Lilith

When your reflection, wearing nothing but the dusty light, splashed out of the mirror, I clearly understood that skies abut inferno, that Elysium is nearer than what is written in the books, that hell is deeper, that such shameless nakedness, such outspoken shamelessness foretell doom of my soul, that your dark grey silk dress lays out on the floor, that you don’t cast a shadow, that the wings behind your back are made of darkness, that my reared up lust is too overt for you, that your long black braids are entwined with serpents, that I stand before you fully dressed, that those few things I held dear – God, freedom, homeland – don’t matter anymore, that I love you. 10.11.2019 Nude - Descending A Staircase Poetry Contest Sponsored by: John lawless

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Keith O.J. Hunt

Date: 11/10/2019 12:28:00 PM

Interesting wording here, I like the goth poetics and shades of sable...

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 11/10/2019 3:15:00 PM

Thanks, Keith. Two of us)

Margaret Franceschini

Date: 11/9/2019 2:19:00 PM

A great description of the Lilith of old. Good Job!

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 11/10/2019 3:11:00 PM

Thank you, Margaret. Rays of love)

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 11/9/2019 12:34:00 PM

Hello Kurt Ravidas, the lady seemed to have a mind of her own. She could not be tamed. Enjoyed the read. have a nice day my friend.

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 11/10/2019 3:11:00 PM

You're totally right, Darlene. Thanks for enjoying my humble poetry)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/30/2019 3:36:00 PM

Amazing write, Kurt..glad to see you at #3 on the best poem chart..congrats on your win.

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 11/5/2019 8:55:00 AM

Thank you, Vijay)

Linda Milgate

Date: 10/29/2019 6:37:00 PM

Fascinating well written!! Unique!!!

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 10/30/2019 1:10:00 PM

Thank you, Linda. Rays of love)

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 10/23/2019 9:57:00 AM

That you wrote of beauty is without doubt... congratulations on your podium win.

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 10/23/2019 10:52:00 AM

Thank you, moonlight)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/23/2019 7:32:00 AM

Wow! Such an interesting and unique write with a dark seriousness. Congratulations, Kurt!

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 10/23/2019 10:52:00 AM

Thanks, Kim. My seriousness seriously bows to you)

John Gondolf

Date: 10/23/2019 7:27:00 AM

Masterfully written, Kurt, congrats on your win. John

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 10/23/2019 10:50:00 AM

Oh, thank you, John)

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 10/23/2019 6:09:00 AM

You open up the rose petal by petal and expose the place where the scent perfumes the air, congratulations dear Kurt, you have penned a masterpiece, now go on, write some more. xo

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 10/23/2019 10:50:00 AM

Wonderful comment ^____^ Thank you very much, Pixie)

John Lawless

Date: 10/22/2019 7:11:00 PM

..."that the wings behind your back are made of darkness".....and you succumb to the wiles of the wicked.....Magnificently done Kurt An intense and passionate read with "drop the mike" ending couplet. Thanks for entering the contest

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 10/23/2019 4:53:00 AM

No, thank you for the interesting theme that made my write) God bless you, John, and all your contestants.

Quoth Theraven

Date: 10/16/2019 10:20:00 AM

Kurt, I love that title. The 'Staircases' are so full this year. Your poem will make it all the harder to choose. Well done. -Richard

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 10/16/2019 3:28:00 PM

Thank you, Richard. The staircase of poetry always leads up, even if you lose a contest)

Robert Lindley

Date: 10/11/2019 3:39:00 PM

That the poet casts a spell of awestruck enchantment in this superbly crafted piece is still an understatement my friend. That the victim is drawn in despite seeing the darkness is in itself a true happenstance in life. That some thing can be that enticing and beautiful reflects a scary truth.. A jewel, and a very fine fav..

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 10/11/2019 4:56:00 PM

Thank you for you deep understanding, master of darkness. And for your very fine fav too)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/11/2019 5:19:00 AM

I am emerged in the brilliant art of your words. "wearing nothing but the dusty light" a lady who could not be tamed, whose confident manner was irresistible! This is magnificent from beginning to end Kurt! I am putting this poem into my faves! I am away caring for my granddaughters on a neighbor island right now. It is a delight to be reading your wonderful poetry again.xoxo : )

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 10/11/2019 11:53:00 AM

Thank you very much, dear Connie. I'm happy you liked it. My best wishes to the neighbor island)