Lonely

Lonely The palm trees sway As gentle wind goes by On the French Riviera’s coast While on the beach the lapping waves unfurl. The rising moon is in no haste To light her tearful face; She waits in vain Lonely. ---------------------------------------------------- Path Number 9 ~ Birthdate 16th February Contest: "Tell Me Your Number" Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich Placing: 6th

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Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 10/4/2014 11:19:00 AM

Subtly beautiful is ur poem Paul! Very expressive ! Congrats on fine win!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/7/2014 10:13:00 AM

Glad you liked it Upma. Thank you for stopping by with lovely comments. // paul

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 10/4/2014 8:25:00 AM

Dropping back with my congratulations on your very lovely Rictameter Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/6/2014 6:01:00 PM

Thank you Brenda; you are so very supportive and sweet. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 10/4/2014 7:52:00 AM

Kudos dearie Paul.. :D!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/7/2014 9:55:00 AM

Thank you Olive_eloi!:) Hope you're doing fine...will come back to you later. // paul

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 10/4/2014 7:50:00 AM

ONe of my favorites. congrats Paul. BG

Paul Callus
Date: 10/6/2014 5:48:00 PM

Thank you Barbara; glad you liked it. Take care. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 10/4/2014 7:27:00 AM

Dropping back with my congratulations Paul:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 10/6/2014 5:46:00 PM

Thank you Jan; you did very well placing second!:) hugs // paul

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/4/2014 6:22:00 AM

Nice expressions, congrats on the win. Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 10/7/2014 9:52:00 AM

Thank you Dr. Glad you enjoyed. Have a nice day. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/4/2014 2:04:00 AM

HI, Paul, I decided to overlook the extra syllable in line 4. The poem is so beautiful. Congrats for your win.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/6/2014 5:53:00 PM

Thank you Andrea. I did correct my mistake, but I suppose I was not in time! (over here 'riviera' is often considered to consist of 3 syllables since it's derived from Italian and most Maltese speak this language and pronounce romance words a such.) // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/1/2014 12:28:00 AM

I have to agree with everyone else, this is a home run. If this were mine I would have it framed and hanging on my wall. Excellent, Paul, I love this poem. It is exquisite.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/1/2014 2:44:00 PM

Many thanks Maurice! Appreciate your lovely "exquisite' comments. Glad you enjoyed. // paul

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/29/2014 7:47:00 PM

I love this so much........ what a lovely poem in nine amazing lines! Good luck, Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/30/2014 4:15:00 PM

Hi Carrie! Glad you love this rictameter (my first attempt); coming from you it counts a lot. Thank you for stopping by. // paul

Honestly J.T.

Date: 9/29/2014 11:28:00 AM

I like this one. Good job

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2014 4:27:00 PM

Glad you found this to your liking, Honestly! Thank you for stopping by. // paul

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 9/28/2014 7:19:00 AM

Excellent. Very expressive write. Enjoyed. Tfs

Paul Callus
Date: 9/28/2014 11:26:00 AM

So glad you enjoyed, Ravi. Thank you for stopping by. // paul

Ma Yaseen

Date: 9/28/2014 5:10:00 AM

This is a perfect one and deserves nothing less than the highest rank.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/28/2014 9:27:00 AM

Thank you Malik, both for your visit and the positive comments. // paul

Diane Locksley

Date: 9/27/2014 2:24:00 PM

I don't know what the number means, but this poem is a perfect 10. I wish I could give it more than a 7. Maybe one day I'll be able to see the French Riviera and enjoy the splendor you described. I returned a Soup mail though I'm not sure it went through. The computer had to recapture the web page? I'm with my aunt now. She sends her love, Diane

Paul Callus
Date: 9/28/2014 7:39:00 AM

Hi Diane....when you want to change the avatar, you do not need to delete the picture, just upload the new picture and it will take its place automatically. Have a nice Sunday! // paul

Diane Locksley
Date: 9/28/2014 2:29:00 AM

I'm sorry, Paul. I'm having some problems with this website. I've tried to use a better picture, but I can't delete this one. I had heard about the problems with the technical aspects of the site.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2014 3:26:00 PM

Hi Diane! Lovely to hear from you and see a (pretty) face:) I'm afraid the soup mail never found its way to me, but I did my little part. Hope 'aunt' is better+; pls do give her my love as well; will be back to her soon. Glad you enjoyed this poem...it's all got to do with our birthdate. Thank you for a lovely visit:) // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/27/2014 8:35:00 AM

Very expressive and descriptive work..Reads like a winner to me..Way to go for the contest..Thanks for the visits to my page..I appreciate you dropping by..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2014 9:18:00 AM

Pleased that you consider this poem expressive and descriptive...very encouraging! Sara, visiting your posts is always a pleasure. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/27/2014 8:06:00 AM

I thought for sure you would have been a Ten! Poor Bo Derek all on her own a lonely ten *lol*. All kidding aside you penned an excellent piece.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2014 9:13:00 AM

Hi Richard.....if we were to go by age I would be much more than a Ten!:) Thank you for your welcome opinion....and witty flavor. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 9/27/2014 6:49:00 AM

Mmmmmmmmmmn.... Sad one ::)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/28/2014 12:13:00 AM

Indeed this showed here esp in your fourth line.:) like the description..:)

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2014 9:09:00 AM

Yes...sad; but many times I have been able to find beauty that sadness is capable of transmitting! Have a lovely weekend...hugs. // paul

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/26/2014 6:58:00 PM

hmmm maybe for Andie? Don't be lonely! Open your arms to someone? Light & Love

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2014 9:05:00 AM

Ahhh Debbie...loneliness can be painful for some, especially those who miss the comfort of being loved. Thank you for stopping by. // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 9/26/2014 3:30:00 PM

very touching and lovely...

Paul Callus
Date: 9/26/2014 4:54:00 PM

Many thanks Ilene! I love your comments. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/26/2014 5:40:00 AM

really reeling back beautiful outstanding piece paul i tip my hat

Paul Callus
Date: 9/26/2014 4:52:00 PM

Thank you Liam; glad you find this write outstanding...you are too kind! // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 9/26/2014 5:24:00 AM

Mon ami, Paul, c'est fantastique! Fantastic my friend, Paul! Who could resist French Riviera's beauty? Bonne chance! Good luck on the contest! A seven!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/26/2014 4:59:00 PM

Merci mon ami! So glad you have been touched by this humble poem of mine. The French Riviera is so very attractive...an area that compels one to visit and revisit. Thank you for the compliments, Demi. // paul

Tim Smith

Date: 9/25/2014 11:01:00 PM

Well done my friend...cheers

Paul Callus
Date: 9/26/2014 5:00:00 PM

Thank you Tim...glad you enjoyed. // paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 9/25/2014 9:11:00 PM

Superb! Loved this one Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/26/2014 5:07:00 PM

Love your 'superb' comment, Arthur. Earlier I read your "Tanka by Night"....impressive. // paul

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/25/2014 7:51:00 PM

Brilliant Paul, beautifully penned. I love how the first and last line are the same.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/26/2014 5:10:00 PM

Thank you Brenda; I rely on your honest comments. Glad you enjoyed my first attempt at a rictameter. Have a lovely weekend. // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/25/2014 6:59:00 PM

I never tried this form,but I.really love the concept of your poem..Sad,classical,gentle,soft,beautiful and sad again.So much in few words!Andrea is going to love this -Charma(my path is number six if yI remember well and destiny 3).

Paul Callus
Date: 9/26/2014 4:44:00 PM

Wow! Charm....your remarkable comments grow me wings!:) Thank you!! [My destiny number is also 3] // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/25/2014 6:53:00 PM

Oh I love your entry Paul. Your form is perfect. Long ago I visited the French Riviera. I wonder what it is like now. Your poem should do great Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/26/2014 4:39:00 PM

Glad you like this poem, Connie! Last time I went to the French Riviera was 10 years ago...first thing I noticed was the palm trees next to the beach....that's what brought about this write. Hope you're keeping well. // paul