bathed in the rose of Petra by then.
For a short time I was bereft, and stood, fittingly, before the
Basilica of the Agony, and then sat on our wall, 
to watch the chosen wake up.
I think my soul woke a little, just then.
For God had left me with a little bit of love. 
Unrequited, but worth hanging on to , 
worth building on.
It's been thirty five years, and in those occasional quiet places
I still think of you


For contest 'Love in a far off place', sponsored by Frank Herrera
22nd July 2015
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Kimathi Avatar
July 29, 2015 at 10:13 AM
Congrats to your WIN Viv! A very wonderful piece indeed! ;-)
Wigley Avatar
July 29, 2015 at 12:07 PM
Thanks, Teddy, nice to share a wistful memory with folk. Regards, Viv
Dela Cruz Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 10:59 PM
What a great journey I just had and a very good read...You have a great way of using your words-I don't know you and yet while I was reading them, I hear this voice, loud and clear while I know for a fact, it wasn't mine. Congrats, it's very well desrved
Wigley Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 11:47 PM
Cheers, Wilbert, sometimes the content and my style get on well together. Regards, Viv
A. Sharma Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 10:46 PM
Awesome pen Viv! Powerful words n wonderful expressions!Big congrats on ur top podium!
Wigley Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 11:46 PM
Thanks, Dr Upma, I enjoyed the reminisce. Viv x
Y. Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 10:00 PM
Viv, congratulation on your great win:-) Alexis
Wigley Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 10:31 PM
Thanks Alexis, a great topic for the contest and it shows- the other entries are absolute belters. Viv x
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July 27, 2015 at 9:50 PM
Wow, I felt like I was there with you as I read this beautifully romantic encounter! Congrats on your well deserved win, Viv...the poem is more intriguing knowing that it's true. Hugs, Rhonda
Wigley Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 10:30 PM
A treasured memory, Rhonda, right place, right time, wrong girl, apparently. I suppose it's like we see thousands of birds in the sky each day, but you never forget the brief flash of a Kingfisher. Thanks, Viv x
Allison Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 8:10 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Mr Viv:-) hugs Jan xx
Wigley Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 9:08 PM
Thanks, Jan, maybe that Kate Bush lookalike it's about is out there, reading it. Then again, maybe not. Some moments are best left alone. Viv x
Tate Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 5:21 PM
Great unique expressions Viv. They weave a story that pulls the reader in. Great work here. Congrats.
Wigley Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 9:08 PM
Thanks James, much appreciated. Regards, Viv
Merryman Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 5:17 PM
Viv, a beautifully descriptive write! Not just descriptive but uniquely descriptive. I enjoyed reading this very much! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim
Wigley Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 9:09 PM
Thanks, Kim, that's very kind of you. Oh well, back to the hum-drum I go..... :) Viv x
Delaney Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 3:51 PM
Congratulations Viv: Words flow without effort into your stories. Never disappointed by your work. Hugs, SuZ
Wigley Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 9:11 PM
Thanks Suzy, I aim to please- normally miss:). Viv x
A  Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 12:21 PM
Viv,, Congratulations on the win. SKAT
Wigley Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 1:01 PM
Thanks Skat, a lovely theme with lovely results all round. Viv x
Roper Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 11:48 AM
Viv,beautiful descriptive write a 7, congratulations on you win. Hugs Eve
Wigley Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 1:03 PM
Thanks, Eve, based on a real encounter I had. Excuse me while I go and get a handkerchief....sniff..... Viv x
La France Avatar
July 22, 2015 at 9:54 PM
Viv, what an incredible writer your are, you poem is totally wonderful, 10 ++++, I was captivated by it, best of luck in the contest but it is a winner for sure and thanks for visiting my muse poem
Wigley Avatar
July 22, 2015 at 11:35 PM
Thanks, BW, nice of you to say so, and don't forget to exercise your Muse- you don't want poetic arthritis now, do you? Viv x
Laurie Avatar
July 22, 2015 at 7:10 PM
G'day Viv... what a great story, and you took me with you on your journey - just brilliant Viv - Lindsay
Wigley Avatar
July 22, 2015 at 8:18 PM
Thanks, Lindsay, I'll take that as a huge complement from the master storyteller of Longwarry. Regards, Viv
Mandani Avatar
July 22, 2015 at 4:49 PM
You captured the moment beautifully. Everybody, I believe, have this kind of moment in their lives where they tend to revisit time and again whenever they feel sad or a strong sense of longing. Nicely done.
Wigley Avatar
July 22, 2015 at 8:15 PM
Thanks, Abdul, we are complex people, and hoard things in our hearts that sometimes to others seem pointless, but we simply won't let go of. Thanks for stopping by. Regards, Viv
Horsman Avatar
July 22, 2015 at 9:58 AM
This is an amazing piece of work Viv, i know Frank will love this, in fact could it carry on, reads so interesting?
Wigley Avatar
July 22, 2015 at 12:15 PM
I wish, since it actually happened, that it could carry on, Harry, but our brief rendezvous was just that, which surpisingly is one of the strongest recollections I have, including past relationships that lasted much longer. Still, very grateful for that fleeting love at first sight smitten feeling. Gives me goosebumps even now. Thanks for the comment, and for stopping by. Regards, Viv
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July 22, 2015 at 7:08 AM
Reading that it is an actual memory adds to the experience.
Lamoureux Avatar
July 22, 2015 at 7:07 AM
This is very well expressed Viv, I thoroughly enjoyed the story.
Wigley Avatar
July 22, 2015 at 7:41 AM
Thanks, Richard, some memories remain firmly ensconced despite the years. Regards, Viv
Allison Avatar
July 22, 2015 at 4:41 AM
wow what a story Mr Viv - good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
Wigley Avatar
July 22, 2015 at 5:58 AM
A Manx thanx, Jan, seems like only yesterday. Viv x
Andresen Avatar
July 22, 2015 at 3:06 AM
- A delightful story full of beautiful colors and love, Viv - A poem that will top any contest list ~ best of luck ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Wigley Avatar
July 22, 2015 at 4:25 AM
Thanks, Anne Lise, you're very kind. I sat up at three o'clock this morning and basically typed out my memory of that day, with very little editing, so I suppose it qualifies as free verse. Viv x
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