Lights Out

Death feels good when you're choking on your last breath
With tons of worry and fret
No consciousness is left
Constantly in a daze
Just counting down the days
But it never ends
I awaken another day and you're not here
How will my time be spent
Broken down in a hell bent 
No one to turn to 
No one to vent
It's a beautiful image 
But hollow inside
As black as the eyeliner that masks the eyes
Sitting alone 
Not wanting to go home
In a room to imitate 
In the right mind state
To contemplate
While she's hating the wait 
As time decided her fate
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Baca Avatar
February 19, 2011 at 6:45 AM
Thanx for the feed back and the spell check I appreciate it. =]
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February 19, 2011 at 6:36 AM
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February 19, 2011 at 3:47 AM
this is a good poem, it works well with me
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February 19, 2011 at 12:43 AM
Welcome to the site. I know you will like it here. You have decent descriptiveness and rhyming here. Just correct the misspelled word "imatate". This word is correctly spelled "imitate".
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