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Lies

She’s wise


                then cries


His lies 


           Despise


Ted deceives her… she’s wise, then cries out
uncovering his lies … despise, shout!

Write me a Tyburn Contest
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01/22/18

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Phyllis Babcock

January 24, 2018 at 11:18 AM

Great on you for trying this new form Jan. Looks great to me. Hope all is well with you. I am finally getting a little life back into me. love phyl

Jan Allison

January 24, 2018 at 5:30 PM

So good to see you back Phyllis its lovely to see you back on soup:-) hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

January 24, 2018 at 3:37 AM

I don't have a clue how to do this form Jan. Kudos on creating one! You did well! : )

Jan Allison

January 24, 2018 at 7:42 AM

Technically my poem isn't correct as the form says one two syllable word but Kim is allowing a little leeway. i am working on one with the proper form but it needs tweaking, it is quite a challenge!:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

January 23, 2018 at 10:09 PM

Jan, I see you "got 'er done." Yes, on the two words vs. one 2-syllable word thing, I think she is going to allow both ways now. So I think you will be fine with this one. I wish I really understood the rule. IF I go by Soup's definition, it needs to be a 2-syllable word?? Bu for me, the examples of tyburn poems displayed with the form did not seem to rhyme. Anyway, you DID IT!! It will be fun seeing them when they are all together on the winner list!

Jan Allison

January 24, 2018 at 7:40 AM

I got it done in the end Andrea but it is a challenge:-) I'm so glad Kim is allowing a little leeway with the form and allowing 2 words hugs jan xx

Viv Wigley

January 23, 2018 at 1:27 AM

An odd style, this, first time I've come across it. Good luck with the contest, me duck x

Jan Allison

January 24, 2018 at 7:39 AM

First and last time for me Mr Viv, I am working on another poem but it is not inspiring - YOUR poem is awesome!:-) hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer

January 22, 2018 at 5:24 PM

a very strange format, jan, but you've done very well with it. best of luck in the contest...

Jan Allison

January 22, 2018 at 5:27 PM

Thanks Ilene, its not one I've written before and it is a challenge but i do love to try some of the contests which introduce new forms to us:-) hugs jan xx

John Gondolf

January 22, 2018 at 2:02 PM

Jan, nicely put together. Best of luck. John

Jan Allison

January 22, 2018 at 3:36 PM

Thanks John:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Gentile

January 22, 2018 at 1:12 PM

I've never tried this, great theme, Good Luck Jan xxoo

Jan Allison

January 22, 2018 at 3:35 PM

Thanks Mike its my first attempt too. I'm working on a second poem just needs tweaking a little bit now:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

January 22, 2018 at 12:36 PM

- Looks easy ... but difficult ! - Really well done, Jan - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison

January 22, 2018 at 12:47 PM

It found it really challenging Anne-Lise. I have another poem I'm working on but still have tweaks to make before i can post it:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

January 22, 2018 at 12:24 PM

Good luck in the contest Jan Regards Tom

Jan Allison

January 22, 2018 at 12:28 PM

Thanks Tom, I've not tried this form before and found it quite a challenge with the restricted syllables and placing of the words in a certain order:-) hugs jan xx

Mick Talbot

January 22, 2018 at 11:05 AM

Inspirational Jan, you will see, inspired three more from me. Wishing you success in the contest, warm hugs... Mick

Jan Allison

January 22, 2018 at 11:24 AM

Oh wow Mick great that inspired you again:-) , its my first attempt at the form, Kim is allowing to words for the first part but I'm also working on with 2 two syllable words too but it still needs tweaking:-) hugs jan xx