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Left Their Mark

Thoughts on the edge of an ocean where waves kiss the sand Wishing it's frothy motion could draw out my poison Craving a certain happiness or at least to be okay Burning need within me to change my ways Spasms of pain feels memories that paint my essence so dark Even though I've forgiven those who on me left their mark

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John Fleming

Date: 9/8/2019 10:21:00 AM

I find this all rather desperate and depressing...clever writing...but you know of course I much prefer your up-beat moods; there again it is a fact that we all feel somewhat drawn and weary at times. I take solace in the knowledge that being of an indomitable spirit, that you undoubtedly are -- you will bounce back! Once a warrior Princess always a warrior Princess. In great affection. :) john

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/8/2019 10:50:00 AM

Ah thank you John!;) with this it was just a poem s had stashed away until I found I could finish it! Do the mood was then but not now!;) all my affection;)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/6/2019 7:55:00 AM

Sometimes even the ocean is not large enough. That’s when we need to reach for God’s hand and he will help us walk on water.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/6/2019 8:47:00 AM

Thx Rick and your so right! ;)

Elizabeth Kinch

Date: 9/5/2019 3:06:00 AM

Let that ocean wash away your pain Brenda. Such an awesome write with powerful imagery.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/5/2019 9:09:00 AM

Elizabeth thank you so very much!;)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/4/2019 6:59:00 PM

Well said, Brenda!

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/5/2019 1:12:00 AM

Thank you once again Kin! Your too kind!;)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/4/2019 6:00:00 PM

this is a powerful poem with great imagery to boot. I really liked this, Brenda

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/5/2019 1:11:00 AM

Thanks so much Andrea! And thanks for the read!;)

Chris Green

Date: 9/4/2019 12:33:00 PM

It is always better to forgive though forgetting is not that easy. Really nicely expressed Brenda.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/5/2019 1:10:00 AM

Your right Chris! But I am a sucker for second chances! One of my biggest faults! Forgiving is easy so is forgetting if you don't you will be miserable! Thanks so much for your comment!;)