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Tears no longer come, dried ducts of wrung emotion, denied one more drop of release. ... but only to feel Feel your finite presence beside me, inhaling your sweet scent to memory. Feel your heart pulsate through the calfskin of the despair that seals me in its snare. Rhythms of a hopeless eternity of love, not destined for us. Feel my heart bleeding for one more glimpse, of the exquisite life and love in your eyes. Shuttered now from a lifetime of shared souls. The pianist plays one last song, as tears fall upon your coffin. Won't you give me a sign, to show me the way to you. I wonder what has become of me, my soul a definition of despair, my mind a metaphor for insanity, my heart silenced by the loss of your call. Above, all I see are murky skies, even the stars hide from me. I'm sure the moon shed a tear, when the sun refused to shine on me. In the hope there is no tomorrow, I lay here with your photograph on my pillow. ... but time ticks so slowly.
20 September 2018 Collaboration with Judith S

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Date: 4/29/2019 8:16:00 PM
Beautiful bittersweet collaboration.
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Date: 10/16/2018 10:07:00 PM
Very beautiful heartfelt how death and love leave us with tears. So visual well done SO
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Date: 10/12/2018 7:33:00 AM
Hi Silent, an excellent collaboration, two poets letting their emotions flow in golden ink. This is such a creative write and it brings tears to the eyes, well it does these eyes. I loved the content and this is a fave. Once again you use free verse to its full extent. An excellent collaboration Silent and Judith. Have a wonderful Friday, Your friend always....Mike.
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Date: 10/5/2018 1:48:00 PM
Hi, Silent one. This watered my eyes. It's among the best I've ever read. Blessings.
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Date: 10/1/2018 9:57:00 PM
A heartfelt collaboration Judith and Silent. My heart goes out to those who are suffering loss, especially to those who have lost family and friends in desasters as they wait for a miracle or closure. Very moving. : )
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Date: 10/1/2018 9:19:00 PM
The heartbreak of death is too permanent. An emotional write that moves me.
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Date: 9/30/2018 4:07:00 AM
Excellent and sad poem. Good collaboration too. Thanks for sharing it.
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Date: 9/29/2018 3:03:00 PM
I feel the tears pressuring. How do you do it? It is the whole with the song.
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Date: 9/28/2018 3:28:00 PM
The power of loss is amplified felt in this deeply moving poem, SO. Such a soul-touching poem. Love and more love always.
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Date: 9/26/2018 2:24:00 AM
Wow. ‘In the hope there is no tomorrow’. Ouch. That hurts. There may well be one, but the pain does not allow it to show. This. is a wonderful, sad and heart touching poem. I must think about that concept of hope. Take care my friend, Kai
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Date: 9/25/2018 1:33:00 PM
A lovely, heartfelt, sad poem, S-1. Both you and Judith deserve a round of applause! Regards // paul
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Date: 9/22/2018 10:04:00 PM
:'(
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Date: 9/21/2018 11:02:00 AM
Awesome collab my friends...love & friendship...^WW^
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Date: 9/21/2018 7:50:00 AM
An excellent collaboration! This is smoothly written and well expressed. :)
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Date: 9/21/2018 6:08:00 AM
Wow, what a magnificent collaboration between two of the Soup's best poets Si and Judy, I treasured all the emotion you poured into each and every line. You two are truly remarkable poets of the highest caliber.....Maria hugs
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Silent One
Date: 9/21/2018 6:12:00 AM
Thank you for your wonderful feedback, it was Judy who set the tone for this poem...
Date: 9/20/2018 9:34:00 PM
Some people believe ghosts are people so shocked by their death that they did not go "into the light" but research has established when sperm penetrates an egg a brilliant flash of light erupts, so perhaps "going into the light" is simply rebirth, i.e., there is no escape! Your loved one could be your next-door neighbour's new baby! Aloha! Rico
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Silent One
Date: 9/21/2018 6:12:00 AM
Interesting feedback.. Thanks Rico..
Date: 9/20/2018 7:53:00 PM
Your thoughts tug deeply at my heart. This is very touching and beautiful- all at the same time. Your words blend so well together. ~ Brandy
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Silent One
Date: 9/21/2018 6:26:00 AM
Thank you Brandy..
Date: 9/20/2018 6:28:00 PM
you guys did one terrific collaboration together. This one is so poignant.
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Silent One
Date: 9/21/2018 6:26:00 AM
Thank you Andrea..
Date: 9/20/2018 6:02:00 PM
A touching collaborative write Judy and Silent One..
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Silent One
Date: 9/21/2018 6:31:00 AM
Thank you Joseph..
Date: 9/20/2018 5:32:00 PM
Moving and sad piece of poetry; great imagery and feeling; you've both poured massive emotion into this work. Beautifully done.
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Silent One
Date: 9/21/2018 6:31:00 AM
Thank you ML..
Date: 9/20/2018 1:12:00 PM
Terrific collaboration SO and Judith, Such a sad lament...
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Silent One
Date: 9/21/2018 6:38:00 AM
Thank you Charlie..
Date: 9/20/2018 12:02:00 PM
Silent One! You have dug deep into human nature beauty, love and pain! No love without pain, no beauty without love! Life in pain.. our solace the "sweet scent" of memories.. the mind "a metaphor for insanity" when harmony of loving souls exists no more.. when Nature weeps in grief! A great work of art in collaboration with fellow poet Judith.. achingly beautiful and impressive.. A FAV. Always a great pleasure to read what you ink of beauty. Best regards. Be blessed always.
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Silent One
Date: 9/21/2018 6:39:00 AM
Thank you for your wonderful feedback Besma..
Date: 9/20/2018 10:40:00 AM
A very mournful piece, rendered with great care and thought. Well done to both of you. May you find peace to meet the sorrow.
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Silent One
Date: 9/21/2018 6:55:00 AM
Thank you Lawrence
Date: 9/20/2018 9:55:00 AM
A beautiful collaboration S.O. and Judith. So sad when you lose someone in death. Only a photo and fond memories remain. Tom
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Silent One
Date: 9/20/2018 9:56:00 AM
Yes, that is so true.. Thank you Tom..
Date: 9/20/2018 9:37:00 AM
Congratulations to you both my friends as this is truly a beautiful and well crafted collaboration. A shining gem in my appraisal. and a fav too..
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Silent One
Date: 9/20/2018 9:56:00 AM
Thank you Robert, glad you enjoyed this one..
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