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Lily of the Nile

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The glamour of a prestigious school lured her far away.. two years would whizz past, of arduous work, immersing in books, away from home, away from her beloved...she assured him. rushing to the station, he wished her all good luck, holding a bouquet of Lily of the Nile...she admired ! petals shrivel, flowers wither, the moment does not. July 27, 2022 Short Verse Inspired By Pictures Poetry Contest Sponsor: Lisa YY Picture B:https://www.pinterest.com/pin/578431145904762475/ SECOND PLACE

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Christuraj Alex

Date: 8/10/2022 4:07:00 AM

"the moment does not" - True. Many even live only for relishing and cherishing those precious moments. A touching work. Congratulations!

Bill Baker

Date: 8/8/2022 2:53:00 PM

Your poem was a great match for the pictire, it should do well in the contest. The last line was really special, Mala. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 8/9/2022 9:03:00 AM

Dear Bill, You are an incredible friend - you read four of my poems in one go, and wrote comments for all of them! I am delighted that you thought the last line special! BW ~ Mala

Valsa George

Date: 8/6/2022 9:32:00 PM

The concluding line reaffirms that love will survive all ravages of time. I like the concluding line so much. Beautiful entery for the contest ! All the Best Mala !

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 8/9/2022 8:58:00 AM

Dear Valsa, I am so glad you liked the concluding line. Thank you. Sorry for replying late, was not well for a few days. Love ~ Mala

Harry Horsman

Date: 8/1/2022 8:15:00 PM

Another aspect of love, Mala, you capture the moment so well. The poetry beautiful.

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 8/9/2022 8:56:00 AM

Thanks, Harry. Your comments are deep and precious. I was not well for a few days - sorry for being late in replying. Warm wishes ~ Mala

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/1/2022 8:11:00 PM

Wow Mala, this is fabulous! You could make your last line into a wonderful modern Haiku… “petals shrivel flowers wither, the moment does not” This romantic beauty needs to be put into my Faves. I hope this is a top winner for you Mala. I loved it! Blessings xxoo

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 8/9/2022 8:55:00 AM

Right now sitting at doctor’s clinic! Love ~ Mala

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 8/9/2022 8:54:00 AM

Thank you, Connie. I am learning so much from you. I will take that line, and create a haiku. Connie, I am very sorry - I am so late in replying your comment. I was not very well for last few days - I feel so fortunate “ Your Fave”!

Paul Callus

Date: 7/29/2022 3:08:00 AM

This picture prompt has inspired you well, Mala. Both subjects of your poem put on a brave face, though I suspect that deep down there is a reluctance to be separated for so long! The lilies of the Nile will certainly be kept close, long after they wither! ~ Best regards, my friend // paul

Paul Callus
Date: 7/29/2022 5:57:00 AM

Thank you for the comparison to Hemingway, Mala, though my neck hurts when I look up at his stature :) Joking apart, it is true that I am economical in words; my ideas have to be expressed quickly so I'd be able to breathe freely. :)

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 7/29/2022 4:50:00 AM

Thank you, Paul. A story in a few words of free verse - my favourite. Your thoughtful words inspire me - I very much like the brevity in your poems. Reminds me of poems by Ernest Hemingway.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 7/28/2022 2:46:00 PM

Lovely write. God bless you sweet friend. Love, Gina

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 7/28/2022 2:55:00 PM

Thank you, Gina. Really appreciate your comment.