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Towering As towers do A monolithic mass Fills the canvas and the room Green glass mountains Deep and dark and without reflection Draw you in and your gaze Up To a thread of eclipsed sky Where burning In silhouette Clings a raptor To its man made crag 1/13/2020 Cityscape Poetry Contest Sponsor Julia Ward

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Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 5/25/2020 3:13:00 PM

Love this poem - exceptional perspective as well as imagery!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/25/2020 3:21:00 PM

Thank you Mala! It is based on an actual painting of a factual falcon and building. It still hangs on my wall, but lives too on the cover of former Soup poet Darren White's poetry collection, "Intrinsic Brightness". I am still in love with the peregrine falcons though I rarely see them anymore. xomo

Aditi Mishra

Date: 5/9/2020 3:37:00 AM

"Green glass mountains Deep and dark and without reflection", I love the imagination. It is tainted yet soothing at the same time.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/9/2020 7:17:00 AM

Thank you Aditi! It is an image ingested that has been seeping from me for years. The building and the bird were real, as is the the painting, I have written of it before (Peregrine Falcon), and a wonderful poet who has since left the soup, Darren White, used it for the cover of his first book of poetry, "Intrinsic Brightness" (you can find it on line). Have a great day! xomo

Line Gauthier

Date: 2/5/2020 3:22:00 PM

Congrats on your well deserved podium finish, Maureen.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/6/2020 7:12:00 AM

Thank you Line. Warm hugs, xomo

John Watt

Date: 2/5/2020 11:56:00 AM

Maureen, congrats on your top placement in the Cityscape contest. I took a peek at the cover of Darren White's book, and as is the case with good architecture and hope-filled poetry, the eye is drawn in and up. Reading this was a delight ~ John

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/6/2020 7:11:00 AM

Thank you John. :))) xomo!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 2/5/2020 11:22:00 AM

Maureen, Congratulations on your top placement. I love your imagery and can picture this cityscape. I also love the twist at the end with the raptor! So creative!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/6/2020 7:09:00 AM

Thank you Sam! :) xomo

Constance La France

Date: 2/5/2020 8:44:00 AM

Maureen, congratulations on your win in the contest _Constance

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/6/2020 7:07:00 AM

Thank you Constance, xomo

Beata Agustin

Date: 2/5/2020 8:38:00 AM

Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... very picturesque. God bless you.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/6/2020 7:01:00 AM

Thank you Beata. Warm hugs, xomo

Gary Radice

Date: 2/5/2020 5:54:00 AM

Excellent poem. TBH all 3 winners' poems have been exceptional.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/5/2020 7:34:00 AM

Thank you Gary! xomo

Julia Ward

Date: 2/5/2020 3:34:00 AM

The last two lines put the imagery into a strong perspective and make us reflect on what we have lost in allowing the creation of high-rise cities. Well done for its high ranking of second place in my contest, Maureen!

Indiana Shaw

Date: 2/3/2020 7:58:00 PM

Perfect . . .

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/5/2020 7:35:00 AM

Thank you Lovely! xomo

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 1/24/2020 1:49:00 PM

This has wonderful imagery, Maureen - keep up the great work!

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 1/15/2020 9:04:00 AM

Wow your imagery and depiction in words is so poetic and awesome, I'm admiring your monolithic , green glass mountains. Raptor makes me think of dinos. Kudos. Pls pleez do review/ comment my newest poem too.

Jeff Connelly

Date: 1/14/2020 4:38:00 PM

This is a wonderful image Maureen. I live close to Harrisburg, Pennsylvania, though the capital it's not a very big city; but there are a family of Peregrines that have been living here for years. I can vividly see the image you have written. Beautiful!!! Thank you.

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 1/14/2020 9:49:00 AM

Some of you may have seen this painting, I have been honoured to have it featured on the cover of Darren White's collection of poetry, "Entrinsic Brightness". Though, in my eye, for Darren, fittingly, my falcon transformed into a raven.

Indiana Shaw
Date: 2/3/2020 7:54:00 PM

Seen the cover Mo, nice piece of artwork; looks like it fits in perfectly with Darren's writes, congratulations to the artist and the poet, dark horse you . . . : )

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/24/2020 1:49:00 PM

Daren has a book? Super!

Jeff Connelly
Date: 1/14/2020 4:42:00 PM

I have not Maureen. This is one of your paintings? I will look for it. I have a day off tomorrow. But it's cool that you have a painting and now a verbal painting poem expressing the same subject. Now you need to make a short art film about the same subject lol cover all the bases. (You don't have a tattoo of this on you???)

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/14/2020 4:23:00 AM

Both ugly and beautiful is the skyline in our cities Maureen, well written. Tom

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 1/14/2020 7:27:00 AM

The skyline has been a preoccupation in my paintings for years~ Thank you Tom, hugs! xomo