Little Shopper Girl (For Deborah's Contest)

Note: To the tune of "Little Drummer Boy"


Come, they sold me, to Macy’s this year
The perfect gifts await for holiday cheer

I’ll push and shove my way through the crowd
Cuss if I don’t succeed, for crying out loud

Stomp on feet of shoppers with my heels
Clear a path to line's front as everyone reels

Bent o’er in pain they grouse, “Who is this cruel witch?”
And I scream back to them in a very high pitch

To reach fine gifts I create travesty
Then single-handedly grab the last Nativity

Baby Jesus is smiling at me
What have I done to find Thee
Done to find Thee

Sadly, I glimpse back at those I’ve attacked
And hand the manger scene to one farther back

The truest gift we find is not on the shelves
We’ll never find this gift within our lost selves

If we forget to share the holiday joys
With shopping schemes and ill-conceived ploys

Make way for kinder shoppers courteously
To find the greatest gift called humanity

Just leave the shops behind and visit your church
And bow before His grace from the pew as you perch

Baby Jesus is smiling at me
For now I’ve found Thee
Now I’ve found Thee
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Dietrich Avatar
January 25, 2010 at 9:09 AM
carolyn, I loved your message in this one. What an interesting contest this must have been. Is there a way for us to review all the past winners in all the past contests? Ok, I will save you the zebra!! thanks as always for your comments. LUv, andrea
Harman Avatar
January 9, 2010 at 9:44 AM
I lean away from the christian stuff, as i believe in the things all religions have in common, and do not like how some think they are the only ones going to heaven and others arent, even if they are good people. But this is still inspirational and a great script to the audience.
Brown Avatar
December 20, 2009 at 10:37 AM
I love this. I agree with all of the other commenters.This is so great. Keep writing my friend.
Lucas Avatar
December 17, 2009 at 5:08 PM
absolutely incredible and so enjoyable to read....Love Faire
Sweetheart Avatar
December 16, 2009 at 6:56 AM
Glad u appreciated my little rendition of soaps... remember the Craig, Steve, and Meg triangle years ago? that's when it was really good and that Craig was BAD BOY personified.. I agree this new Craig is a "Softie" compared to the one years ago.. cannot replace good TV.. the old Meg was Meg Ryan, remember" .. glad u enjoyed... I enjoyed writing it... what else can I do with this tummy ache? luv..
Ryerson Avatar
December 16, 2009 at 4:46 AM
A smash hit!! - Congratulations my friend - Tim
Mcnaughton Avatar
December 15, 2009 at 5:49 PM
What a lovely poem Carolyn. And very true indeed. I wish you a wonderful xmas. x
Freeman Avatar
December 15, 2009 at 5:41 PM
Congratulations little shopper girl. Smile! A major poem I believe. Sincerely,Love Moses
Winter Avatar
December 15, 2009 at 11:48 AM
Congrats to YOU dear Carolyn on your win in Debbie's contest! Thanks so much for your thoughtfulness. Happy holidays to you and yours. love, shar
George   Avatar
December 15, 2009 at 1:51 AM
Congratulations on your win, Carolyn. Love, Lainie
Delacroix Avatar
December 14, 2009 at 5:17 PM
Awesome! loved this lyric very much and very true as well. I agree. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your comments on "The Deposition". By the way, "..carved his own face".., I made that up. It just came to my mind that way and I liked it. :) Love and blessings, Caroline.
Keogh Jr. Avatar
December 14, 2009 at 1:04 PM
Youi have done a fine, incisive job with this. You should be very proud. This one should be in the running, I'm sure, my dear. Thank you for your kind remarks. They do mean a lot to me. I can't believe that I won! Merry Christmas, Gerard.
Fraser Avatar
December 14, 2009 at 12:55 PM
Congratulations on your win in Deborah's contest, it's a lovely poem to a lovely song >> James,xx
Clark Avatar
December 14, 2009 at 10:10 AM
Great Message Carolyn! Congradulations! Happy Holidays! Jeralynn
Johnson Avatar
December 14, 2009 at 9:19 AM
Thank you for your kind comments and congratulations on your win. I don't know how she chose among so many good entries. Love, Joyce
Richards Avatar
December 14, 2009 at 9:13 AM
What a wonderful entry to Debbie's contest....and not surprised at this win!! Not only a clever song...but a meaningful message! Kuddos dear Carolyn!! ~ Love, Carrie
Strand Avatar
December 14, 2009 at 8:02 AM
Congrats on your success in Debbie's contest Carolynn.Rgds Brian
Sweetheart Avatar
December 14, 2009 at 6:14 AM
Congrats on your winning poem in Deb's contest.. well deserved win... blessings.. luv.. Linda-Marie "Sweetheart"
Esquire Avatar
December 12, 2009 at 9:50 PM
Dear Carolyn, This is a Winner very vivid I know shoppers like this that's why I don't do very much shopping Merry Chrisrmas my POETIC Mentor LOVE ALWAYS...HG
Sweetheart Avatar
December 11, 2009 at 12:58 PM
I tried to call Dane Ann several times today but the phone just kept ringing away so I don't know how late it would be OK to call.. how much time difference between us? hope u are feeling better ...
Mason Avatar
December 11, 2009 at 12:24 PM
Now I can't get the tune out of my head ... LOL ... wonderful writing here, Carolyn. Thank you for coming to PoetrySoup this year and bringing all your talent!! Hope you have a great holiday and that 2010 is blessed for you and yours!
Fraser Avatar
December 11, 2009 at 8:59 AM
Carolyn, i can still hear my father singing, humming and whistling " Little Drummer Boy " to me when i was oh so young. Lovely piece, best of luck in Deborah's contest >> James,xx
Freeman Avatar
December 10, 2009 at 8:15 PM
This is really, really funny, Carolyn, when you start singing it to little drummer boy. At least the first part, untill you get down to the baby, Jesus, then it gets serious. Good job, Slncerely, Love Moses
Hilliker Avatar
December 10, 2009 at 4:11 PM
Wonderful! Happy Holidays! :-)
Curcio Avatar
December 9, 2009 at 9:23 AM
Funny - and lovely. Well done - and good luck in the contest!
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