Kim Rodrigues Poet Tyburn

Leaving the Passengers Behind

LEAVING THE PASSENGERS BEHIND

chartreuse
                  caboose 
footloose 
                  vamoose

The overworked     chartreuse caboose     spun,
ran off the track    footloose     vamoose     done.

1/18/2018

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Anisha Dutta January 23, 2018 at 10:10 PM Unfamiliar form to me, but I like it. Trying to enjoy. love. Kim Rodrigues January 23, 2018 at 10:16 PM Thanks, Anisha!

Paul Callus January 23, 2018 at 3:55 PM This is a fine Tyburn, Kim; follows the rules perfectly. I found this form challenging and time consuming. Hope it was worth the effort!:) Regards // paul Kim Rodrigues January 23, 2018 at 4:00 PM Thanks! I actually enjoy writing these!

Jan Allison January 20, 2018 at 11:20 AM what a great example, you have set us a real challenge Kim!!!:-) hugs jan xx Kim Rodrigues January 20, 2018 at 3:13 PM Thanks so much, Jan :)

Laura Leiser January 19, 2018 at 10:22 PM Excellent, Kim! Kim Rodrigues January 20, 2018 at 7:24 AM Thank you, Laura :)

Andrea Dietrich January 19, 2018 at 6:53 PM It's a very difficult form and you came up with a good witty one, Kim as your model. Soup mail! Kim Rodrigues January 19, 2018 at 9:01 PM Thank you, Andrea!

Constance La France January 19, 2018 at 4:05 PM Kim, a hard form to have make sense, will give it a try though, great example Kim Rodrigues January 19, 2018 at 4:49 PM Thanks, Constance!

Eric Boddie January 19, 2018 at 3:30 PM i dont know what a chartreuse is....but can i get footloose with this....and if you ever find Love's caboose....what you feel will be beyond vamoose....Love the rhyme kim....;) Kim Rodrigues January 19, 2018 at 3:34 PM Thanks, Eric!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart January 19, 2018 at 8:07 AM I'm not familiar with this form but what fun! Thoroughly enjoyed this! Delightful ink :) xomo! Kim Rodrigues January 19, 2018 at 9:20 AM I hope you give it a try in my contest :)

Vijay Pandit January 19, 2018 at 7:13 AM A fun read, Kim..you paint a vivid picture of the caboose in a hurry..having been set free..done well in just a few words. Kim Rodrigues January 19, 2018 at 7:14 AM Thank you, Vijay!

Roy Pett January 19, 2018 at 6:58 AM Absolutely brilliant Kim, you make this difficult form look so easy, very clever and interesting, great job. :)) Kim Rodrigues January 19, 2018 at 7:14 AM Thank you, Roy! :)

Silent One January 19, 2018 at 6:03 AM Interesting form Kim, will have to check it out.. Kim Rodrigues January 19, 2018 at 6:25 AM Thanks!