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Lonely the Interludes

fingers
like tendrils
stiffen from refrains,
despair on moonless halls…
blistered




Dr. Ram Mehta's Cinquain Contest
by nette onclaud

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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 1/6/2015 12:15:00 AM

I would have placed yours much higher, Nette...you created a feeling of longing without writing the word...beautiful! Congrats!! Hugs, Rhonda

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/2/2015 11:16:00 PM

Nette,, Congratulations! :) A very deep "Longing, WIN." Always~ Linda

Sandra Haight

Date: 1/2/2015 2:45:00 PM

Nette, very beautiful with so many emotional metaphors. Congratulations on your win! Hugs, Sandra

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/2/2015 2:07:00 PM

best one I have seen!! Congrats, Nette.

Jan Allison

Date: 1/2/2015 11:41:00 AM

Dropping back with my congrats Nette:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 1/2/2015 8:36:00 AM

Wow Nette! This is poetically beautiful. a 7 rating for you. Congrats on your win and all the best for this new year. // paul

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 1/2/2015 3:13:00 AM

Congrats on the win nette,this speaks volume...huggs

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 1/1/2015 9:37:00 PM

Wish you all the best of 2015. Congrats on your win in my contest, nette

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 12/21/2014 7:17:00 AM

beautiful Nette.. :) kahusay husay.. ! am still here.. where we go? hugs.. :)!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 12/21/2014 7:15:00 AM

beautiful Nette.. :) kahusay husay.. ! am still here.. where we go? hugs.. :)!

Joe Maverick

Date: 12/20/2014 4:17:00 PM

Very emotive Nette, well put together..'

Cherl Dunn

Date: 12/17/2014 6:55:00 PM

Nette, Music set the poetic verse, just love it lady, it is so full of harmony and emotions great work here my friend, Happy Holidays to you my friend I hope all your dreams come true this magical season, cheri

Tim Smith

Date: 12/17/2014 5:31:00 PM

I can hear the melody playing nette...beautiful ...huggs

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 12/17/2014 4:57:00 PM

Deep and moody piece, hon. My favourite image is the chasing ripples... such a good effect of the how it was all there, perhaps already in motion and it was only the fingers job to pursue the melody... I really like that. We're all quite sick, here, but it seems to just be seasonal... awful coughs but not this scary bug that has hospitalized thousands. I have our girl on a hot air mister, steamy bathroom, vapour rubs and plenty of TLC. Gotta go. xoxox

Jan Allison

Date: 12/17/2014 4:33:00 PM

this flows like a marvellous melody Nette:-) Hugs jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/17/2014 4:01:00 PM

this is stunning, Nette. You followed not just the syllable count but the preferred way of doing number of words per line too (I think). I love this.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/17/2014 1:31:00 PM

Very descriptive and expressive work..It is sad to play until someone gets blisters..I enjoyed reading this one today..Looks like a Christmas tree..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara