Lashed

Congratulations on your win in Francine Roberts's contest "Blue". A well deserved win Debbie. Love, Carol

Pps. And the title 'lashed'.

Ps. I especially like the 'tears tearing'.

I really like this one, Debbie. The brevity makes it all the more poignant and dramatic. Love, Deb

This poem is a fine description of sorrow. "Salt"filled eyes are something all of us have known. Nice use of this Asian form! Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Wonderful tanka!Congrats on your big win Debbie!--kashinath

Congrats Debbie on your big win in the blue contest with this exciting entry luv.. enjoy..

Thanks Andie!!! line 4 for me was treated as a CUT...and it is the human hand i meant to allude to with the word wipe not the fountain I hope it ok?

Deb, this one was wonderful and I noticed you got your cool title on there. What do you think? Should I call mine Seasonal Blues or just keep it Blue? A big congratulations, Deb, and if wipe refers to what the fountain does, I'd say wipes. Luv, Andrea

This sure was a winner. Many congratulations.

I think this is very nicely written. This is a pretty awesome tanka. Congratulations on your win! It's truly well deserved.

Congratulations on your great win in the "Blue" contest, Deb!

We took a similar approach, Deb. Congratulations on your win! Best wishes, Carolyn

Hi Debbie - Congratulations on your BIG WIN in Francine's contest. Best wishes, KC

digging this one like crazy, lights!! thumbs up for this unusual piece and the great win! :) huggs, nette

Hello Debbie, Congratulations on your win, this is wonderful. As Always, Shar

Your portrait of sadness is vivid. Congrats Well done

a heart wrenching right, this one! and very unique way of depicting blue and tears-- way to go Debbie-- Congrats on the win :) smiles to you :)

congrats on your 5th place win in the contest Debbie , lovely imagery, could see the crying eyes

awesome poetic justice, this is also poignant. thanks for the grand correction made on my poem."cashew".

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Excellent entry, Deb. Good luck. Thanks for your gracious comments. I'm pretty much a Rhyme or Limerick guy. These other forms, most of which I don't even understand, are just not for me. Unless it's Rhyme or Limerick I don't even consider it poetry. I know that's not true, that's why I don't consider myself a real poet. My talent, if you can call it that, is limited to just those two forms. Thanks for asking to try the Free Verse, but I don't really get it. Sorry. xxxRalph

"tears tearing from lashed sighs" - just beautiful!!! I love this Tanka! Deb, soupmail...

I don't even know how to enter the contests. I entered one long ago and almost lost a good friend. Thanks again. Love, daver

Deb, to answer your question, I don't know if it's bad to rhyme a tanka, but mine just kind of fell that way. WEll, time to hurry home. LUv ya, andrea