Gregory Richard Barden Poet Tanka

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Lark's Lament

Soft, as the moon weeps,

          A Lark trills endless, his mate,

     Now, cold on the sand ...
    
His broken heart is my own,
    
          This beach, our sanctuary.



     Oh, my winged brother,

Your sweet song - bathed in sorrow,

          Is but bitter perfection ...

     Each tender note rends my soul,

As you plead ... for her answer.




~ 1st Place ~  in the "Early February Standard" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Sponsor.

~ 1st Place ~  in the "One or Two Tanka" Poetry Contest, Rick Parise, Sponsor.

~ Honorable Mention ~  in the "Favourite Poem From December 2017" Poetry Contest, Julia Ward, Judge & Sponsor.

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Line Gauthier November 9, 2018 at 10:49 AM Back with more congrats for making it on this short list of winners, Gregory.

Wendy Watson November 9, 2018 at 1:33 AM What pathos in this combination of the subject's own heartache and that of the lonely lark and moon. Really touching,Greg.

Line Gauthier March 3, 2018 at 10:44 AM Congrats, Gregory on this most deserving win. What a lovely emotional poem. Gregory Richard Barden March 7, 2018 at 7:51 PM I'm pleased you liked it, Line, thank you! :-) <3

Charlie Smith February 28, 2018 at 11:19 AM Lovely work Gregory, congratulations... Gregory Richard Barden March 7, 2018 at 7:51 PM Very kind of you, Charlie - thank you! :-)

Eve Roper February 28, 2018 at 10:43 AM Beautiful serene poem, congratulations on your win. Gregory Richard Barden March 7, 2018 at 7:50 PM Very kind of you, Eve, thank you so much, friend! :-)

Subimal Sinha-Roy February 26, 2018 at 2:02 AM Congratulations, Greg on your first position win. Gregory Richard Barden February 27, 2018 at 8:17 AM Very kind of you, Subimal - thank you so much!

Janis Medders Tobechi February 25, 2018 at 9:56 AM Very moving Greg with a well done tanka that flows so smoothly it transcends the form. Congratulations on your trophy win. Gregory Richard Barden February 27, 2018 at 8:17 AM That's very sweet of you to say, Janis, thank you very much, my friend - blessings to you! :-) <3

Lewis Raynes February 11, 2018 at 5:07 PM wow congratulations on ur win Gregory, such a lonely beach, such a beautiful parallel Gregory Richard Barden February 22, 2018 at 12:47 AM Thank you so much, Lewis, that's very kind of you, my friend! :-)

Line Gauthier February 9, 2018 at 8:47 AM Beautiful, Gregory. A gem indeed. Congrats on your win. Gregory Richard Barden February 10, 2018 at 10:20 PM Thanks so much, Line - you have put the polish on the gem, my friend! :-) <3

Kim Rodrigues February 8, 2018 at 4:16 PM So sad and beautiful in its love for all! Congrats, Greg! Gregory Richard Barden February 10, 2018 at 10:19 PM That's very sweet of you, Kim, thank you very much! :-) <3

Janice Canerdy February 8, 2018 at 3:22 PM So beautiful, Greg, well deserving of the win! Janice Gregory Richard Barden February 10, 2018 at 10:19 PM Thank you very much, Janice ... blessings, Friend! :-) <3

John Lawless February 8, 2018 at 1:02 PM ..."OH, my winged brother"...you soar with this magnificent set of Tanka. A well deserved to spot.... Gregory Richard Barden February 10, 2018 at 10:18 PM Very kind of you, John, and I thank you so much, Friend! :-)

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart February 8, 2018 at 1:00 PM Back with congrats!! <3 Gregory Richard Barden February 10, 2018 at 10:17 PM Thank you, Mo-Mo! ;-) <3

Mick Talbot February 8, 2018 at 5:22 AM Indeed a winner, congratulations Gregory! Mick Gregory Richard Barden February 10, 2018 at 10:17 PM Very kind of you, Mick - thanks so much!

Sandra Haight February 7, 2018 at 12:47 PM So touching...so beautiful, Gregory! Congrats on your First Place win. Sandra Gregory Richard Barden February 10, 2018 at 10:17 PM Thank you so much, Sandra - blessings! :-) <3

Richard Lamoureux January 8, 2018 at 1:07 PM Gorgeous! Gregory Richard Barden January 10, 2018 at 11:32 PM Thank you so much, Richard! :-)

Paul Callus January 5, 2018 at 4:31 AM A beautiful, emotional and touching double Tanka, Gregory. Best regards // paul Gregory Richard Barden January 5, 2018 at 4:38 AM Many kind thanks to you, Paul - I'm very glad you liked it, my friend! Blessings! :-)

Becca Teagan January 1, 2018 at 9:41 AM This is very moving. Each line brings more emotion. Love it. Gregory Richard Barden January 2, 2018 at 12:07 AM Very kind of you to say so, Becca - thank you very much! Blessings, my friend! :-) <3

Rhoda Tripp January 1, 2018 at 12:08 AM So sad and felt to my core. Wow! Emotions rampant. Great write. Gregory Richard Barden January 2, 2018 at 12:07 AM Thank you so much, Rhoda, I greatly appreciate your kind words, my friend. Blessings! :-) <3

Judith S December 31, 2017 at 8:10 AM Just beautiful Greg!! "Your sweet song - bathed in sorrow ... is but perfection" LOVE that line!! Best of luck in the contest. Gregory Richard Barden December 31, 2017 at 6:18 PM That's very kind of you, Judy - I'm so pleased you enjoyed this one, as it is special to me ... and thanks for the best wishes, dear friend! Blessings! :-) <3

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 31, 2017 at 12:49 AM Impressed this bird :) love it Greg, my best to you! xomo <3 Gregory Richard Barden December 31, 2017 at 6:17 PM Thank you so much, Mo, I so appreciate it! <3

Susan Ashley December 30, 2017 at 7:17 PM This write is honey-dipped in melancholy beauty Gregory. Delicious, delectable and divine. Best wishes for a win.. ~Susan Gregory Richard Barden December 30, 2017 at 10:07 PM What a lovely, heart-felt comment, Susan - thank you so very kindly, my friend, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it! Blessings and Happy New Year, Dear Poet! :-) <3

Sunlite Wanter December 30, 2017 at 6:26 PM Beautiful!! Last two lines so poignant. Gregory Richard Barden December 30, 2017 at 10:06 PM Very kind of you, SW, thank you very much! :-) <3