Knotty

half smile of caged concealment Mona Lisa like, kindling desire awash in pixelated illusion your dark dreaming eyes preserving secrets the glow of an image, layer by layer my wish to un-knot the shifting shape form with its unknown gravity a stance painfully inscrutable till your voice, dusky, breathy washes over me like smoke reassuring in a kilowatt smile telling me our lives unfinished are an art installation ongoing knotty that rarely fit effortlessly into the scheme of things your repose my white knuckle ride

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I Am Anaya

Date: 8/6/2023 2:35:00 PM

I enjoy the stream of consciousness expressed here, knotty i think of nautical, may you write of your knotted unrequited loves, I'm listening!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/20/2023 6:56:00 PM

Thank you Anaya, for your stop by and intriguing comment. Yep, I have had my share of unrequited love affairs. But why accept the hollow core of not trying, when a ventured proposal (rejected or not) gives life purpose, spice, memory? Be well. Brian

Terry Miller

Date: 7/17/2023 2:41:00 AM

A great piece, congratulations

Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/17/2023 7:19:00 AM

Thank you Terry, for your congratulatory note. Be well. Brian

Gary Radice

Date: 7/16/2023 11:45:00 PM

Another great work. They just keep flowing from your pen Brian. Congratulations on your win in Constance's contest. Cheers - Gary

Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/17/2023 7:16:00 AM

Hi Gary, Thanks very much for your thumbs up. Relationships on edge are not favourable reads (in general) but Constance saw merit in the work. Sincerest good wishes, Brian

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/16/2023 10:52:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A creative write. I enjoyed it. Have a good day writing away..........................

Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/16/2023 5:44:00 PM

Many thanks Paula, for your visit + affirmative message. Be well + safe. Sincerely, Brian

Constance La France

Date: 7/16/2023 3:40:00 AM

Brian, wonderful poem, very creative and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge- K Word !

Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/16/2023 5:54:00 AM

Thanks very much, Constance for recognizing value in this poem of a relationship tangle. With sincere appreciation, Brian

Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/15/2023 8:30:00 PM

An interesting write, indeed. Congratulations!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/16/2023 5:53:00 AM

Thank you, Christuraj for your drop by + write. Problematic relationships are not to everyone's liking. Cheers, Brian