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Lark's Lament

Soft, as the moon weeps,

          A Lark trills endless, his mate,

     Now, cold on the sand ...
    
His broken heart is my own,
    
          This beach, our sanctuary.



     Oh, my winged brother,

Your sweet song - bathed in sorrow,

          Is but bitter perfection ...

     Each tender note rends my soul,

As you plead ... for her answer.




~ 1st Place ~  in the "Early February Standard" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Sponsor.

~ 1st Place ~  in the "One or Two Tanka" Poetry Contest, Rick Parise, Sponsor.

~ Honorable Mention ~  in the "Favourite Poem From December 2017" Poetry Contest, Julia Ward, Judge & Sponsor.

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Copyright © Gregory Richard Barden | Year Posted 2017

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Line Gauthier Date: 11/9/2018 10:49:00 AM Back with more congrats for making it on this short list of winners, Gregory. Login to Reply

Wendy Watson Date: 11/9/2018 1:33:00 AM What pathos in this combination of the subject's own heartache and that of the lonely lark and moon. Really touching,Greg. Login to Reply

Line Gauthier Date: 3/3/2018 10:44:00 AM Congrats, Gregory on this most deserving win. What a lovely emotional poem. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 3/7/2018 7:51:00 PM I'm pleased you liked it, Line, thank you! :-) <3

Charlie Smith Date: 2/28/2018 11:19:00 AM Lovely work Gregory, congratulations... Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 3/7/2018 7:51:00 PM Very kind of you, Charlie - thank you! :-)

Eve Roper Date: 2/28/2018 10:43:00 AM Beautiful serene poem, congratulations on your win. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 3/7/2018 7:50:00 PM Very kind of you, Eve, thank you so much, friend! :-)

Subimal Sinha-Roy Date: 2/26/2018 2:02:00 AM Congratulations, Greg on your first position win. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 2/27/2018 8:17:00 AM Very kind of you, Subimal - thank you so much!

Janis Medders Tobechi Date: 2/25/2018 9:56:00 AM Very moving Greg with a well done tanka that flows so smoothly it transcends the form. Congratulations on your trophy win. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 2/27/2018 8:17:00 AM That's very sweet of you to say, Janis, thank you very much, my friend - blessings to you! :-) <3

Lewis Raynes Date: 2/11/2018 5:07:00 PM wow congratulations on ur win Gregory, such a lonely beach, such a beautiful parallel Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 2/22/2018 12:47:00 AM Thank you so much, Lewis, that's very kind of you, my friend! :-)

Line Gauthier Date: 2/9/2018 8:47:00 AM Beautiful, Gregory. A gem indeed. Congrats on your win. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 2/10/2018 10:20:00 PM Thanks so much, Line - you have put the polish on the gem, my friend! :-) <3

Kim Rodrigues Date: 2/8/2018 4:16:00 PM So sad and beautiful in its love for all! Congrats, Greg! Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 2/10/2018 10:19:00 PM That's very sweet of you, Kim, thank you very much! :-) <3

Janice Canerdy Date: 2/8/2018 3:22:00 PM So beautiful, Greg, well deserving of the win! Janice Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 2/10/2018 10:19:00 PM Thank you very much, Janice ... blessings, Friend! :-) <3

John Lawless Date: 2/8/2018 1:02:00 PM ..."OH, my winged brother"...you soar with this magnificent set of Tanka. A well deserved to spot.... Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 2/10/2018 10:18:00 PM Very kind of you, John, and I thank you so much, Friend! :-)

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 2/8/2018 1:00:00 PM Back with congrats!! <3 Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 2/10/2018 10:17:00 PM Thank you, Mo-Mo! ;-) <3

Mick Talbot Date: 2/8/2018 5:22:00 AM Indeed a winner, congratulations Gregory! Mick Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 2/10/2018 10:17:00 PM Very kind of you, Mick - thanks so much!

Sandra Haight Date: 2/7/2018 12:47:00 PM So touching...so beautiful, Gregory! Congrats on your First Place win. Sandra Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 2/10/2018 10:17:00 PM Thank you so much, Sandra - blessings! :-) <3

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/8/2018 1:07:00 PM Gorgeous! Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 1/10/2018 11:32:00 PM Thank you so much, Richard! :-)

Paul Callus Date: 1/5/2018 4:31:00 AM A beautiful, emotional and touching double Tanka, Gregory. Best regards // paul Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 1/5/2018 4:38:00 AM Many kind thanks to you, Paul - I'm very glad you liked it, my friend! Blessings! :-)

Becca Teagan Date: 1/1/2018 9:41:00 AM This is very moving. Each line brings more emotion. Love it. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 1/2/2018 12:07:00 AM Very kind of you to say so, Becca - thank you very much! Blessings, my friend! :-) <3

Rhoda Tripp Date: 1/1/2018 12:08:00 AM So sad and felt to my core. Wow! Emotions rampant. Great write. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 1/2/2018 12:07:00 AM Thank you so much, Rhoda, I greatly appreciate your kind words, my friend. Blessings! :-) <3

Judith S Date: 12/31/2017 8:10:00 AM Just beautiful Greg!! "Your sweet song - bathed in sorrow ... is but perfection" LOVE that line!! Best of luck in the contest. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 12/31/2017 6:18:00 PM That's very kind of you, Judy - I'm so pleased you enjoyed this one, as it is special to me ... and thanks for the best wishes, dear friend! Blessings! :-) <3

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/31/2017 12:49:00 AM Impressed this bird :) love it Greg, my best to you! xomo <3 Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 12/31/2017 6:17:00 PM Thank you so much, Mo, I so appreciate it! <3

Susan Ashley Date: 12/30/2017 7:17:00 PM This write is honey-dipped in melancholy beauty Gregory. Delicious, delectable and divine. Best wishes for a win.. ~Susan Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 12/30/2017 10:07:00 PM What a lovely, heart-felt comment, Susan - thank you so very kindly, my friend, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it! Blessings and Happy New Year, Dear Poet! :-) <3

Sunlite Wanter Date: 12/30/2017 6:26:00 PM Beautiful!! Last two lines so poignant. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 12/30/2017 10:06:00 PM Very kind of you, SW, thank you very much! :-) <3