Life

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life a wobbly drop
on a slimy lotus leaf
may fall down and break

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/3/2025 10:01:00 AM

Yes, I wonder where it might land. I enjoy seeing this waterdropets. If you look closely at one and it is a mirror of its surroundings. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Sara K

Brian Sambourne

Date: 1/10/2022 7:55:00 PM

Precarious life is skillfully caught in this delightful haiku. Strong metaphor in that"wobbly drop." Congratulations! Brian

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/9/2022 8:25:00 AM

Valsa, you've written a beautiful haiku, captured the scene perfectly in your picture, and conveyed a powerful message about life.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/9/2022 5:52:00 AM

Great capture of the moment in your photo--and a wonderful message on life, Valsa.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/9/2022 3:18:00 AM

- Beautiful description in a few words, Valsa :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Valsa George
Date: 1/9/2022 3:46:00 AM

Thanks a lot Anne... :) Love and hugs !

Anselmo Boles

Date: 1/9/2022 1:56:00 AM

Pointing out the fragility and travails of life...in three distinct lines. Wonderful Valsa!!...ab

Valsa George
Date: 1/9/2022 3:45:00 AM

Glad you enjoyed it Anselmo. I consider you as an authority in the subtler versions of poetry like haiku and tanka.

Marshall Iftekhar Ahmed

Date: 1/9/2022 1:05:00 AM

Beautiful! traditional Haiku! See Valsa, you are thinking of life, one way or another, that way too! Life breaks means its breaking the life of its inhabitants! Maybe you are talking about death, but if I say by breaking, it means life becoming impure! Am I right or am i right! ha ha ha! Thanks - Marshall

Valsa George
Date: 1/9/2022 3:43:00 AM

Yes, life can become impure too ! Breaking of life can be interpreted in many ways ! Thanks a lot for your analytical reading of my haiku.... Marshall !