Love In a Beauty Fair - a 'Kawaali'

Love in a Beauty Fair

My Poem in the format of a Kawaali – in English 

Male Singer 01 	/ Group of singers


I  hear that we are in a fair,           of  Husno-Adda* and  beauty,
Still,       I am,  in search of a heart,                         full of Love,


Female Singer 01 / Group of singers:


This  is a gathering of Beauty and graceful ones,      not a crowd  of lovers,
The one who is ready, to sacrifice       everything, may possess the beauty.



Male Singer 02   / Group of singers:


Take a test of our Love my dear,           or come close to test my love, 
Still if your beauty is not satisfied,     just try the love at-least for ones,



Female Singer 02 / Group of singers:

O what you are crying as Love & Love me,        is not that simple my   dear,
There are lovers who sacrifice even their life,       still they do not  get  love,


Male Singer 03/ Group of singers:


You are narrating  a  story,      because you have not,         yet seen     love,
When your Beauty would relish love,   you would be searching love everywhere.


Female Singer 03 / Group of singers:


This is what you say my dear,      it  is only first time that we  have met here,
Let me see your splendors of love,  or it is just a way of yours,  to mold me,



Male Singer 04 / Group of singers:


After witnessing the splendors of love, you may find you cannot live without it, anymore,
Feeling the extreme agonies,  you may repent,  but then you won’t find the love
anywhere, 


Female Singer 04 / Group of singers:


O,  if it is like that, let    me    the    see,       the      splendors of  your Love,
You say that I shall be dying on that love,  O, let me die to witness, what you say,



Male Singer 05 / Group of singers:


We are wasting these precious moments of love, talking about living or dying,
Let us live these lovely moments in love,        instead of talking to live or die.


Female Singer 05  / Group of singers:


O,  I can sacrifice  even my life,                on this molding art of yours, my love,
Perhaps beauty is  hidden in love      but             Love is nothing without beauty.


Together they sing 06 /Group of singers:


It is not a thing of dying or living,        nor   a  fight     between   beauty   and love,

It is only,    the art of  living  and       loving,        which  creates only cheerfulness.



Ravindra
Kanpur India   22nd Oct 2010
Clarifications
* Husno-Adda.  The graceful art of showing the beauty of women.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Freeman Avatar
October 24, 2010 at 11:38 AM
In it own unique way Ravindra, the beauty of the female form in it's entirty is the feminine manifestation of the essence of love's self! As is your free verse expression. Agape, Moses
K. Avatar
October 24, 2010 at 11:25 AM
thank you so much for your inspiring comments-- I appreciate each one of them-- enjoy your day and keep writing Ravindra :) sorry again for the confusion :)
K. Avatar
October 24, 2010 at 11:24 AM
Hi Ravindra :) I really admire how you enlighten us with the beauty of this poetic form of India and it sure is very interesting to read-- I enjoyed reading the replies from the male & females-- definitely adds another layer to the poem and I agree it probably is even better when sung-- :) thank you for sharing this with us-- btw pls forgive my silliness-- I'm actually nikko palmario-- & you've passed by and left wonderful comments on my poetry before :) --I was just being silly this october
Dietrich Avatar
October 23, 2010 at 9:37 PM
What Carolyn says is so true. This is from your culture, RAvindra, and I don't know what we amerians reading it could do to improve on it. It's unique to YOU and I bet it is enchanting to hear it sung. LUv, Andrea
Guzzi Avatar
October 23, 2010 at 7:02 AM
Please add your wisdom to the discussion on my blog today regarding Qi or Prana! Light & Love
Devonshire Avatar
October 23, 2010 at 6:46 AM
Very, very beautiful form and the message about love is demonstrated with incredible style, Ravindra. Don't change any of it. It's perfect and it goes to my favorites! Love, Carolyn
La France Avatar
October 22, 2010 at 12:24 PM
many beautiful lines within this poem, don't change a thing, just let the beauty of the words sing~~
Richards Avatar
October 22, 2010 at 8:02 AM
This is so lovely, that changing it would be a shame, Ravindra...so please do leave it as the beauty it is. This new form is so facinating, and would be lovely to hear it sung. You are an artist with words! ~ Carrie
Effendi Avatar
October 22, 2010 at 7:48 AM
Exquisite! This is really a piece of art. Though there are some minor spelling mistakes but marvellous write Ravindra!
Mehta Avatar
October 22, 2010 at 6:32 AM
very many challenges coming from each side and that is the soul of Kawaali, Ravindra. I can visualize how would it be rendered in Hindi with hilarious responses from the audience.
Sweetheart Avatar
October 22, 2010 at 5:17 AM
Ravindra I would not change one word..this is simply beautiful and elegant as written and its very clear and expressive as well.. my friend.. the love emits from the lines themselves ... and the connection is very evident luv.. once a poem is written by the author .. it should stand on its own merit as this one exceeds that ... therefore my opinion.. leave as it was originally penned... thankxxx for the enjoyment of this creative piece today with luv..
Sweetheart Avatar
October 22, 2010 at 5:14 AM
Soup Mail ..my friend with luv..
Kapoor Avatar
October 21, 2010 at 10:30 PM
I welcome if some of my Poetry Soup friends would like to make some changes to make it in perfect singing form. Ravindra
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