Richard Lamoureux Poet Pantoum

Leather Jacket

Leather jacket draped over her shoulders
My feeble attempt at gallantry
Protecting sweet maiden from the cold
A small smile spreads over her face

My feeble attempt at gallantry
Still I longed for the rain to reveal her breasts
A small smile spreads over her face
The rain would have soaked her blouse

Still I longed for the rain to reveal her breasts
The fabric clinging to those lovely curves
The rain would have soaked her blouse
We ran together my hand around her waist

The fabric clinging to those lovely curves
I could feel her softness my heart pounding
We ran together my hand around her waist
Coming to rest under an old oak tree

I could feel her softness my heart pounding
She allowed my hands to explore
Coming to rest under an old oak tree
Lips joined as my jacket fell to the ground

She allowed my hands to explore
My feeble attempt at Gallantry
Created the moment that brought me here
A small smile spreads over her face


I broke the Pantoum form with the very last line but
I prefer it this way. Besides, my hands were already engaged.

Leather Jacket on Shoulders Contest

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Skat A July 4, 2013 at 12:11 AM "tremendously awesome........... congrats!!! SKAT" Richard Lamoureux July 4, 2013 at 7:20 AM Thanks SKAT

Monterey Sirak June 29, 2013 at 5:33 AM Congrats. Well deserved win. Big sigh for the romance seeping from every line Richard Lamoureux June 29, 2013 at 8:02 AM Thanks Monterey, I had fun writing this one, I had no idea what direction it would take me.

Connie Gildersleeve June 28, 2013 at 3:38 PM A fabulous poem my gallant friend. It certainly deserved a win. Congratulations! Warm Smiles, Connie Richard Lamoureux June 28, 2013 at 7:56 PM Thanks Connie, I kind of like this one myself. Mind you I have other poems I enter and they don't make it on the list so you never can tell what will catch the judges eye.

Judy Konos June 26, 2013 at 5:52 PM Richard you could have won this with a "I don't know" form! The only thing bad about it is NOW I have to go take a cold shower! Damn Boy! Richard Lamoureux June 27, 2013 at 6:35 PM You make me smile Judy. Thanks!

Debbie Guzzi June 26, 2013 at 2:45 PM Yup with the oak tree ;) ;) Congrad's on your win. Light & Love Richard Lamoureux June 27, 2013 at 6:35 PM Thanks Debbie

Heather Ober June 26, 2013 at 2:33 PM FAVED. 'Nough said ;) Kelowna sounds gorgeous, Rick! I will definitely have to put it on my list of places to see. We are lucky to live in such a diverse country, yes? Richard Lamoureux June 27, 2013 at 6:36 PM You would not be dissapointed. Thanks for your kind comment. I am pleased you like my poem.

Cecilia Macfarlane June 6, 2013 at 9:27 PM I have another reason to love rain.....a passionate piece full of wonderment! Love this one Rick. Hugs Richard Lamoureux June 27, 2013 at 6:37 PM Thanks Cecilia, hugs back to you.

Kyle Kriticos June 3, 2013 at 12:52 AM It looks like your attempt at gallantry was a solid one. Koodos to you for the imagery and brilliant use of repetition. Richard Lamoureux June 3, 2013 at 6:15 AM Thanks Kyle, so nice to have a visit from you.

Andrea Dietrich June 2, 2013 at 3:56 PM wowow, THIS is GOOD. Too bad you had to break the form but I did not even notice. THE best I've seen hands down. FAVE Richard Lamoureux June 2, 2013 at 4:42 PM Thanks Andrea, you honor me!

Kim Van Breda June 2, 2013 at 1:33 AM Your poems are so inspiring -- not only in their excellent content and originality, but the way I learn from your use of different formats3 Richard Lamoureux June 2, 2013 at 7:20 AM Thanks so much Kim! Hugs Rick.

Nette Onclaud June 1, 2013 at 11:53 AM well, i must say the sensual and gallant touches blend so well in this work , richard.. a daring, sweet feat... greeat stuff!..:) Richard Lamoureux June 2, 2013 at 7:21 AM Thanks Nette ;0)

Eileen Manassian June 1, 2013 at 8:12 AM Wow wow wow wow wow WOW wow wow WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW! ;) Hmmmmm...we do like gallant men! They win the girl....and everything else! ;) LOVELY WRITE! Richard Lamoureux June 1, 2013 at 8:26 AM Thanks Eileen, is it really Gallantry if we have an ulterior motive???

Manel Gunatillake June 1, 2013 at 6:13 AM 7 must. congratulation on your contest. I am working on a Rondeau. but my computer having a problem, can't retrieve. this is my sons lap top I am using. so until I get my computer back, I cannot finish, Thank you for your concern. Hugs Richard Lamoureux June 1, 2013 at 7:05 AM Good morning Manel, glad to hear all is well.

Elai Cee June 1, 2013 at 12:42 AM Amazing! really! nothing to say...;) Richard Lamoureux June 1, 2013 at 7:07 AM Thanks. ;0)

Timothy Hicks June 1, 2013 at 12:24 AM ... my feeble attempt at gallantry. I really, really liked this line! It's like an average joe putting on the face of a noble knight. And as far as the rules go, the story wouldn't have made much sense in the end (if you kept to them anyway). That's the tricky part, methinks. Enjoyed this one very much! Richard Lamoureux June 1, 2013 at 7:09 AM Hi Tim, sometimes I have to use my poetic licence. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.

Colleen Bono May 31, 2013 at 10:03 PM like I said about the turd in the grass.good job Richard Lamoureux May 31, 2013 at 10:05 PM Lol

Delysia Hendricks May 31, 2013 at 9:36 PM Ooh-la-la, de man be bewitched by dem honkers. lol @ your ending. After reading this I'm tempted to invite a man out when I know it will rain - without a jacket, of course (hahaha). Ooo, the mean in me!! Lovely fun yet serious write with much depth, Richard. I like, very much. Licia :-) Richard Lamoureux May 31, 2013 at 9:49 PM Thanks Licia, you make me smile once again.

Delysia Hendricks May 31, 2013 at 8:36 PM lol. Gallant and losing out on a good view? You foolish man (lol). I can't wait to see this poem in its finished form. Good one, Richard. Licia :-) Richard Lamoureux May 31, 2013 at 9:19 PM All done now Licia. I am pleased you liked it. Thanks for being the first to comment. Hugs Rick