James Fraser Poet Free verse

Like Pebbles On a Beach

We became like pebbles on a beach
touching in the depths, caressing in the shallows
Crystal waves, crested us above the deep abyss

In ever ending caress, we were carried together,
brushing, embracing tribulations as we progressed

The further we were washed, the more we became estranged
Stranded we eventually became, the depth in our love drifted amidst

Slowly, different tides brought different waves
Cross currents were gradually pulling us apart
Discarded like driftwood, with it's meaning of existence

What we were, and what we had became eroded
It reached the point, where we couldn't communicate
All became lost as we entered our abyss

We aged like pebbles on a beach, only to be turned into broken stones

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Gary Radice March 7, 2021 at 1:23 AM Great metaphor for love and life's ebb and flow. Congratulations on the win. Cheers - Gary

Line Gauthier January 21, 2021 at 6:02 PM We can all relate to relationships that grow apart. Well penned, so glad this wonderful poem was published in the 2020 PS Anthology ~

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart October 29, 2017 at 10:34 AM I love a good metaphor and this is magnificent. Beautifully eloquently executed. Thank you! :) xomo

Freddie Robinson Jr. October 28, 2017 at 9:58 AM A very fine emotionally deep poem, James. Read Becca's blog. Always a pleasure to read another talented poets' work. Can't wait to dive in and read more of your poetic thoughts/feelings. This poem speaks to the heart of an eroded relationship ... a lot of readers can relate to this poem. Top-notch poetry. Stellar bright write. May love light your path always.

Poet Destroyer A January 28, 2016 at 9:37 PM James, Congrats on your awesome win. I'm so behind here, the SEA theme is perfect. Love LINDA -

Connie Marcum Wong January 20, 2016 at 12:26 AM I love that you used an allegory of pebbles on a beach to tell your poetic story. Congratulations on your wonderful win James! I so enjoyed reading this! #7

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser January 19, 2016 at 2:54 AM I know when I saw the contest and I thought of yours, I believe this one of your most notable poems I read and wanted to be known by others.. =`) Huge one, write more like this when you have more time, your lil one, Olive Eloisa =`) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser January 19, 2016 at 2:55 AM Congratulations!!!! Hugs tight and smiles, Olive Eloisa xxx

Skat A January 18, 2016 at 11:21 PM James, Congratulations on your Fine Sea win... Stop by my latest blog "This is HOW I FEEL" if you'd like. LOVE SKAT

Dr. Upma A. Sharma January 18, 2016 at 10:56 PM Very wonderful write James.. loved reading this morning.. congrats on big win!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 10, 2014 at 6:17 AM this sad and equally tragic.. it's hard when the love we are hoping to last forever thins and for sometime no more. . .. the pain is sure there... i like how you see such little pebbles and give it much interptetation.. you think more than there is.. making you a person sensitive to me... :) i can say that i retain 2-3poems where lil things when being reflected tells much :) //olive James Fraser December 10, 2014 at 12:30 PM Your right Olive. It's purely about a loving relationship collapsing leaving one happy and one sad. Guess which one I am? - Pebbles on a beach stay, and sometimes move from each other - James :)

Diane Locksley December 7, 2010 at 11:57 AM This is a touching poem, James. Hope life doesn't really turn out to be this way.

Carolyn Devonshire December 7, 2010 at 11:01 AM A very sad reflection on love that's lost it's luster, James. When we are "discarded like driftwood," the pain really stings. Very interesting simile relating this experience to "pebbles on a beach." Your poem pulls at the reader's heartstrings, dear Highlander. May a new love arrive when the tide rolls in. Love, Carolyn

Sharon Ruebel December 6, 2010 at 2:01 PM Hello James, This is so beautiful, the words although sad are given here with so much love As Always, Shar

Sara Kendrick December 5, 2010 at 5:39 PM Very creative work..I am glad that I chose this one to read this eve..Those stones can still be polished if the two keep within the marriage to work it out.Sara

Wilma Neels December 5, 2010 at 11:31 AM James, this is a sad write but also reality.. Sometimes when things change we dont always know how to handle it and that breakdown in communication spell the end, you put it so brilliantly though.. Love this one too ;-)

C.C Bloomsfield December 5, 2010 at 7:27 AM Very sad,yet so true and so beautifully penned.

Michael J. Falotico December 5, 2010 at 5:23 AM Well said on life and aged into dust....great write James...

Sharon Tideswell December 5, 2010 at 2:35 AM 'Like pebbles on a beach, kicked around, displaced by feet' - I'm guessing your inspiration for this came from Paul Weller's 'Broken Stones'. I love how you can take the title of a well-known song and turn it into something completely different yet equally as beautiful. Beautiful imagery too, I could almost see it playing in slow motion as I was reading. This is one of my favourites of yours x

Fabiyas M V December 5, 2010 at 1:44 AM A nice picture of life,James.Style is exceptional.I enjoyed it.

Kabuteng P.Ink K. December 5, 2010 at 12:11 AM oh my-- this sure is a very sad write, James-- but so beautifully written that last line was just amazing in my opinion-- you sure brought so much into pebbles on the beach-- adding this to faves-- & thank you for your comments on my sand haiku-- happy that it brought back memories for you :) enjoy your Sunday :) -- nikko :)

Francine Roberts December 4, 2010 at 5:24 PM very sad write, beautifully penned

Skat A December 4, 2010 at 4:28 PM Now that is a very interesting thought James .~Have yourself a great evening*luv~SKAT