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 MARK MASSEY orginally created a tune to go with my lyrics. He says he had to take it off Youtube, but he found a way for people to still hear it at this link:

 

https://youtu.be/nhG4tn7TQy8

Barefoot we spend our time in spring, Just giggling kids - how sweet the dream When we, in love are blossoming. We splash inside a cool fresh stream. Our time in spring - how sweet the dream! A few years pass; there comes an ache for something more in summertime. We feel such heat! Down by the lake we soothe our ache. It is sublime down by the lake in summertime! Refrain: Love is a stream, and then it grows. A river soon - through life it flows! And two enduring to the end see love become an ocean then! A rushing river, wanting more, through highs and lows, still so in love, we roll down to the ocean’s shore where memories we’ve plenty of! We stroll fall’s shore, still so in love. An ocean of devotion lies ahead of us – deep like the sea. Our souls live on; the greatest prize - to share out love eternally! Oh winter’s love, deep like the sea Refrain: Love is a stream, and then it grows A river soon, through life it flows! And two enduring to the end see love becomes an ocean then! written for Bobby May's 'Your Interpretation of what Love is' Poetry Contest Now submitted for the '2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 6' Poetry Contest Sponsor: Mark Toney

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Date: 7/10/2022 11:30:00 PM
A great poem with a beautiful refrain. Congratulations!
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Date: 7/9/2022 9:37:00 AM
Congrats Andrea, I still have the old recording and can send it to you if you want. I will tell why it was taken down from YouTube in Soupmail.
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Mark Massey
Date: 7/12/2022 8:45:00 PM
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nhG4tn7TQy8 Try this Andrea
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 7/9/2022 10:42:00 AM
also I deleted the link to the video which isn't there but I can't get that other thing to come down, where it says Video unavailable.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 7/9/2022 10:37:00 AM
oh i would really appreciate that. Can you email me it? I will go to Soupmail and give you info. I also want to know why you had to take it down.
Date: 7/9/2022 9:13:00 AM
So melodic is your wonderful write. Well deserving of your win! Congrats!
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Date: 7/9/2022 6:11:00 AM
Andrea, This is lovely. Love seen flowing and growing deeper, wider and stronger as it journeys from its source (Childhood love in all its naivety) down by the lake (youthful love with all its excitement) to the ocean (adult love and all its realities) Cheers - Gary
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Date: 7/8/2022 10:44:00 PM
From a trickle, it is so thrilling to watch love growing into a stream, a river and then into an ocean of limitless breadth and length ! From the giggling kids to adoring man and woman, love has been steadily growing with fluid ease. Congratulations on your great win Andrea !
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Date: 7/8/2022 1:01:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. A wonderful story/write. Have a great/blessed day.......................
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Date: 7/8/2022 12:37:00 PM
Andrea, I love the flow from a stream to a lake, then a river into an ocean. "An ocean of devotion." And when you get to be my age, "Oh winter's love, deep like the sea"! Congratulations on your win on Mile 6 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Mile 7 has already started!
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Date: 7/8/2022 11:39:00 AM
I love how fluid and flowing your lines are, reflecting the movement of the stream/river/lake/ocean you depict. Beautiful imagery of love growing over time. Your meter is so spot on, I can see why this would have made a lovely song lyric. Congrats for another marathon win!
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Date: 8/13/2020 12:16:00 PM
Love the thought here of two in love starting out as streams and love becoming stronger in time, likened to the ocean. Sadly, the youtube link no longer works, so I wasn't able to hear the tune.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/13/2020 1:16:00 PM
crap, he took it down?? It was some guy at Soup who did a few tunes for some of us, put our poems to music.
Date: 6/22/2019 9:50:00 AM
Congrats Andrea-- nice linking of music and poem!
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Date: 1/15/2019 4:31:00 PM
Love your interpretation of love, Andrea! Congrats on your First Place win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 1/15/2019 12:57:00 PM
- A beautiful song, Andrea :) - A well deserved 1st place - We all deserve to experience true love, which makes us happy :) - Love sometimes hurts, but it never causes harm intentionally :) - In other words, to love someone good you must love yourself and be prepared for everything :) - Congratulations on your winning poem ... we all hunt for love :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/15/2019 12:24:00 PM
Wonderful poem Andrea! Congratulations on your top win :) xomo!
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Date: 1/15/2019 10:50:00 AM
WoW! Andrea, You've penned a good interpretation of love. I see why you're in the top spot. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis
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Date: 1/15/2019 10:17:00 AM
Congratulations Andrea, on your top win. A beautiful poem!
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Date: 1/15/2019 10:00:00 AM
Congratulations on your win my friend!
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Date: 4/13/2018 9:12:00 PM
Wow - lovely. Beautiful, Andrea.
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Date: 3/18/2017 7:24:00 PM
I just found this! One word! AWESOME!
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Date: 3/14/2017 4:52:00 AM
It was great to hear your lyrics composed by MARK MASSEY. The music and the song is quite appealing. Once again warm Greetings and congratulations dear friend. Love and best wishes always...Ravindra K Kapoor
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Date: 2/19/2017 11:32:00 PM
Ohh, I already commented, but I have to add now that the music is outstanding. This is wonderful :D
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Date: 2/15/2017 7:34:00 AM
Outstanding Andrea, heart felt congratulations your placement...
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Date: 2/14/2017 12:44:00 AM
What a LOVELY song this is, breathtaking. That refrain is a beaut. Congratulations, Andrea :)
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Date: 2/13/2017 7:16:00 PM
Touches the heart
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Date: 7/18/2016 4:54:00 PM
A sweet, nostalgic write, Andrea! Congrats on your 1st place win! Blessings!
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Date: 7/16/2016 4:22:00 PM
Excellently done my lovely smiling friend. Loved much this poem along with the last lines "An ocean of devotion flows deep as the sea. An autumn love - deep as the sea!". Congrats on your superb win. A beautiful 7. Loved always, bl
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