Leaving the Station

The smoke is a question mark...
My view of you is covered in gray
You pause, look back, then walk away
You’ve neglected to open your umbrella…

Tomorrow, under a different sky
I will listen to the songs of yesterday
The world leaves behind a sign language for broken hearts
It is cloudy, it is beginning to rain…
Goodbyes are bitter ales we drank today
I look again, through the smudges of the day
We are going to leave behind a trail of smoke
A sound like a tired mother calling in her child
The train whistle rings in the dusk

I take a last look through the window
I have said my goodbyes
The train begins to move
We are leaving the station platform
Tears weep down the window
Spilling over the imprints of my hand
I found myself dry eyed and my throat too tight to speak
Finding a place to put the carry-ons
People are chatting, settling in 
Happy, excited, anxious to be departing

A thin straight lift and a gray, silvery curve
Like a sickle for harvesting the first star…
The smoke is a question mark


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 "Write A Backwards Poem"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 5/19/2011 7:10:00 AM
OMG. I am overcome with emotion reading this poem. It is absolutely beautiful. Thanks so much for sharing this. Good Luck to you! :)
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Date: 5/19/2011 1:29:00 AM
It reads like the scene from a 1940's movie Carrie, wonderful read. Good luck in Matt's contest. Have a great day....:)
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Date: 5/17/2011 2:51:00 PM
So heartbreaking, Carrie. Thinking of saying goodbye in the rain knowing you may never meet again. It reads well forward and backward! Best wishes in the contest. (My mother was mad I tried to go brunette, so she picked up a wig with blonde and brown streaks. I doubt anyone even knew it was a wig - quite a good match for the blonde parts.) Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/17/2011 8:35:00 AM
Just fantastic dear poet ! How awesome is this; I read it from top to bottom at first glance, and then I took note that you entered this fantastic write as a "Backwards Poem", and my O my, words truly can not express how I felt reading it; both ways ! Awesome Carrie ! A true fav, if'n ya don't mind ! Have a wonderful week....much love, james
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Date: 5/17/2011 7:58:00 AM
Very creative and expressive work..Reads like winners' circle to me..Enjoyed reading this morn..Thanks for stopping by my blog with understanding thoughts and feelings penned...Sara
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Date: 5/17/2011 12:21:00 AM
A beautiful story telling poem here really enjoyed it tonight. Enjoy your morning. :)
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Date: 5/16/2011 4:43:00 PM
BRILLIANT!!!! simply BRILLIANT!!! Carrie. Lainie
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Date: 5/16/2011 4:42:00 PM
very creative and well written piece, enjoyed it this one carrie.
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Date: 5/16/2011 11:48:00 AM
Great Poem
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Date: 5/16/2011 10:23:00 AM
you DESERVE to flaunt your poetry ^_^ -- I am a big fan ^_^ haha I am more than happy to be an agent of you being a "show-off" I think you are one awesome poet! and your poetry deserves to be read in a book & like I said to you, I am soo happy that it arrived when it did, it was just such perfect timing ^_^ it was a total honor to make the book for you ^_^ I LOVE it that you love it!! Super hugs to you & advanced Happy Birthday ^_^!!!
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Date: 5/16/2011 10:21:00 AM
Wonderful entry, so cool and quite, Carrie
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Date: 5/16/2011 10:21:00 AM
oh my gosh!! I am just loving this Carrie-- I literally said "oh gosh" out loud when I read your note that this was for the backwards contest!! I love reading it BOTH ways-- this just grabbed me, just WOW!! and Carrie dear-- oops it says too long..cont'd
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Date: 5/16/2011 8:13:00 AM
wow how cool you done did it again! Happy B Day this month too, my son's is today the 16th! Light & Love
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Date: 5/16/2011 12:31:00 AM
* “Again I Find Myself Walking Through Beautiful Words * Yet Rarely Do I Find They As Capivating & Lovely As Your Own * Dear Gifted & Beautiful Carrie * And In My Heart I Feel That It Would Be Sorrowed * If Ever Your Glowing Light * Were Never Afore These My Eyes * I Found Myself Upon That Train * But There Was No Smoke * As I Smiled * Into Your Beautiful Eyes * A Fave In Fave * Hugs & Kisses * Kisses & Hugs * Always & Forever * Sarah” *
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