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Poem written 10-01.24 thru 10.06.24

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My first test in what we shared
too easy and too perfectly paired.

The part of us that is immortal
ran holding hands through a portal,

quick to stumble and trespass upon
a duplex that kept the blinds drawn.

Your covenant before my time,
had me pray for that exception of mine,

but my ladder to Heaven with rungs of hope
couldn’t bear the weight of sin—no matter the slope.

So no from scripture to your mother,
from every hand we were to suffer,

fools bound in a tortured trust,
nothing was going to change the unjust.

Given the faith and a mind to discern,
but my wicked heart still welcomes your memory's return.

Its pulse echoes a buried refrain,
the hook on the end of a chain

will dangle this dream forever,
a rearview horizon’s tether

from our last day—these thirty years, 
ghosts recite testaments of tears,

for it was only I or they, that cared.
I never found again, that shared.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 1/6/2025 8:40:00 PM
Great poem, it seems like a tortured memory.
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Rob Carmack
Date: 1/24/2025 4:05:00 AM
I am at peace with it.
Date: 11/25/2024 6:31:00 AM
Such profound feeling and exquisite beauty—I adore it—an abundant expression of sincere poetry. True, holding on to precious memories of a departed loved one can have pros and cons. Best regards and thanks for your comment on my poem.
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Rob Carmack
Date: 11/27/2024 12:31:00 PM
TY Sotto
Date: 11/2/2024 7:17:00 PM
I am seeing your reply to me here below. Too bad you might not seek her out? Did she marry? It's very sad to think of what could have been.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 11/15/2024 8:09:00 PM
Maybe someone great will come along!
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Rob Carmack
Date: 11/11/2024 10:08:00 PM
I think her and her husband got back together for a while, but ended up divorcing. That was sad too, I liked her husband and got along with him. Don't know what happened after that. With my religious beliefs, she was off limits, thus, the test. And her mother did not approve - that was another test within the test. Sad yes, but as always, we are better off obeying God.
Date: 10/24/2024 9:21:00 AM
Dear Rob, I adore the depth of emotion and beauty here. A rich outpouring of heartfelt poetry. Indeed, cherished memories a lost loved one can be both a blessing and a curse. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/25/2024 2:28:00 PM
Much appreciated Susan.
Date: 10/22/2024 6:40:00 PM
Dear Rob, this thought tugs at my heart. ' the hook on the end of a chain will dangle this dream forever. ' There's so much love and dedication within. I'm so sorry for your loss, my dear friend. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/23/2024 2:11:00 PM
Still glad I had the experience though. One of the toughest tests I had. Thanks for reading and commenting. Hugs cubed.
Date: 10/22/2024 2:24:00 PM
aww so sorry to read about Boo, Rob but so glad you have a few more doggy companions! hugs jan xx
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/23/2024 2:10:00 PM
TY Jan and hugs back to you.
Date: 10/17/2024 7:07:00 AM
Beautifully written couplet, Rob. Thoroughly enjoyed. Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest!
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/17/2024 3:21:00 PM
Thank you for hosting and the placement.
Date: 10/10/2024 1:33:00 PM
Rob, I don't recall all the details, but I am sure this was a heartfelt and real experience . I miss your emails. Great poetry and I hope all is well with you.
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/10/2024 6:58:00 PM
It was a real experience, ended just over 30 years ago. I used to think that I had found three soulmates, but maybe she was the only real one. All is going well with me and I will email you soon. Thank for you reading and commenting.
Date: 10/7/2024 2:52:00 PM
Hey Rob so glad to see you back. Been gone too long my friend. You haven't lost your touch in this witty write of yours. Enjoyed reading, thank you for posting and welcome back...
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/7/2024 6:42:00 PM
Good to see you Michael and thanks for reading and commenting.
Date: 10/7/2024 7:01:00 AM
rob! you come like a wind enveloping my senses...beautiful poetry! I was off soup for 3 years and am glad to be back with you strolling around the halls of TPS as well: what a precious gift! how is your dachshund? huggs
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/7/2024 6:41:00 PM
Can't remember which Dachshund I had when we spoke last. May have been Boo. He got old and it was time to say goodbye. I then had another named Echo, had her about a year and a half, but she got sent to Heaven this past April courtesy of a passing car. Current girl is named Seirra. Also have a chihuahua named Tango, and a Chiweenie I kept from Echo's liter, named Scrub.
Date: 10/7/2024 3:08:00 AM
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder. Welcome back, Rob. Who said ghosts don’t exist?
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/7/2024 3:30:00 AM
Yeah, they're both a gift and a curse.
Date: 10/6/2024 4:57:00 PM
Hey Rob, so good to see you posting again. PS is better than ever. New blood, new styles, a new paradigm in the making. Come, join the revolution!
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Tom Woody
Date: 10/7/2024 6:08:00 AM
Nah, the new paradigm is all about peace, love, joy. Out with the old, in with the new
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Keith D Trestrail
Date: 10/7/2024 3:03:00 AM
New controversies.
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/7/2024 2:30:00 AM
You know I like a good fight.
Date: 10/6/2024 3:29:00 PM
Hi Rob. Being away for so long hasn't rusted your poetic skill. Love these lines... "Its pulse echoes a buried refrain/the hook on the end of a chain/ will dangle this dream forever/ a rearview horizon’s tether.' It is SO good to see you, and I second Jan's saying you've been missed. Somethings never change and some things get worse. you know... the beautiful people issue. ;-)
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/7/2024 2:35:00 AM
Some destined to be beautiful forever. Glad to see that you are still here. Thank you for reading and commenting.
Date: 10/6/2024 2:34:00 PM
welcome back Rob, you have been so missed! As you will see from the blogs, things never change on here but I still post occasionally but am focusing on self publishing my second humour book:-) hugs jan xx
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/7/2024 2:32:00 AM
Missed you all as well. Glad to hear you're on you second book. Hugs with a thanks.
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