Pace Ink-U-Script Poet Free verse

Love At First Sight

Love was in the air when he laid eyes on her.
Childhood; elementary and even high school with her.
Walking towards her, he greeted her.
Anxiety spiraled as he hugged her.
Conversation grew deeper as he sat with her.
Wanting to get closer because he was falling for her.

Another woman called pausing the time he was having with her.
Knowing he had to answer; he stepped away and spoke to her.
She stated that something wasn't quite right with her.
She said that her stomach had been bothering her.
Now he's thinking back if he came inside her.
Thinking if she lied to him about her tubes being tied within her.

Does he blame himself for listening to her?
Knowing right from wrong and yet he can't blame her.
Does he blame the devil for allowing him to be intimate with her?
Is he not a human that makes mistakes just like her?
Begging God to make a way for him and her.
Asking God to forgive him for committing the sin with her.

God said, "relax my son, you were only dreaming of her."

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Mahtab Bangalee November 26, 2019 at 9:58 PM it's so beautiful poem; lovingly penned

Brenda Chiri November 5, 2019 at 2:39 AM Ha talk about good writing!;) I couldn't tell a story if my life depended on it! Haha like the ending though! Yes I can say thank god!;) but ya know! Loved this but what's new as you... comments are entertaining to say the least and knowing your a man of few words..so I will say the least.. love your work!;)

Lisa Costigan July 7, 2016 at 2:10 PM rEALLY ENJOYED THIS WELL WRITTEN

Trisha Sugarek September 11, 2014 at 8:23 AM Very nice. Congrats. I couldn't find your comment to me about Haiku so I'm doing it this way (8>( Thank you. I just posted a new 'blog' with another Haiku for 9.11 best always, Trish

Chidiogo Ibe April 27, 2014 at 1:13 PM Good read. I especially love the part of 'relax, you were only dreaming of her' and how the disconnect between stanza one and two shows it was a dream state. I never knew until the end though. Keep it up Pace Ink-U-Script April 28, 2014 at 8:28 AM Thank you so kindly for the visit. This is one of my first writes when I got here on the Soup. Please feel free to check out my latest when you can. I'll stop by to visit you...Thanks again!

Andrea Travis November 2, 2012 at 1:46 PM Post Script: I just got the "her" at the verses ends. That rocks! I gotta try that. Whadda ya call that, I'm just pencil, but your definitely a pen! re: "Love at first sight" andreatravis

Andrea Travis November 2, 2012 at 1:41 PM WOW! "Love at first sight". That blew me away. I feel like I got to peek inside your soul, just a small view of the beautiful and unexpected, YOU. Anticipating more! andreatravis

Doreen Wright July 28, 2012 at 9:57 PM "Conversation grew deeper as he sat with her...." I absolutely love it!! This flowed well. Great poem INK!! Pace Ink-U-Script August 19, 2012 at 6:49 AM Thank you dearly Doreen...hugs!!!

Melanie Tan June 19, 2012 at 4:27 AM One word for this,Pace~~ REFRESHING!! I'm loving it!xoxo-Melly Pace Ink-U-Script June 19, 2012 at 2:18 PM Lol..Thank you for sharing with me!!

Justcallme Britt June 4, 2012 at 7:09 PM I REALLY like this! I REALLY like your poetry Pace <3 Pace Ink-U-Script June 4, 2012 at 8:29 PM Thank you beautiful!!! Hugs

Fisayo Aderounmu June 2, 2012 at 8:46 AM This to me is heart written than hand written Pace G, i appreciate every of your kind comments on my page. Luv you. Pace Ink-U-Script June 2, 2012 at 9:18 AM All smiles!!! Thank you dearly!!

Carma Sanderson June 2, 2012 at 12:07 AM "Wow... OMG!!!! wOW.... that was intence babe... thats all that i can say. Carma" Pace Ink-U-Script June 2, 2012 at 12:33 AM Thank you madam Carma!!

Twanna Irisha May 18, 2012 at 12:36 PM Very nice...lol...msde me blush a lil Pace Ink-U-Script May 18, 2012 at 12:50 PM lol..is that right?!..hmm!!!

Maureen Lefanue May 18, 2012 at 12:18 AM Glad you enjoyed my Time And Chance poem, Pace. Interesting poem - quite a surprise at the end. Well written. God bless, Maureen Pace Ink-U-Script May 18, 2012 at 3:45 AM Lol..well thank you!!

Danielle Lewis May 7, 2012 at 7:37 PM such trickery slick one.... I love this one. Your a bad man!!!! (smile). Pace Ink-U-Script May 7, 2012 at 7:41 PM Lmao!! Glad you enjoyed it

Terry L. Allen April 25, 2012 at 8:48 PM I much enjoyed the originality and honesty of this poem. Well thought out and well written. I must say though often in dreams we come out luckier than in reality. Have a blessed life Huggs TLee Pace Ink-U-Script April 26, 2012 at 2:35 AM Thank you for stopping by and sharing your thoughts..you are so true..luv and hugs!!

Andrea Dietrich April 24, 2012 at 6:37 PM WEll, that was great making it a dream, G. I imagine a guy feels very stressed hearing a woman say something is "not quite right" with her! I like how you made it into something ethical, discussing feelings of guilt and how it was a sin. That is refreshing to see! Pace Ink-U-Script April 24, 2012 at 7:55 PM lol..Thank you..yes your are correct all the way!!

Anne-Lise Andresen April 22, 2012 at 2:39 PM Sweet dreaming G. - well written poem. -oxox Anne-Lise Pace Ink-U-Script April 22, 2012 at 3:06 PM Thank you beautiful for stopping by!! hugs

Joseph May April 22, 2012 at 9:41 AM splendid write G....regards...Joseph Pace Ink-U-Script April 22, 2012 at 10:07 AM Thanks a million!!! Always enjoy your presence.

Chiquitachiamaka Baity April 21, 2012 at 3:57 PM Nice one G Pace...as usual... smiles.... chiquita Pace Ink-U-Script April 21, 2012 at 5:05 PM Thank you sweetheart!!

Deborah Burch April 21, 2012 at 2:49 PM Nice job G!! really good rythm...it raps good too ;)...just sayin... keep that pen movin' my friend--big hugs love deb Pace Ink-U-Script April 21, 2012 at 3:02 PM Well thank you! If only I knew how to rap...lol