Lilith

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written for silent ones contest. 
apologies for my absence, have been busy and unwell

... i will be selectively participating in contests here, where sponsors do look beyond words that glitter with artificial gems, from now on. 

I am the birth of
an unholy emancipation,  
watching dusk settle 
upon forbidden shores,  
unfolding sinister shadows,  
while ravens gather 
as harbingers of my arrival.  
Tonight I am the seductress, 
tempting temptress 
  of maroon twilight,  
a midnight mistress,  
scripting stygian sagas, 
with ancient runic symbols,   
consumed by the 
fear they call Lilith.
Once blessed with 
  purity of lotus light,
I am now sensual suicide,
 as darkness bleeds 
 through my sparkling spirit
into a rustic realm 
  of demonic drumrolls.  
I see through the 
 ghastly gates of  
my perpetrator’s hellish eyes.  
I ponder: how can  
  an angelic silhouette,  
a man who walks in  
  divine rhythm, 
be the infernal epitome 
of sadistic scriptures?  
He's devoted to the 
carnal cravings  
piercingly echoing  
through my heretic heart,  
I’ll find his magical melody,    
in sensual strokes,  
as I stroke his soul 
in sheer ecstasy,  
engulfed in sinful symphonies.

My bite will plunge like a   
  bloodstained blade,  
as I engrave my 
  footprints upon his heart, 
to seduce his last breath, 
but what if he is immune 
to my ways, so I panic, 
knowing I could become 
  his sacrificial succubus,  
as his poetic trickeries 
draw my demonic 
  nature into a deathless 
dawning of decaying roots.
Thus, taming the 
beast of gothic blackness 
and halting this perpetual 
destruction of my mind.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 9/28/2024 7:15:00 AM
Wow! Just amazing! Powerful writing! I am now a fan of you, poet!
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Date: 6/14/2024 8:43:00 AM
A dark transformative tale, you have brought vulnerability and insecurity to Lilith, quite unexpected, yet an adorable human quality. Excellent penning, true to the character of the Empress, we have all come to expect!! Congratulations on your win Ink!! Best wishes, and hope healing and wellness find you.
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Date: 6/13/2024 9:31:00 AM
"I am now sensual suicide, as darkness bleeds through my sparkling spirit into a rustic realm of demonic drumrolls" - Great! Congratulations!
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Date: 6/12/2024 7:57:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Empress! I love that you are Lilith and everything about you. Excellente;) Back to wish you wellness. I didn't understand what you meant by only contests that look beyond words that glitter etc. ?
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Date: 6/12/2024 1:59:00 PM
Congrats on your top win! It is interesting to see how each of the winners has added a feature that is unique! You have brought some different points about Lilith. Here is the insecurity of Lilith ‘ what if he is immune’! Very good poem for an excellent contest!
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Date: 6/12/2024 12:45:00 PM
I loved how your metaphorical poem poem masterfully intertwines themes of seduction, transformation, and internal conflict. Through the character of Lilith, it explores the delicate balance between light and darkness, purity and corruption. The vivid imagery and emotive language create a compelling narrative of a character grappling with her identity and desires. Congratulations on your first place in the contest.
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Date: 6/3/2024 3:54:00 PM
I don't know why, but this broke my heart; dear, dear Ink, I hope you are not in the despair you write of as Lilith, but regardless, this is beautiful- and a 'painful' pleasure to read.... hugs xx
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Silent One
Date: 6/12/2024 12:43:00 PM
Ink is lilith... Ive seen it... lol
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/4/2024 12:03:00 PM
Awwn you are always so kind! I appreciate you so very much truly
Date: 6/2/2024 12:39:00 PM
You did super well with this theme. Wish I could think like you do sometimes. This is top notch, Ink
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/4/2024 11:59:00 AM
Awwn you are too sweet soul aunt! Thank you so much
Date: 6/2/2024 10:28:00 AM
"Forbidden shores greet you as you script stygian sagas", Powerful write
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/4/2024 11:57:00 AM
Thank you so very much dear joseph
Date: 6/2/2024 5:17:00 AM
can we get free from darkness ? your images are brillant and so evocative, i don't have answers for others, every one is sinful and fight , this is a wonderful poem that touched me, thanks for the talented poems
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/4/2024 11:54:00 AM
Thank you so much for always being so supportive
Date: 6/2/2024 5:00:00 AM
Dearest Empress, I'm in awe of the dark, seductive power of your poem! How I love how the rich, sinister imagery drips with gothic allure as you created such a hypnotic tale of temptation and inner demons. I really think that that your command of evocative language is spellbinding, from "maroon twilight" to "sensual suicide" to "sadistic scriptures." The internal struggle between light and darkness, purity and sin, is hauntingly captured. This is artistry of the highest order - you've bewitched me utterly with your mesmerizing words and depths. A truly breathtaking, masterful piece deserving of the highest praise. I'm honored to read your poems. A Fav! - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/4/2024 11:39:00 AM
Thank you dear daniel for your faves and also for your kind review im grateful!
Date: 6/2/2024 2:58:00 AM
Oh what a great description. "scripting stygian sagas", your poem is incredibly descriptive of an evil personage. Great poem truly filled with imagery and alliteration. Best for a win.
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/4/2024 11:33:00 AM
Thank you so much always dear victor i am grateful for your kindness and support
Date: 6/1/2024 11:04:00 PM
This Gothic tale resonates with a story of fearsome manipulation. If ever a date went wrong, this would be it's poem.
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/4/2024 11:30:00 AM
Hah this made me smile sweet hilda thank you so much
Date: 6/1/2024 8:11:00 PM
What amazing craft! Each line captivates! A sure shot winner
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/4/2024 10:49:00 AM
Thank you dear seeker
Date: 6/1/2024 2:15:00 PM
I appreciate the way Lilith is portrayed. I find it intriguing how for every dark aspect of her character, there is an angelic good that is now haunted. I see a profound struggle in her identity, desires, and her acceptance of the chaos her new self brings and her confrontation with the possibility of being consumed by her darkness. She's a reflection of the battle we face in overcoming certain things, in a strive for light and darkness.
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/4/2024 10:20:00 AM
Thank you for always reading with such enthusiasm and sincerity! Im grateful for your kindness and support , i loved lucifer was a fave long time ago.
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Tonye George
Date: 6/1/2024 2:20:00 PM
She's far into the deep pit, I'm not sure redemption is part of her options. "I am now sensual suicide, as darkness bleeds through my sparkling spirit into a rustic realm of demonic drumrolls." Every story has a side hidden entirely from the world. This reminds me of her actions and POV from the series Lucifer. You should see it. It reminds me that life itself is 100% drawn from perceptive. It can change everything. Lovely piece Dearest Ink, as always. Hugs.
Date: 6/1/2024 1:28:00 PM
Your poem, dear Ink, is truly captivating. It delves into the internal struggle between light and darkness, temptation and resistance, and the duality of human nature. The persona of Lilith embodies this conflict, grappling with dark desires and inner turmoil. The rich word choice and evocative imagery create a dark and mysterious atmosphere, drawing upon themes of seduction and temptation. References to mythical and biblical figures add depth to the symbolism used. Best of luck in the contest.
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Date: 6/4/2024 10:13:00 AM
Thank you so much dr sotto for your kindness and support truly
Date: 6/1/2024 12:51:00 PM
We are double minded...Lilith is part of all of us; I think we confound evil with physical sensuality, evil with desire and lust. No freedom is gotten and kept without, in a sense, a lust for liberty. It is not about depth of feelings, nor degree of arousal from touch...motive and reason is everything. Sometimes good men are forced to fight and kill -- though we did bring it all upon ourselves -- no Soul is an Island. Wow! Really got me going with this. I apologize for ranting. Blessings.
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/4/2024 10:06:00 AM
Thank you so much for this genuine and wonderful comment that speaks volumes ! I am grateful for your kindness and support truly
Date: 6/1/2024 5:54:00 AM
Boy this is so good. Sensual suicide. I know you said you aren't familiar with the Bible but Solomon discussed this theme off and on in the first 9 chapters of Proverbs, which I read whenever I'm feeling tempted or weak. Lilith is a mythical creation, but her legacy lurks in many a dark corner. Have an awesome weekend
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/4/2024 10:06:00 AM
So true but thats interesting to know about solomon thank you for sharing. I appreciate always your support and kindness tomsz truly
Date: 6/1/2024 5:41:00 AM
I am the birth of an unholy emancipation,.. Ayo shaithanaaaaaa!! XD .. seductress,tempting temptress of maroon twilight, a midnight mistress,I love the midnight you bring papi aee .. darkness bleeds through my sparkling spirit into a rustic realm of demonic drumrolls… mmmm the imagery.. through the ghastly gates of my perpetrator’s hellish eyes…yesss me tooo.. I’ll find his magical melody,in sensual strokes, as I stroke his soul in sheer ecstasy,… I engrave my footprints upon his heart, .. oh my !! Spoken like a true Lilith,
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/4/2024 10:04:00 AM
Lol yea lilith did speak here
Date: 6/1/2024 5:30:00 AM
Tempting temptress … beautiful. Yes it’s better to be selective with whose contest you enter for . Good idea .
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/4/2024 10:04:00 AM
Thank you dahlin
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