Carol B. Poet Free verse

Like a Tree In the Desert

Prick me with your vivid green awareness
Let the white pins that needle me
Diminish into their foggy sham

The bridal wreath that scented our commitment
Now doused in unkept hopes and promises
Moss sprouting venom from hurts battled

Like a fish floating in space with no oxygen 
I swam in currents without you 
The tank occupied with endless dark clouds

Fraught with fear and loneliness
Love now submerged deep in the recess of my mind
Unclear what is sacred what is trash

I prayed you would see the light
That my white knight would return
This battle is fierce and yours to fight

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Andrea Dietrich October 29, 2017 at 6:41 PM I see you got poem of the day with this amazing one. Congrats, dear. Carol B. October 31, 2017 at 8:18 AM Thanks! :)

Ralph Sergi October 24, 2017 at 6:22 PM Hi Carol: You expounded the plight of most damsels in a very profound dilemma.! My compliments! Carol B. October 31, 2017 at 8:19 AM Thank you! :)

Connie Marcum Wong October 1, 2017 at 6:33 PM I love the metaphors in this lovely piece Carol. Congratulations on POTD! : ) Carol B. October 8, 2017 at 9:18 PM Thanks! :)

Robert Lindley September 29, 2017 at 3:47 PM Sad, deep and dark. Yet so compelling to read and ponder the tragic circumstances.. Great poetry my friend! Carol B. October 8, 2017 at 9:18 PM Thank you! :)

Silent One September 22, 2017 at 1:02 PM Very deep write.. Carol B. September 23, 2017 at 11:25 AM Thanks!

Eileen Manassian September 10, 2017 at 1:48 AM What an amazing write, Carol. Congrats on POTD. Commitment takes nurture and it's sometimes easy to let things become mundane in a long standing relationship. Thanks for the reminder to show love to those deserving of love. Carol B. November 7, 2017 at 1:15 PM Thanks so much Eileen! :)

Maurice Yvonne September 7, 2017 at 6:16 PM So deserving, congratulations. An amazing write, very impressive. Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:31 PM Thank you from the bottom of my heart! :)

Eve Roper September 7, 2017 at 5:28 PM Great imagery , Carol, congratulations on POTD... Hugs Eve ~`* Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:33 PM Thanks! :)

Gary Bateman September 7, 2017 at 2:59 PM Hello Carole!! Congratulations on POTD!!This is indeed a quite lovely poem for sure. The last Tercet stanza says it all. Superb write. Best Wishes, Gary Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:34 PM Thank you! Happy you like the poem Gary. :)

Kudzai Mhangwa September 7, 2017 at 2:23 PM Lovely poem here Carol! Congratulations Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:34 PM Thanks!

Anne-Lise Andresen September 7, 2017 at 11:39 AM - Back to congratulate you, Carol !!! :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:35 PM Thank you! :)

Sunlite Wanter September 7, 2017 at 9:47 AM Very unusual concept. Congratulations. Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:36 PM Thank you! :)

Alexis Y. September 7, 2017 at 8:23 AM Hi Carol, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on getting the poem of day. It was well deserved:-) Alexis Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:37 PM Thanks! :)

Winged Warrior September 7, 2017 at 8:14 AM Congrats!!! Carol...POTD...yahooo!...^WW^ Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:37 PM Thank you! :)

Agnes Krampe September 7, 2017 at 6:51 AM Your imagery is amazing! Congrats on POTD. Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:38 PM Thank you! :)

Andrea Dietrich September 6, 2017 at 5:51 PM wow, Carol. this is very powerful writing and I love your imagery. one of your best! Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:39 PM Andrea, I am so happy you liked my poem and imagery. :)

Freddie Robinson Jr. September 6, 2017 at 12:36 PM Very deep emotional poem that pierces the heart, Carol! Your pen sword slays. Excellent free verse poetry. Love and joy always. Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:40 PM Freddie, Thanks so much for dropping by and commenting on my poem. :)

Silent One September 6, 2017 at 8:51 AM This is very well written Carol.. Carol B. September 6, 2017 at 10:29 AM Thanks! :)

Ralph Sergi September 6, 2017 at 8:11 AM When an artist is told his work is gloomy He thanks the person for having an emotion. I feel that way its your poignant poem, Carol! Carol B. September 6, 2017 at 10:32 AM Ralph, Thanks so much for the wonderful compliment! :)

Alexis Y. September 5, 2017 at 11:25 PM Hi Carol, I agree with them below, this is a dark AND powerful write. Good ending to a well written piece. Thanks for visiting me today:-) Alexis Carol B. September 6, 2017 at 10:32 AM Thanks! :)

Connie Marcum Wong September 5, 2017 at 7:13 PM Only love can conquer, and it needs to be unconditional love. Brilliant Carol! : ) Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:41 PM Connie, I so agree with your comment. :)

Sara Kendrick September 5, 2017 at 4:54 PM I feel the emotion in this one..I hope just a work and not life..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:45 PM Sara, Thanks so much for your lovely comment. It's not pertaining to my life. However, I have witnessed this happen to someone I love.

Anne-Lise Andresen September 5, 2017 at 3:04 PM - I feel this as the struggle between good and evil ... and not least the great choices in life - A wonderful poem, Carol - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:45 PM Thanks for the wonderful comment. :)

Tim Smith September 5, 2017 at 1:17 PM Awesome, love the imagery...a fav Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:46 PM Thanks! :)

Maurice Yvonne September 5, 2017 at 1:08 PM Brilliant! Leaves me speechless. A Huge Fav for me. An impeccable inspired write. Carol B. September 9, 2017 at 1:47 PM Thanks for the amazing compliment! :)

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