Longing

I still miss her mystery, 
mornings when I'd wake beside her 
and nuzzle her nape, hear her 
breathing so softly, so sleek under 
satins that sculpted her beautiful shape.

Now my days are vacant, 
evenings are empty with no one to hold, 
to ponder and pattern ambitions
together for ever, pale dreams 
that are now so far distant and cold.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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Mac Donald Avatar
December 31, 2008 at 4:39 PM
Hey Keith! Second verse is so melancholy. Folorn expressions of had beens. Sentiments that are well depicted by your use of word "to ponder and pattern ambitions together", so sad when something like this comes to an end. First verse is soft and sensual...causes the second verse to feel even more desolate. Anyhow, hope all's well with you! Happy New Year(I know I've said this before), wishing and hoping the best for you and yours in 2009! God bless....Love, Mikki
Coet Avatar
December 30, 2008 at 8:32 PM
Nice! Just google Blue Fog Journal to submit. -ED-
Cooper Avatar
December 30, 2008 at 7:55 PM
great pen
Taylor Avatar
December 30, 2008 at 5:06 PM
This has a VERY strong feeling of loneliness. I have felt that way more than once. Very good work
Mckenzie Avatar
December 30, 2008 at 2:57 PM
Keith Very well done you captured loss of love so well here! Happy New Year! Laura :)
Meyer Avatar
December 30, 2008 at 12:59 PM
This is a wonderful poem Keith. Bringing up feelings that match my own. And may I also thank you for your comment on my poem "Fear." It would seem that you have read one more Koontz book than I have! ~J~
Gass Avatar
December 30, 2008 at 10:56 AM
When we lose someone we love it is all the little things, the small, quiet moments that fill our days an nights. Sad but beautiful. Longing is the perfect title for this touching write. You truly have a poets heart. Love, Robin
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