Vijay Pandit Poet Rhyme

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July 15, 2023
Placed 1st:To The One I Lost Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Anoucheka Gangabissoon

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Love Gone Awry

Beneath smile exotic, gleaming moon’s delight,
We embraced romance of a passionate night,
Whispering deep secrets of moments sublime
Unveiling sweet story of undying-love in prime,

Of promises eternal, pledging together forever,
Journeying through life’s endearing endeavor,
Vowing to traverse through oceans of ardour
Eying abode amorous, vying tomorrow’s shore.

Alas! love soon turned errant, choosing to detour,
Straying from accords youthful, but immature,
Rejecting once enamored elation of evermore,
Opting bliss in yonder beyond passions of yore.

In solitude we bid goodbyes to love gone awry
Lamenting wistfulness frequenting pensive sigh
Saddened by bleak story, woefully incomplete,
When dissonant forlorn vibes, accepted defeat.

Yet, we found pathways renewing our dreams,
Reinvigorating assonance of past broken themes
As fervid interests, on divergent paths aligned,
Rewriting ending of story, destiny had designed.

Hosting moments solitary, as I often think of you,
Rekindling in your embrace, love we once knew,
Reminded I am, how memories have feelings too,
Though melodies they strum, no longer ring true.

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Christina Bowring August 17, 2023 at 3:13 PM A truly lovely, so well written poem Vijay. The last stanza, in particular, is wonderful. Loved it! Thank you for sharing. Warmest wishes and congratulations.

Paula Goldsmith August 17, 2023 at 11:35 AM Congratulations on your win. Good memories are the best kind but cannot turn back time. Have a great day with your win............

The Situation July 20, 2023 at 5:52 PM makes me wonder could I go back to my Ex wife. No. she broke her vows. But this poem is how it goes. Vijay Pandit July 21, 2023 at 11:51 AM Thank for stopping by--much appreciate.

Mike Gentile July 20, 2023 at 7:29 AM Vijay, I just love the idea that"memories have feelings too" as usual, you have filled your lines with powerful imagery! You are sure to do well in the contest!! Happy Thursday! Vijay Pandit July 21, 2023 at 11:50 AM Many thanks, Mike--much appreciate.

Andrea Dietrich July 19, 2023 at 8:48 PM Emotive and lovely, Vijay. Best of luck in the contest Vijay Pandit July 21, 2023 at 11:50 AM Thank you Andrea--much appreciate.

Heidi Sands July 19, 2023 at 2:23 PM I can feel this Vijay. Well written and excellent last stanza . Yes, memories have feelings too. Good luck in the contest :) Vijay Pandit July 21, 2023 at 11:50 AM Thank you my friend. Much appreciate your kind feedback, Heidi.

Deb M July 19, 2023 at 11:42 AM Absolutely beautiful Vijay! Heart touching and sad all comforted by sweet memories! Special…..Debx Vijay Pandit July 21, 2023 at 11:49 AM Thank you Deb--much appreciate.

Evelyn Judy Buehler July 18, 2023 at 11:40 AM Such sadness when lovers have grown apart, but hopefully, the sorrow of what might have been, is soon replaced by the joy of what is to be. A beautiful work, Vijay. :) Vijay Pandit July 21, 2023 at 11:49 AM Much appreciate Evelyn--many thanks.

Judy Ball July 18, 2023 at 5:27 AM Ah young love, first love seldom lasts forever although at the time we think it will. The pain of losing that first love is awful at best but time wounds all heels and heals all wounds if we allow it to and we do in time find the love of our life. Great write my friend. Good luck in the contest. God Bless, JB Vijay Pandit July 21, 2023 at 11:49 AM Thank you Judy. You are always very kind my friend.

Sotto Poet July 17, 2023 at 10:42 PM Vijay, your poetic creation is a profound testament to the intricacies of love and the weight of sorrow, forever etching memories within our souls. Your words possess a profound ability to evoke feelings within any heart. Love tragically unraveling stirs poignant recollections. Initially, it blossomed, as if the heavens themselves had converged upon the enamored souls. Please accept my sincere apologies for the brevity of my feedback, as my current sojourn restricts my internet access. Vijay Pandit July 21, 2023 at 11:48 AM Much appreciate you stopping by with your kind remarks, my friend. Many thanks, Lasaad.

Valsa George July 17, 2023 at 8:00 PM A love gone awry leaves painful memories. It was begun on a vibrant note.There was a time when Heaven seemed to have come down before the lovers. But through the rwist of fate, they had to part ways. Though there have been efforts to join the snapped ties, it couldn't be restored. "Though melodies they strum, no longer ring true." Great closing ! Beautiful. Vijay Pandit July 21, 2023 at 11:47 AM Much appreciate your insightful remarks, Valsa. Many thanks.

Victor Buhagiar July 17, 2023 at 7:43 AM After four days in hospital, could not keep up with reading your poetry. A very emotive poem, where love is lost Vijay Pandit July 21, 2023 at 11:46 AM Glad you are back, feeling better, Victor. Much appreciate--many thanks.

Sara Kendrick July 16, 2023 at 7:13 AM I know that it would be a very lonely time if a person's lover/mate left in one way or another. I can feel the pain in these lines. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us and for dropping by my page. Sara Vijay Pandit July 17, 2023 at 5:01 AM So very true. Those feelings left behind can be very complex and hurtful. Much appreciate your insights, as always, Sara. Many thanks.

Joseph P. DiMino July 15, 2023 at 7:01 PM "Hosting moments solitary, as I often think of you, Rekindling in your embrace, love we once knew, Reminded I am, how memories have feelings too, Though melodies they strum, no longer ring true." -- we cope by recalling the good. Sincere and heartfelt poetry. Excellent! Vijay Pandit July 17, 2023 at 5:00 AM Glad you stopped by my friend. Always appreciate your thoughtful insights, Joe. I like the lines you picked out as well. Many thanks, as always.

Brandy Nicole July 15, 2023 at 6:49 PM "I am reminded that, memories have feelings too, yet; they no longer ring true." Such a sad moment, indeed. Your words tug at my heart so deeply. This is beautiful, tender and emotional, all at the same time. My best to you, Vijay. Hugs, Brandy Vijay Pandit July 17, 2023 at 4:58 AM Always a joy to read your comments my friend. Much appreciate your kind feedback, Brandy. Many thanks.

Eve Roper July 15, 2023 at 5:52 PM Like always a beautiful write. Vijay Pandit July 17, 2023 at 4:57 AM So glad to see you again, Eve. Much appreciate your visit and kind feedback. Many thanks.

Sally Eslinger July 15, 2023 at 5:45 PM Wow! The music of your rhyming and alliteration rang within me. LOVED the last stanza. Oersonification of memories themselves having feelings never occurred to me before, Magnificent! My hugs, sally Vijay Pandit July 17, 2023 at 4:56 AM So nice to hear that from the one who writes beautiful poetry. Glad you noticed the line about memories having feelings too. Much appreciate--many thanks, Sally.

Bill Baker July 15, 2023 at 4:25 PM Beautiful poetry, Vijay. A poem of love and loss and memories forever. Thanks for sharing your poetry with us my friend. Bill Vijay Pandit July 17, 2023 at 4:54 AM Much appreciate my friend. Many thanks for your visit and kind remarks, Bill.