Kicked

Why does no one understand, When issues attack the sweetest, You see a hitchhiker lone, Know they've walked with turmoil. May it be skewed idealism, Or unexplainable passion, Seems a person can get caught up, In more than one fashion. Who here comprehends, When the innocent get kicked, The traveling hearts divine the throne, But do they feel that royal? Insurmountable greed, Toward the one who sheds some light, Listen to what the Hiker says, And everything will be alright.

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Denis Joe

Date: 4/11/2009 10:26:00 AM

I really like this. It reads like a sonnet, the turn in the poem’s argument being with the line ‘In more than one fashion.’ I don’t go along with this idea of having to be 14 lines (actually the logical length would be 13 lines, but thanks to superstition), as long as the writer can show what is needed then they can produce a sonnet. I love the way this reads and if you have to be picky you could lop off the last two lines to give you 14. Excellent writing!