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Lost In a Melancholy

I remember when I met you...
I was just a scared kid who knew
Life was thirsty for all my tears.
You told me it would be okay,
I believed, but to my dismay,
You were wrong...it was what I feared.
Your optimism did nothing...
Except make this all more crushing,
Like I’m being stabbed by a spear.
Well, I guess life just likes to sting,
As it devours lovely things,
And empties my soul ‘til it’s clear.

I remember when I met you...
Neither of us had any clue,
That you would leave the world so soon.
You told me all would be benign...
Did you think that lying was fine?
Melancholy, life’s worst tune...
Music to it’s horrible ears,
As it watches us cry for years,
And darkness touches sky at noon.
People like you deserve better,
Not the short life you’d endeavoured,
Ruthless like winter in mid June.

But...as I stand next to your grave,
Beautiful music of heaven
Washes over me like a wave.


For the "A Poem about DEATH" Contest
Sponsored by Broken Wings (Constance)
Theme was "devours lovely things."
Form was Hutinashro (I had to try out my new form a little more)
Rhyme scheme is Aabccbddbeeb Aabccbddbeeb aba
Slightly linked to my poem Isolation
Third Place
5/14/2018

Thanks for reading!
I feel like this is much better than Color, but STILL DOESN'T USE THE DARN IAMBIC TETRAMETER.  So, I'm gonna try to write one with iambic tetrameter soon.  For MORE clarification.  (And to prove that I know what I'm doing.)

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Jeff Connelly September 27, 2019 at 10:05 AM Connor, a somber well written poem, that I hope was not inspired by the loss of someone in your life; but it does carry this weight. Thank you.

Mahtab Bangalee October 31, 2018 at 4:19 AM O' nightly dark Flute is crying here lonely from afar /// superbly written the poem

Andrea Dietrich June 17, 2018 at 3:28 PM this is called getting inspired by another's contest. I'm glad to see you placed using your own hutinashro form for Broken Wings! I'm going to finally work on a poem for your contest!! Congrats for your win. Your poem had great depth of feeling.

Line Gauthier June 2, 2018 at 9:09 PM Awesome poem, Connor. Superbly done. Congrats on your well deserved win.

Constance La France May 19, 2018 at 10:42 PM Connor, congratulations on your win in my contest with this awesome write, well done ~

Susan Gentry May 19, 2018 at 11:43 AM I like this form. I'm wanting to figure out iambic tetrameter too. Congratulations on your win with this sorrowful poem of loss.

Jan Allison May 18, 2018 at 2:23 PM well done Connor:-) hugs jan x

Heidi Sands May 18, 2018 at 1:44 PM Excellent! Congratulations for your win with this well written poem :)

Anne-Lise Andresen May 18, 2018 at 12:26 PM - A poem about death represent the emotional ... we have all death in wait   - That's how it's always been, but still difficult - Congratulations on your 3rd place in the contest, Connor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)