Lights Out

Death feels good when you're choking on your last breath
With tons of worry and fret
No consciousness is left
Constantly in a daze
Just counting down the days
But it never ends
I awaken another day and you're not here
How will my time be spent
Broken down in a hell bent 
No one to turn to 
No one to vent
It's a beautiful image 
But hollow inside
As black as the eyeliner that masks the eyes
Sitting alone 
Not wanting to go home
In a room to imitate 
In the right mind state
To contemplate
While she's hating the wait 
As time decided her fate

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 2/19/2011 6:45:00 AM
Thanx for the feed back and the spell check I appreciate it. =]
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Date: 2/19/2011 6:36:00 AM
Welcome to Poetry Soup.. so enjoyed reading your creative write tonight.. hope your time on Soup will be fun and filled with sharing.. check out our contests too..good luck with luv..
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Date: 2/19/2011 3:47:00 AM
this is a good poem, it works well with me
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Date: 2/19/2011 12:43:00 AM
Welcome to the site. I know you will like it here. You have decent descriptiveness and rhyming here. Just correct the misspelled word "imatate". This word is correctly spelled "imitate".
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