Love Everlasting

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Entry for Bite Size no96 Poetry Contest: Sponsored by: Line Gauthier

I felt her fingers brush against my own then, glancing from my book, our eyes slow meet; I see her recognition, for a fleet. We’ve been awhile together, I alone since times dark shadow cast its mourning veil; still, I will be here ‘til our last exhale.

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John Read

Date: 12/31/2024 6:39:00 AM

Hi Terry congratulations on your placement in the contest.

Terry Miller
Date: 1/3/2025 5:21:00 AM

Thank you John and a Happy New Year

Line Gauthier

Date: 12/30/2024 7:06:00 PM

L5 I think your apostrophe is in the wrong place in this line and line shiuld read "since time's dark shadow cast its mourning veil;" L6 According to references, TILL (no apostrophe) is the more traditional and formal spelling, while 'TIL (with apostrophe) is a more casual contraction of the word "until".

Terry Miller
Date: 12/31/2024 1:33:00 AM

Thank you I have made the edits, very constructive, and thank you for the placement.