Jan Allison Poet Jueju

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Form J Jueju (untraditional) Poetry Contest Sponsored by Constance la France 10/07/24

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life after death

Ken's had a car accident
his life hangs in the balance
there’s no brain activity
his life support was switched off

declared clinically dead
Dee cradled him tenderly
as he took his final breath
their wedding vows remembered

donor card activated
vital organs are removed
saving the lives of others
even in death he lives on

Dee walks behind Ken’s coffin
her long ebony tresses
cover her face like a veil
mourner’s eyes glisten with tears

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Andrea Dietrich December 9, 2024 at 7:30 AM Gosh I had not seen this earlier. Last verse is so heartbreaking.

Constance La France November 13, 2024 at 11:45 AM Jan, congrats on your win in my contest, like the image, like the poem, well done, love Constance

Michael Tor November 4, 2024 at 6:49 PM Just wonderfully penned Jan. Heartfelt piece that probably happened in truth somewhere out there. Thank you for sharing. Hugs...

Paul Callus October 27, 2024 at 4:16 AM Beautiful and yet so sad, Jan. Yours is a topic that many more people need to get acquainted with...giving others a second chance to live. ~ Hugs // paul

Paula Goldsmith October 17, 2024 at 10:14 AM Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful yet sad write. Great Picture... I also like humor the best but sometimes a different write can be good. Have a wonderful day with your win..........................

Ink Empress October 16, 2024 at 7:25 AM Dear jan, this is so poignant and heart wrenching, i felt so many emotions reading this jueju! Youv written very well and did an excellent job! Congratulations also on winning. Sending you light

Kim Rodrigues October 15, 2024 at 6:23 AM Truly sad! Some endure such terrible things. Great poetry. Great imagery at the end.

Sara Kendrick October 12, 2024 at 11:36 AM Congratulations on your winning work in Constance's contest. I can feel the pain that the poem records. Way to go. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Sara K

thriveni c mysore October 11, 2024 at 10:13 PM Congratulations on your win dear poet.

Tania Kitchin October 10, 2024 at 3:34 AM Jan, a great emotive poem, best of luck in the contest. Hugs

Arthur Vaso October 9, 2024 at 11:03 PM Another beautifully woven poem Lin, oh.......... wait a sec this is Jan!!!!! Lin Lane October 10, 2024 at 8:28 AM lo Art, you are such a jokester to do this to both of us. She hasn't read it yet, so she's not in on the joke. Love it!

Len Gasun October 9, 2024 at 10:34 PM A beautifully sad poem that carried me away my dearest poet friend Jan. I'm deeply moved and touched by the story and picture painted by your creative words and poem form, jeiju. Thank you so much for sharing your wonderful talent in poetry, not only writing stellar poems that make us laugh but cry. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs

Mike Gentile October 9, 2024 at 6:02 AM A side of jan I have not seen is presented here so rich in deep emotion! You talent I well respect Jan, I am moved!! A Happy Tuesday to you xxoo

Anisha Dutta October 9, 2024 at 12:39 AM Your illustration and feeling to move every reader's heart. To live with different lives is great. You have analysed from a specific angle. I got charmed. Love.

Duke Beaufort October 8, 2024 at 3:54 PM Jan, a story well told in a fairly brief manner. It moves right along and hits home. Death is a tough subject, but you are a master!

John Read October 8, 2024 at 9:18 AM Good luck in the contest Jan, what happened to your sense of humour lol.xx Jan Allison October 8, 2024 at 9:34 AM i wrote 2 funny poems yesterday John, one is for the book, the other was the silly one about a hat. I do surprise people and write the occasional serious poem but humour is always my favourite. hugs jan xx

Hilda Greenhough October 7, 2024 at 7:54 PM This is a sad poem but it is many poems. A man dies. A woman must cope. The deceased man's organs live on in other's lives. When we touch another, some reaction occurs. My mind is stimulated by this poem. Thank you for sharing this. Jan Allison October 8, 2024 at 7:09 AM thanks Hilda:-) I dont often write dark poetry I much prefer humour but am not posting it on soup as I'm saving it for my next book:-) hugs Jan xx

Michael Tor October 7, 2024 at 4:33 PM Heartfelt Jan. Your words created sympathy and sorrow toward the wife. Well written. Hugs... Jan Allison October 8, 2024 at 7:07 AM thanks Michael, I seldom write dark poetry like this I much prefer humour in fact yesterday I wrote this poem, another farty poem destined for the book, and a funny poem for a contest. I never know where my muse will take me or when! hugs Jan xx

Joanne Mobley October 7, 2024 at 3:49 PM i cried reading this such a tragic way to go hope your at peace joanne x

Lin Lane October 7, 2024 at 3:22 PM That's a 'boo hoo' story, Jan but tastefully done. Lin Lane October 10, 2024 at 8:29 AM Oh no, you're not. Just because I wrote a funny, stinky one and Jan wrote a serious one, you will never confuse the two of us. Hugs, sweet friend. Arthur Vaso October 9, 2024 at 11:05 PM Your both confusing me now!!! LOL Jan Allison October 7, 2024 at 3:23 PM thanks Lin i wrote this at the same time as the mouse poem - talk about going from one extreme to another, also did another poem for the book but the theme was one i had to do lol:-) hugs jan xx