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Death feels good when you're choking on your last breath With tons of worry and fret No consciousness is left Constantly in a daze Just counting down the days But it never ends I awaken another day and you're not here How will my time be spent Broken down in a hell bent No one to turn to No one to vent It's a beautiful image But hollow inside As black as the eyeliner that masks the eyes Sitting alone Not wanting to go home In a room to imitate In the right mind state To contemplate While she's hating the wait As time decided her fate

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 2/19/2011 6:45:00 AM
Thanx for the feed back and the spell check I appreciate it. =]
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Date: 2/19/2011 6:36:00 AM
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Date: 2/19/2011 3:47:00 AM
this is a good poem, it works well with me
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Date: 2/19/2011 12:43:00 AM
Welcome to the site. I know you will like it here. You have decent descriptiveness and rhyming here. Just correct the misspelled word "imatate". This word is correctly spelled "imitate".
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