Carrie Richards Poet Crystalline

Lonely Schoolyard

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               Brisk wind brushes over grass and
                          sets the playground swing into motion





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for Brian's "A Couple of Lines" contest

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Timothy Brumley July 20, 2010 at 5:16 PM I just had to come back and read this again! Excellent premise and imagery Carrie.

Connie Marcum Wong July 17, 2010 at 8:30 PM Dear Carrie, Your poem sets a nostalgic mind in motion with your excellent imagery in this winning poem. Congratulations!

Timothy Brumley July 16, 2010 at 8:50 PM Congrats on your big 2nd place win with this excellent couplet Carrie.

Destiny Orschell July 11, 2010 at 4:48 PM I always loved the swings at recess when I was little. I remember it the swings where always still going when ever we had to go inside. Great poem and congrats on 2nd place. Love Destiny

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen July 11, 2010 at 4:48 AM Congratulations on placing 2nd in Brian’s “A couple of Lines” contest with this wonderful poem. Smiles, Dane Ann

Debbie Guzzi July 6, 2010 at 1:52 PM memories of riders with wings on heels of pink ......so charming! Congrad's

Mike Butler July 6, 2010 at 10:27 AM Congrats on the well deserved win! -Mike

Carol Sunshine Brown July 6, 2010 at 4:34 AM Congratulations Carrie on your win in Brian Strand's contest "A Couple Of Lines". Love, Carol

Rauwolfia Ra July 5, 2010 at 10:07 PM 'playground swing into motion" these 2 lines say quite a lot, I really like the imagery, I can almost see the playground and the wind swerping through it.

Joyce Johnson July 5, 2010 at 1:12 PM Lovely job Brian did in his picks. This is so well done. Love, Joyce

Andrea Dietrich July 5, 2010 at 12:51 PM Like a ghost story too. The lonesome swing in the wind. I relaly like this one. Congrats, Luv, Andea

Adeleke Adeite July 5, 2010 at 12:35 PM Hey Carrie Congrats on your well deserved win in Brian’s contest. You are such a wonderful talent here. Please keep your poetry pens flowing with passion. Enjoy your win. Love, Adeleke

James Marshall Goff July 5, 2010 at 10:26 AM volumes of imagination fill me with this great poem, Carrie! congrats! jimbo

Elaine George July 5, 2010 at 8:07 AM Such a vivid haunting picture you have created with this sentaional 2 line couplet, dear Carrie. Congratulations on your win. Love, Lainie

John Freeman July 4, 2010 at 5:18 PM Good Show, my lady. Congratulations, agape, Moses

Charles Henderson July 4, 2010 at 12:53 PM You surely painted a lonely picture, girl. congratulations on your tremendous win...........Charles,

Iolanda Scripca July 4, 2010 at 12:41 PM Brisk wind of reality on a time long gone...Beautiful Criystalline, dear Carrie. Congrats, Iolanda

Audrey Haick July 4, 2010 at 11:45 AM Exceptional imagery Carrie! As usual, a pleasure to read your work! Sweet memories this one brings to mind. Congratulations on your 2nd Place win, a well -deserved win for sure! Love, Audrey

Sharon Tideswell July 4, 2010 at 10:47 AM Congratulations on your 2nd place win Carrie ~ Sharon :)

Tim Ryerson July 4, 2010 at 10:29 AM Captured the picture and sounds perfectly, Carrie...I can hear the swing squeaking snd singing now...Also belated congrats on your hilarious yet insightful win in Carolyns' sheep contest - Tim

Linda-Marie Sweetheart July 4, 2010 at 10:27 AM Cpmgrats Carrie on your big win in Brian's contest with these remarkable words.. a wonderful win to enjoy on your holiday weekend.. with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii... AlohA..

Brian Strand July 4, 2010 at 8:40 AM Congrats on your success in my contest Carrie.Rgds Brian.My latest contest 'HIGH FIVES' is now open

Sharon Tideswell June 29, 2010 at 1:56 PM Very nice couple of lines. Good luck in the contest # Sharon :)

Sara Kendrick June 29, 2010 at 12:59 PM Very descriptive in just two short lines ...Sets my mind to seeing and experiencing a school yard during summer..Good luck in the the contest with this one that should be in the winners' circle..Fly in the coffee made me go yuck..Sara

Daver Austin June 27, 2010 at 9:14 AM This reminds me of a visit to my old schoolyard. The wind is a very mysterious entity and I can see my favorite little girl on that swing, legs in the air. Love this little jewel. Love, daver

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