Kristen Bruni Poet Rhyme

Keeping Afloat

Nothing but am innocent venture 
into the open sea.
Swimming around, enjoying new friends
Feeling fearless and free.

Out of the darkness you
invade on my space
with no clear explanation.
Are you here to examine me
I need some translation. 

Your larger than I so I need
to understand your need to attack.
IF you spoke my language 
I speak peacefully right back.

I"ll just hover over here
Your vastness brings me fear.

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John Freeman June 5, 2011 at 7:38 AM Kristen, Great to see in the winner's circle. Congratulations on a swell poem. Agape, Moses

James Fraser June 5, 2011 at 6:37 AM Congratulations Kristen on your win in Carolyn's fine contest :)

Joe Maverick June 4, 2011 at 1:03 PM best wishes Kristen , good to see your winning placement in Carolyns contest.

Robert A. Dufresne June 4, 2011 at 5:43 AM congratulations on your winning speech to the goliath, Kristen!

Dr.Ram Mehta June 3, 2011 at 3:11 PM Congratulations on the fifth place win in the contest of carolyn, kristen

Carolyn Devonshire June 3, 2011 at 2:37 PM Yes, Kristen, the grouper really is a "peaceful" fish. I enjoyed your interpretation of the photo. Congratulations on your success! The competition was awesome so I hope you feel proud. Love, Carolyn

Carol Sunshine Brown June 3, 2011 at 1:53 PM Congratulations on your so wonderfully deserved win in Carolyn's "Attack" contest Kristen. Love Carol

Joyce Johnson June 3, 2011 at 1:42 PM Wise to stay out of a grouper's way. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Leo Larry Amadore May 25, 2011 at 3:51 PM A nice work; purposeful ambiguity may suggest universality and depth of meaning....a few spelling errors: "am" in first line should be "an" (typo); second line of third stanza does not need "on"; first line of second stanza should read "you're" instead of "your"; last line of third stanza should read "I'd" instead of "I"....minor, quick fixes....

Ned Flanders May 25, 2011 at 2:28 PM Just like you i am a bit confused. Your poem seems to me to be full of metaphors about a lot of things, hopefully that big shark will get his comeupance and not bother you anymore...or else the scoundre might get his way.. you have me thinking..nice one.l