Longing

How I long to be like the wind, 
Blowing softly through your hair.
A gentle breeze to touch your skin, 
A silent whisper just to be there!
~
How I long to be the chosen flower, 
You pick for your crystal vase.
Placed in your lighted bower, 
So I can see your face!
~
How I long to be like a raindrop, 
Gently clinging to your skin.
Creating rainbows that never stop, 
And happiness within!
~
© Bjørn O. Wastvedt, 2017

longingloveromancequintain (english)

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Joanna Daniel

November 27, 2017 at 8:56 AM

This is great poetry, Bjørn, welcome to Poetry Soup:)

Bjorn Wastvedt

November 30, 2017 at 12:23 AM

Thank you, Jo! :)

Elaine George

November 26, 2017 at 6:19 PM

Absolutely beautiful!!! Sincerely, Elaine

Bjorn Wastvedt

November 30, 2017 at 12:23 AM

Thank you, Elaine! :)

Akkina Downing

November 18, 2017 at 7:08 AM

It's a sad feeling of longing for something we could never have. But Bjorn, this was well expressed and beautiful. Welcome to souppoetry new friend... hugs and smiles :)

Bjorn Wastvedt

November 18, 2017 at 11:20 AM

So true - thank you, Akkina! :)

Line Gauthier

November 17, 2017 at 10:53 PM

Beautiful and very romantic.

Bjorn Wastvedt

November 18, 2017 at 12:15 AM

Thank you, Line! :)

Isor Chand

November 17, 2017 at 2:06 PM

Oh a Second Shakespeare Alive !!! Great job to your mind blowing poem...

Bjorn Wastvedt

November 17, 2017 at 10:34 PM

Thank You, Isor! :)

Edward Mccall

November 12, 2017 at 7:43 AM

You paint so beautifully with words Bjorn I can't wait to read your next poem.

Bjorn Wastvedt

November 12, 2017 at 3:45 PM

Thank you, Edward! :)

Line Gauthier

November 11, 2017 at 10:02 PM

Lovely imagery. Wonderful poem. Well done, Bjorn. Congratulations.

Bjorn Wastvedt

November 12, 2017 at 3:45 PM

Thank you, Line! :)

Tom Rutherford

November 9, 2017 at 8:24 PM

Such heartfelt verbal artistry Bjorn! Keep up the great writing!

Bjorn Wastvedt

November 10, 2017 at 6:39 PM

Thank you, Tom! :)

Jan Allison

November 8, 2017 at 7:28 PM

what a joy to read your first poem on soup Bjorn, its a beautiful romantic poem and I especially like the rhyme and the lovely flow of the lines:-) hugs jan xx

Bjorn Wastvedt

November 10, 2017 at 6:41 PM

Thank you, Jan! :)

Andrea Dietrich

November 5, 2017 at 7:30 PM

this is so pretty and romantic. Great job, Bjorn. Sure hope to see more from you. You chose a very nice poetry form to write in with Quintain. Let's see MORE>

Bjorn Wastvedt

November 5, 2017 at 11:56 PM

Thank you, Andrea! :)

Becca Teagan

November 4, 2017 at 11:21 PM

Hi Bjorn :) This is such a romantic poem. I love the part about wanting to be a raindrop clinging to her skin. I love how you wrote this in rhyme, it flows so nicely, but I also think this would make a very beautiful free-verse poem too, where you're not limited to words that have to rhyme. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. I would like to invite you to come to my blog and introduce yourself, if you'd like. Welcome to Poetry Soup!

Bjorn Wastvedt

November 5, 2017 at 6:52 PM

Thank you, Becca . . . :)

Becca Teagan

November 4, 2017 at 11:21 PM

https://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry/blogs/blog_detail.aspx?BlogID=33042&PoetID=76783

Bjorn Wastvedt

November 4, 2017 at 10:45 PM

When I first wrote this poem, I wrote the 3rd line in 2nd verse as: "placed among lighted candles" that I like better, but it doesn't rhyme with flower - a word I wanted most of all. What do you think? Here is what I wrote: How I long to be the chosen flower, You pick for your crystal vase. Placed among lighted candles, So I can see your face!

Bjorn Wastvedt

November 4, 2017 at 11:42 PM

Thank you for help and comments! :)

Susan Ashley

November 4, 2017 at 11:09 PM

I think the way you wrote it in your posted poem is truly beautiful and expresses your feeling in a wonderfully intimate way :)

Susan Ashley

November 4, 2017 at 7:10 PM

Ohh Bjorn, your poem so beautifully expresses the melancholy of unrequited love. Very romantic with amazing and lovely imagery. Enjoyed and I look forward to reading more of your writes. Welcome to Poetry Soup!

Bjorn Wastvedt

November 4, 2017 at 10:47 PM

Thank you, Susan! :)

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