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Life's Raindrop

Just imagine...
Ambling mazily 
Through an uncharted no man's land
Wrecked by the most wicked of drought
A screaming agony of thirst has befallen you
Your spirit is steadily draining out of you
Every ounce of your sweat, your life
Oozing profusely out of your pores
A slow, cruel death is sure to come to you
An oasis is nowhere in sight, then a raindrop
As if like magic, drips between your eyes
And trickles down your nose, then your upper lip...
You taste it with your curled tongue 
You sigh with relief, you dance with joy 
Thinking a cloudburst would follow
You tilt your head up, close your eyes
And stick out tongue, waiting...and waiting...
To satiate your intense thirst, at last
And then nothing? No rain.
Isn't that a pity?


Submitted for...
Open Poetry 3 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Charlotte Puddifoot
Date written: 04/21/2021

Date originally written: 11/18/2018
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Canerdy Avatar
December 31, 2018 at 8:44 PM
CONGRATS on your win, Edward! Janice
Ibeh Avatar
January 1, 2019 at 1:49 PM
Thank you so much, Janice!:-)
Roper Avatar
December 29, 2018 at 12:49 PM
Nicely done, Edward. I see congratulations are in order . May your new year be very blessed. Hugs Eve~`*
Ibeh Avatar
December 30, 2018 at 1:02 PM
Thank you very much, Eve!:-) Happy New Year to you, too!
Marcum Wong Avatar
December 2, 2018 at 1:48 AM
Well done Edward! Competition was very high for this contest and I enjoyed your offering! Congratulations!
Ibeh Avatar
December 2, 2018 at 7:52 AM
Thank you for your wonderful comment and visit, Connie!:-) Much love...
Cornish Avatar
November 26, 2018 at 12:01 PM
Original thoughts well presented Edward - you could have easily been higher up but you placed regardless - congrats on a fine write
Ibeh Avatar
November 26, 2018 at 6:54 PM
Thank you very much, Craig:-) I'm really okay with my spot. The fact that I placed in your contest is enough for me!
Leiser Avatar
November 26, 2018 at 12:16 AM
Your unique and creative approach to the subject is really great, Edward! I liked how your incorporate the senses in your poem so well! Congrats on your win! :)
Ibeh Avatar
November 26, 2018 at 5:30 AM
Thank you so much for the wonderful comments, Laura!:-) Most appreciated.
Gauthier Avatar
November 25, 2018 at 7:44 PM
Back with more congrats, Edward.
Ibeh Avatar
November 25, 2018 at 7:46 PM
Thanks again, Line!:-) Most appreciated.
Roper Avatar
November 25, 2018 at 6:55 PM
Nicely done, Edward, congratulations on your placement in the contest I enjoyed reading..
Ibeh Avatar
November 25, 2018 at 7:42 PM
Thank you so much, Eve!:-)
Moorman Avatar
November 25, 2018 at 6:46 PM
Edward, what an intriguing poem! One tiny drop was all it took to create such a tremendous reaction --- then, nothing! Great imagination, my friend! Congratulations on your win!
Ibeh Avatar
November 25, 2018 at 7:44 PM
Thank you very much, Curtis!:-) I really appreciate the wonderful comments!
Messina Avatar
November 25, 2018 at 6:41 PM
Outstanding and intense poetry, Edward. Many Congrats on you win...Charlie
Ibeh Avatar
November 25, 2018 at 7:41 PM
Thank you very much, Charles!:-) Most obliged.
Gauthier Avatar
November 22, 2018 at 3:27 PM
Congrats on your top win, Edward. Well done.
Ibeh Avatar
November 22, 2018 at 5:16 PM
Thank you very much, Line!:-) Your continued support means a lot to me. Happy Thanksgiving, friend!
Dietrich Avatar
November 18, 2018 at 8:13 PM
oh I love how you took on the raindrop theme. One of the better ones I have read so far, Edward. REally really nice!!
Ibeh Avatar
November 18, 2018 at 8:56 PM
Thank you so much, Andrea!:-) Really glad you liked it!
La France Avatar
November 18, 2018 at 5:45 PM
Edward, this is wonderful for the contest, I really like it a lot, well done ~
Ibeh Avatar
November 18, 2018 at 7:42 PM
Thank you so much, Constance!:-) Much appreciated!
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