Keeping Afloat

Nothing but am innocent venture 
into the open sea.
Swimming around, enjoying new friends
Feeling fearless and free.

Out of the darkness you
invade on my space
with no clear explanation.
Are you here to examine me
I need some translation. 

Your larger than I so I need
to understand your need to attack.
IF you spoke my language 
I speak peacefully right back.

I"ll just hover over here
Your vastness brings me fear.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 6/5/2011 7:38:00 AM
Kristen, Great to see in the winner's circle. Congratulations on a swell poem. Agape, Moses
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Date: 6/5/2011 6:37:00 AM
Congratulations Kristen on your win in Carolyn's fine contest :)
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Date: 6/4/2011 1:03:00 PM
best wishes Kristen , good to see your winning placement in Carolyns contest.
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Date: 6/4/2011 5:43:00 AM
congratulations on your winning speech to the goliath, Kristen!
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Date: 6/3/2011 3:11:00 PM
Congratulations on the fifth place win in the contest of carolyn, kristen
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Date: 6/3/2011 2:37:00 PM
Yes, Kristen, the grouper really is a "peaceful" fish. I enjoyed your interpretation of the photo. Congratulations on your success! The competition was awesome so I hope you feel proud. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 6/3/2011 1:53:00 PM
Congratulations on your so wonderfully deserved win in Carolyn's "Attack" contest Kristen. Love Carol
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Date: 6/3/2011 1:42:00 PM
Wise to stay out of a grouper's way. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 5/25/2011 3:51:00 PM
A nice work; purposeful ambiguity may suggest universality and depth of meaning....a few spelling errors: "am" in first line should be "an" (typo); second line of third stanza does not need "on"; first line of second stanza should read "you're" instead of "your"; last line of third stanza should read "I'd" instead of "I"....minor, quick fixes....
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Date: 5/25/2011 2:28:00 PM
Just like you i am a bit confused. Your poem seems to me to be full of metaphors about a lot of things, hopefully that big shark will get his comeupance and not bother you anymore...or else the scoundre might get his way.. you have me thinking..nice one.l
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