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Lightning Strikes Electrify a Kiss

Lightning strikes electrify a kiss Light Streaking Across the Black onyx sky Image burned in hearts And vision etched in minds Moon beams brightly in dark night Splashing bliss in star crossed eyes Lightning strikes electrify a kiss Two souls ignite, on a night like this Etheree Poem Syllable count gradually increases one syllable each lines as follows First Line 1, 2nd line2, ...3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10 Total syllable count is 55 John Derek Hamilton July 24,2016

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Alexis Y.

Date: 1/24/2017 6:45:00 PM

Hi John, You've penned a good etheree. I found it to be romantic. It had lovely imagery as well. Congratulations on your placement in the "E" form contest: -) Alexis

John Hamilton
Date: 1/24/2017 7:37:00 PM

Thanks Alexis

Janis Thompson

Date: 1/24/2017 4:34:00 PM

This is great John. Neatly done and flows smoothly. A 7. Congratulations

John Hamilton
Date: 1/24/2017 7:37:00 PM

Thanks Janis

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/29/2016 1:18:00 AM

Oh this is lovely!!! It would have won had you entered it in the contest:)

John Hamilton
Date: 7/29/2016 10:34:00 AM

I don't know about that, but thanks, I've changed it 3 times still not completely happy with it. Thanks for your constant support very much appreciated! JDH

Tom Quigley

Date: 7/25/2016 6:37:00 PM

Lovely! Well done.

John Hamilton
Date: 7/25/2016 8:29:00 PM

Thanks Tom, they are a little restricting with syllable counts but I enjoy a challenge. Thanks again