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Leaving Landfall At Dawn

Looking back, a morning mist hangs
In the deeply shadowed valleys
From the deck of ‘Atlanta,’
Land recedes on the power of wind
In the deeply shadowed valleys
The sun is  slowly awakening trees
Land recedes on the power of wind
Sails respond to a surging sea
The sun is  slowly awakening trees
From the deck of ‘Atlanta,’
Sails respond to a surging sea
Looking back, a morning mist hangs


For Julia Ward’s Sailing Contest
Deadline: Tuesday, August 23, 2022 

For Russell's  Complete your poem Contest

Previous poem Russell Sivey’s  5 minute Challenge

Sailing
She misses the morning mist;
the deep, shadowed vista of valleys
hair flying
across her face like curtains

her papa at the helm of  ‘Atlanta’. 
passing plagues of flies at the bridge
where fishermen cleaned their catches.

Each day like a page, once turned
no chance of ever re-tracing.
5/13/2013


Using this word list I wrote for 5 minutes
Mist, helm, part, page, plaque, hair, traces, bridge, curtain, vista

For my second poem I decided to abandon the word list and changed the form from Free verse to a  Pantoum.  I also made a new title.
I liked how the repeating lines gave a feeling of looking back to the land, feeling the wind take the boat and watch the land receding.  I am really enjoying trying new forms.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 5/31/2021 7:07:00 AM
Beautiful. There is definitely something magical about early morning mist ~
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Date: 6/19/2013 1:13:00 PM
Hi Suz, CONGRATULATIONS in Russell's contest.... Luv~ SKAT
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Date: 6/19/2013 2:54:00 AM
Suz this is a fabulous Pantoum. Congratulation on your win. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 5/25/2013 9:51:00 AM
love these Suzanne, just glad i've caught up with this wonderful poetry...
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Date: 5/20/2013 10:13:00 PM
Agreed with Gail... sometimes poetry can feel a bit unrealistic as far as descriptions... but these words took me to the place you describe as if you were actually watching the scene and writing it out at the same time. Very well put together!
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