Losing It (Five Haiku)

kaleidoscopic!
not those here-and-now colors
but    in memory

cloudy sky is filled
full of black    twiggy branches
a large crow shoots past

picket fence and trees
standing tall    like sentinels
like     sad    sentinels

comes-on quietly
so benign the sensation
so bloody empty!

this revelation
times    at last    you think you know
shrug!    alas    you don’t

fleeting memory
self-flagellation    head-shake
another one lost

again    and    again
scene full of twiggy branches
black crow descending

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 4/20/2010 9:56:00 AM
Wow ,,,all them haikus are pwerful,,nice deep writes on the side we do not like to see..p.d.
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Date: 4/8/2010 1:07:00 PM
Daver, I really enjoyed these. But I count seven, not five! This all reminds me of getting old and how fleeting our memory is. Good ones number 5 and 6 to capture that idea. Love your haiku,and I found number 2 to be the most like the kinds of haiku that get into the magazines just for haiku. Thanks for your sweet comments today. Did you know those two poems that happened to get featured were two of my entries for the soups contest? LUv, Andrea
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Date: 3/2/2010 8:35:00 PM
That is the best set of haiku I've read . Very deep.. Strong in each one...Keeping each one so real. I really enjoyed reading ..
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Date: 1/31/2010 3:39:00 PM
Great 5 Haiku, Daver. I am impressed ...again! :) Especially that fourth Haiku is deja vu for me....-Robert
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Date: 1/31/2010 10:26:00 AM
Hi, Daver, great images... life images alive to those who read... and partake. Thanks for sharing your words. Lovingly, Dane Ann
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Date: 1/16/2010 9:56:00 AM
Great stuff, Daver!...MANY interpretations to consider...'another one lost'...love it! - Tim
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Date: 1/13/2010 6:38:00 AM
The likes of an Edgar Allen Poe write Daver ! Great work ! james
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Date: 1/12/2010 6:31:00 AM
Outstanding haiku! Very creative and picturesque! Well done, my poetic friend! Milt
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Date: 1/12/2010 5:30:00 AM
Intersting write that you have penned here. Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
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Date: 1/11/2010 9:31:00 AM
Great sequential in Haikus Daver. Reminds me of the many times I thought I had my purpose figured out, only to be proven wrong. Smile, Sincerely, Moses
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Date: 1/9/2010 11:42:00 AM
Powerful poem, Daver! The black crow deserves a sequel; I want to see him soar again, aided by the knowledge of the "revelation" and not destroyed by it. Awesome writing, my friend! Love you, Carolyn
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Date: 1/7/2010 6:19:00 PM
OOOOOh! This sent shivers up my , spine.... Dave, Love, Lainie.
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Date: 1/7/2010 12:07:00 PM
Your creative style is a treat to read. Good use of imagery. Yes, West Fargo, ND...and it's bitter cold and windy today. Kind of takes your breath away. Keep warm in Michigan and keep on writing. Thank you for your kind comment. Karen
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Date: 1/7/2010 8:34:00 AM
The could mean so many things to each of us....it seems to me, there are memories of past mistakes, regrets, errors in judgement, and pain that continue to hover like crows.... Let us build a HUGE enduring scarecrow, and rid ourselves!! :) Well done, Daver! (I may have missed the point?) .....Luv, Carrie
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