Last Night

I woke up and went into the backyard 
The big moon shone like a baking sheet 
The distance to it was short 
You could run to it
Every sound was frozen
Like drizzle on a blade of grass
Only my heart was hammering
And the moan of the Potomac 
Pushing the waters like Sisyphus into the sea
While my breath flowed like a white sail 
Leaving the empty shell of my body 
The ruined ship 
That had brought me this far

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 5/23/2013 11:29:00 PM
A very wonderful poem. Big congratulations on your awesome win my dear Betim. I enjoyed your poem. Thank you so much for sharing! love/hugs, Leonora
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Date: 5/23/2013 1:31:00 AM
congrats ...Seren
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Date: 5/22/2013 1:17:00 PM
Beautiful and congrats on your win. Best wishes S.
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Date: 5/22/2013 9:36:00 AM
Betim, CONGRATULATIONS!!! :-) thank you for the wonderful nature poem... Luv~ Luv~ LINDA
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Date: 3/7/2012 12:41:00 PM
Nice work. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 3/7/2012 10:25:00 AM
BETIM,,;-) CONGRATULATIONS... NICE WORK IN BRIAN'S CONTEST... ALWAYS~PD
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Date: 3/7/2012 10:05:00 AM
You really took me on a journey with this one Betim ;) enjoyed it, congratulations on your win ;) Wilma
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Date: 3/7/2012 8:19:00 AM
congrats Betim on a superb write and win luv..
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Date: 3/7/2012 7:43:00 AM
Good Morning and Congratulations on your win in Brian's "One To Fifteen" contest Betim. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/25/2011 11:48:00 AM
An imaginative write. Interesting to read.
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