Loneliness

(L)one dandelion seed on a bare stem (O)ver the bridge once traveled years ago (N)othing ends up feeling like something (E)ver so softly, a kiss blown in the wind (L)ove skates, now the ice is melted (I)nvisible turmoil that no-one can see (N)ights without stars, heavy mornings (E)yes blink to erase the same thing (S)orrow fills ponds, puddles are reminders (S)hadows and reflections can turn into one Heidi Sands 9/23/23

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Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/14/2023 2:08:00 PM

a wonderful acrostic, Heidi. You captured so well what loneliness feels like and is...I like 'sorrow fills ponds, puddles are reminders.' That was sincerely brilliant! Well done, Heidi...enjoy your Saturday, Sara

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 9/25/2023 10:09:00 AM

A marvelous description of loneliness. Well done my friend. Have a wonderful day.

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/25/2023 12:51:00 PM

Thank you Jerry. I hope your day is going well :)

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/23/2023 1:32:00 PM

Your metaphor, my friend, is a magnificent display of beauty and symbolism—a solitary dandelion gracefully standing over the worn path of a bridge that was traversed long ago. I am captivated by the way you skillfully employ elements of nature to vividly depict your overarching theme, Heidi. Your words have been exquisitely penned.

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/23/2023 7:23:00 PM

Thank you for taking the time to give such kind feedback. I appreciate you :)

Joseph May

Date: 9/23/2023 9:18:00 AM

I like how you use nature to illustrate your theme Heidi, Well penned, hugs

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/23/2023 9:47:00 AM

Thank you Joseph. Hugs :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/23/2023 8:33:00 AM

Wonderful metaphor my friend--a lone lone dandelion over the bridge once travelled years ago. Sorrow filled pond puddles are reminders--- highly evocative of life and loneliness. Splendid write, Heidi.

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/23/2023 8:45:00 AM

Thank you my friend. I hope you have a nice day :)

Silent One

Date: 9/23/2023 7:45:00 AM

I can feel the loneliness in your acrostic, right from the first line where you described the dandelion seed all alone... Great acrostic.

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/23/2023 7:51:00 AM

Thank you Silent One. I appreciate your comment on this. I hope you have a great day :)

Karen Jones

Date: 9/23/2023 7:43:00 AM

Sorrow fills ponds puddles are reminders...my favorite line. What a tender poem in perfect form.

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/23/2023 7:50:00 AM

Thank you very much Karen. That is nice to hear :)

Hiya Sharma

Date: 9/23/2023 7:40:00 AM

A brilliant acrostic poem dear Heidi, I absolutely love the wordplay and the depth of emotions here.. So heartfelt! That opening line with "lone dandelion seed on a bare stem" Is definitely captivating... "Nights without stars" Evocative descriptions about loneliness.. Beautifully done!

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/23/2023 7:49:00 AM

Thank you very much Hya. I appreciate your kind feedback. I hope you have a nice day :)