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Leather Jacket

Leather jacket draped over her shoulders My feeble attempt at gallantry Protecting sweet maiden from the cold A small smile spreads over her face My feeble attempt at gallantry Still I longed for the rain to reveal her breasts A small smile spreads over her face The rain would have soaked her blouse Still I longed for the rain to reveal her breasts The fabric clinging to those lovely curves The rain would have soaked her blouse We ran together my hand around her waist The fabric clinging to those lovely curves I could feel her softness my heart pounding We ran together my hand around her waist Coming to rest under an old oak tree I could feel her softness my heart pounding She allowed my hands to explore Coming to rest under an old oak tree Lips joined as my jacket fell to the ground She allowed my hands to explore My feeble attempt at Gallantry Created the moment that brought me here A small smile spreads over her face I broke the Pantoum form with the very last line but I prefer it this way. Besides, my hands were already engaged. Leather Jacket on Shoulders Contest

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Skat A

Date: 7/4/2013 12:11:00 AM

"tremendously awesome........... congrats!!! SKAT"

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/4/2013 7:20:00 AM

Thanks SKAT

Monterey Sirak

Date: 6/29/2013 5:33:00 AM

Congrats. Well deserved win. Big sigh for the romance seeping from every line

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/29/2013 8:02:00 AM

Thanks Monterey, I had fun writing this one, I had no idea what direction it would take me.

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 6/28/2013 3:38:00 PM

A fabulous poem my gallant friend. It certainly deserved a win. Congratulations! Warm Smiles, Connie

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/28/2013 7:56:00 PM

Thanks Connie, I kind of like this one myself. Mind you I have other poems I enter and they don't make it on the list so you never can tell what will catch the judges eye.

Judy Konos

Date: 6/26/2013 5:52:00 PM

Richard you could have won this with a "I don't know" form! The only thing bad about it is NOW I have to go take a cold shower! Damn Boy!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/27/2013 6:35:00 PM

You make me smile Judy. Thanks!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 6/26/2013 2:45:00 PM

Yup with the oak tree ;) ;) Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/27/2013 6:35:00 PM

Thanks Debbie

Heather Ober

Date: 6/26/2013 2:33:00 PM

FAVED. 'Nough said ;) Kelowna sounds gorgeous, Rick! I will definitely have to put it on my list of places to see. We are lucky to live in such a diverse country, yes?

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/27/2013 6:36:00 PM

You would not be dissapointed. Thanks for your kind comment. I am pleased you like my poem.

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 6/6/2013 9:27:00 PM

I have another reason to love rain.....a passionate piece full of wonderment! Love this one Rick. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/27/2013 6:37:00 PM

Thanks Cecilia, hugs back to you.

Kyle Kriticos

Date: 6/3/2013 12:52:00 AM

It looks like your attempt at gallantry was a solid one. Koodos to you for the imagery and brilliant use of repetition.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/3/2013 6:15:00 AM

Thanks Kyle, so nice to have a visit from you.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/2/2013 3:56:00 PM

wowow, THIS is GOOD. Too bad you had to break the form but I did not even notice. THE best I've seen hands down. FAVE

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/2/2013 4:42:00 PM

Thanks Andrea, you honor me!

Kim Van Breda

Date: 6/2/2013 1:33:00 AM

Your poems are so inspiring -- not only in their excellent content and originality, but the way I learn from your use of different formats3

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/2/2013 7:20:00 AM

Thanks so much Kim! Hugs Rick.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/1/2013 11:53:00 AM

well, i must say the sensual and gallant touches blend so well in this work , richard.. a daring, sweet feat... greeat stuff!..:)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/2/2013 7:21:00 AM

Thanks Nette ;0)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/1/2013 8:12:00 AM

Wow wow wow wow wow WOW wow wow WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW! ;) Hmmmmm...we do like gallant men! They win the girl....and everything else! ;) LOVELY WRITE!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/1/2013 8:26:00 AM

Thanks Eileen, is it really Gallantry if we have an ulterior motive???

Manel Gunatillake

Date: 6/1/2013 6:13:00 AM

7 must. congratulation on your contest. I am working on a Rondeau. but my computer having a problem, can't retrieve. this is my sons lap top I am using. so until I get my computer back, I cannot finish, Thank you for your concern. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/1/2013 7:05:00 AM

Good morning Manel, glad to hear all is well.

Elai Cee

Date: 6/1/2013 12:42:00 AM

Amazing! really! nothing to say...;)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/1/2013 7:07:00 AM

Thanks. ;0)

Timothy Hicks

Date: 6/1/2013 12:24:00 AM

... my feeble attempt at gallantry. I really, really liked this line! It's like an average joe putting on the face of a noble knight. And as far as the rules go, the story wouldn't have made much sense in the end (if you kept to them anyway). That's the tricky part, methinks. Enjoyed this one very much!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/1/2013 7:09:00 AM

Hi Tim, sometimes I have to use my poetic licence. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.

Colleen Bono

Date: 5/31/2013 10:03:00 PM

like I said about the turd in the grass.good job

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2013 10:05:00 PM

Lol

Delysia Hendricks

Date: 5/31/2013 9:36:00 PM

Ooh-la-la, de man be bewitched by dem honkers. lol @ your ending. After reading this I'm tempted to invite a man out when I know it will rain - without a jacket, of course (hahaha). Ooo, the mean in me!! Lovely fun yet serious write with much depth, Richard. I like, very much. Licia :-)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2013 9:49:00 PM

Thanks Licia, you make me smile once again.

Delysia Hendricks

Date: 5/31/2013 8:36:00 PM

lol. Gallant and losing out on a good view? You foolish man (lol). I can't wait to see this poem in its finished form. Good one, Richard. Licia :-)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2013 9:19:00 PM

All done now Licia. I am pleased you liked it. Thanks for being the first to comment. Hugs Rick