Lost Ones

Fire on the mountain and smoke in the sky, red embers floating then settling in dry timber crackling like crunching bones goes on forever howling in the distance of lost homes, lost ones thick charred air choking, clogging breathing throats singed, black blood emerging closer and hotter, confusion, no way out fate deciding its own course angry nature consumes her evening meal. George Aul 09/15/2015 Contest judged: 10/02/2015 Trashed #3, sponsor, Broken Wings

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Neva Romaine

Date: 11/10/2015 2:36:00 PM

Hey George, a hearty congratulations on your winning poem in the Trashed #3 contest. A truly sad storyline here - and acknowledgement of the loss of those dear souls - whose lives were lost. Excellent writing. Be Blessed, Neva

George Aul
Date: 11/11/2015 11:12:00 AM

Thank you for the comment........... George

Jan Allison

Date: 11/9/2015 1:27:00 PM

Many congrats at your win in the trashed #3 contest George:-) hugs Jan xx

Skat A

Date: 11/9/2015 11:06:00 AM

George, Congratulations on your Trashed #3 win. SKAT

George Aul
Date: 11/9/2015 11:35:00 AM

Thanks very much, SKAT........... George

Edwardj Clark

Date: 9/15/2015 2:02:00 PM

Hi George, well written. Could you explain the poem to me please. Thanks Edward

George Aul
Date: 9/16/2015 9:55:00 AM

They (whoever they are) say that it is better to let your works explain themselves, but I will tell you the thought behind.... Wildfires destroy and kill many things including the homes and lives of many animals. This was a look at both those events using three senses as outlined in the contest. Hope that helped, thanks for the comment.......... George