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Form J Jueju (untraditional) Poetry Contest Sponsored by Constance la France 10/07/24

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Ken's had a car accident his life hangs in the balance there’s no brain activity his life support was switched off declared clinically dead Dee cradled him tenderly as he took his final breath their wedding vows remembered donor card activated vital organs are removed saving the lives of others even in death he lives on Dee walks behind Ken’s coffin her long ebony tresses cover her face like a veil mourner’s eyes glisten with tears

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/9/2024 7:30:00 AM

Gosh I had not seen this earlier. Last verse is so heartbreaking.

Constance La France

Date: 11/13/2024 11:45:00 AM

Jan, congrats on your win in my contest, like the image, like the poem, well done, love Constance

Michael Tor

Date: 11/4/2024 6:49:00 PM

Just wonderfully penned Jan. Heartfelt piece that probably happened in truth somewhere out there. Thank you for sharing. Hugs...

Paul Callus

Date: 10/27/2024 4:16:00 AM

Beautiful and yet so sad, Jan. Yours is a topic that many more people need to get acquainted with...giving others a second chance to live. ~ Hugs // paul

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/17/2024 10:14:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful yet sad write. Great Picture... I also like humor the best but sometimes a different write can be good. Have a wonderful day with your win..........................

Ink Empress

Date: 10/16/2024 7:25:00 AM

Dear jan, this is so poignant and heart wrenching, i felt so many emotions reading this jueju! Youv written very well and did an excellent job! Congratulations also on winning. Sending you light

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/15/2024 6:23:00 AM

Truly sad! Some endure such terrible things. Great poetry. Great imagery at the end.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/12/2024 11:36:00 AM

Congratulations on your winning work in Constance's contest. I can feel the pain that the poem records. Way to go. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Sara K

thriveni c mysore

Date: 10/11/2024 10:13:00 PM

Congratulations on your win dear poet.

Tania Kitchin

Date: 10/10/2024 3:34:00 AM

Jan, a great emotive poem, best of luck in the contest. Hugs

Arthur Vaso

Date: 10/9/2024 11:03:00 PM

Another beautifully woven poem Lin, oh.......... wait a sec this is Jan!!!!!

Lin Lane
Date: 10/10/2024 8:28:00 AM

lo Art, you are such a jokester to do this to both of us. She hasn't read it yet, so she's not in on the joke. Love it!

Len Gasun

Date: 10/9/2024 10:34:00 PM

A beautifully sad poem that carried me away my dearest poet friend Jan. I'm deeply moved and touched by the story and picture painted by your creative words and poem form, jeiju. Thank you so much for sharing your wonderful talent in poetry, not only writing stellar poems that make us laugh but cry. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs

Mike Gentile

Date: 10/9/2024 6:02:00 AM

A side of jan I have not seen is presented here so rich in deep emotion! You talent I well respect Jan, I am moved!! A Happy Tuesday to you xxoo

Anisha Dutta

Date: 10/9/2024 12:39:00 AM

Your illustration and feeling to move every reader's heart. To live with different lives is great. You have analysed from a specific angle. I got charmed. Love.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 10/8/2024 3:54:00 PM

Jan, a story well told in a fairly brief manner. It moves right along and hits home. Death is a tough subject, but you are a master!

John Read

Date: 10/8/2024 9:18:00 AM

Good luck in the contest Jan, what happened to your sense of humour lol.xx

Jan Allison
Date: 10/8/2024 9:34:00 AM

i wrote 2 funny poems yesterday John, one is for the book, the other was the silly one about a hat. I do surprise people and write the occasional serious poem but humour is always my favourite. hugs jan xx

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 10/7/2024 7:54:00 PM

This is a sad poem but it is many poems. A man dies. A woman must cope. The deceased man's organs live on in other's lives. When we touch another, some reaction occurs. My mind is stimulated by this poem. Thank you for sharing this.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/8/2024 7:09:00 AM

thanks Hilda:-) I dont often write dark poetry I much prefer humour but am not posting it on soup as I'm saving it for my next book:-) hugs Jan xx

Michael Tor

Date: 10/7/2024 4:33:00 PM

Heartfelt Jan. Your words created sympathy and sorrow toward the wife. Well written. Hugs...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/8/2024 7:07:00 AM

thanks Michael, I seldom write dark poetry like this I much prefer humour in fact yesterday I wrote this poem, another farty poem destined for the book, and a funny poem for a contest. I never know where my muse will take me or when! hugs Jan xx

Joanne Mobley

Date: 10/7/2024 3:49:00 PM

i cried reading this such a tragic way to go hope your at peace joanne x

Lin Lane

Date: 10/7/2024 3:22:00 PM

That's a 'boo hoo' story, Jan but tastefully done.

Lin Lane
Date: 10/10/2024 8:29:00 AM

Oh no, you're not. Just because I wrote a funny, stinky one and Jan wrote a serious one, you will never confuse the two of us. Hugs, sweet friend.

Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/9/2024 11:05:00 PM

Your both confusing me now!!! LOL

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2024 3:23:00 PM

thanks Lin i wrote this at the same time as the mouse poem - talk about going from one extreme to another, also did another poem for the book but the theme was one i had to do lol:-) hugs jan xx