Richard Lamoureux Poet Free verse

Katrina

She absorbs the light from the room
although she barely says a word
I watch her sit within her struggled thoughts
she desires to control the insignificant
a world of rules
paint by number probabilities

She paints pictures of food she does't dare eat
as her skin hangs loosely from skeletal arms
I wonder if she exists beyond her edges
beyond her life of privilege 

Does she retain any of the absorbed light?
is there any joy within her angles?
has there ever been any exuberance,
or has she been born into this sadness?

I wander along her borders
kept at a distance by barbed wire
the gates of her mind
Closed
Fortified
Welded shut

So I turn
walk away
thankfully sad 
I didn't enter her darkness

For I fear
I too may have been absorbed

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D.W. Rodgers March 11, 2014 at 5:48 PM From the title I was thinking hurricane but it was a different vortex. Well done Richard Lamoureux March 11, 2014 at 6:12 PM Thanks so much Roger.

Varenya Raina March 8, 2014 at 11:18 AM Anorexia? Actually this poem can be taken in different contexts. The dark aura is gripping! A heck of a good write! And the very first poem that I read on the soup! Cheerio! :D Varenya Raina March 8, 2014 at 1:56 PM Well it sounded promising by the title and I am really sympathetic towards anorexia sufferers. So I kept on reading and wasn't disappointed! And please convey to your wife that she is doing a great job! :) Richard Lamoureux March 8, 2014 at 12:59 PM Yes you are correct. My wife specializes in the disorder and runs an out patient program here in Kelowna British Columbia, Canada. I am pleased You like my poem, I am honoured that my poem is the first you are reading. I appreciate the visit and comment, come back any time. Why did you choose this one?

Arthur Vaso February 16, 2014 at 10:28 PM I really loved this one, when you can feel what someone writes, its a success!!! 7+ Richard Lamoureux February 17, 2014 at 8:03 AM Thanks again Arthur. I am honored.

Shadow Hamilton February 14, 2014 at 1:10 PM love this Rick beware the darkness lol great pen hugs Richard Lamoureux February 14, 2014 at 1:11 PM Thanks Shadow!

Skat A February 11, 2014 at 4:53 PM Richard, interesting write. :-) SKAT Richard Lamoureux February 11, 2014 at 5:02 PM Thanks SKAT.

Roger Horsch February 11, 2014 at 12:14 PM A very good poem my friend........Roger Richard Lamoureux February 11, 2014 at 3:40 PM Hi Roger, thanks for visiting. I am still on vacation, I will catch up on my reading when I get back.

Robert Pettit February 11, 2014 at 10:48 AM You have created one hell of a mystique for Katrina with your chosen words. You have chosen them well here. Richard Lamoureux February 11, 2014 at 3:40 PM Thanks Robert.

Poet Tacito February 10, 2014 at 10:13 PM Penetrating the impenetrable wonder of a presence...then, leaving before the heart imploded. Such a daunting task for most...completely awesome job! Richard Lamoureux February 11, 2014 at 7:29 AM Good morning Drake, thanks for the comment and visit.

Andrea Dietrich February 10, 2014 at 10:06 PM gosh, such good writing this is, Richard!! At first I was thinking she was anorexic maybe. And then thinking, it could be any number of mental illnesses. thankfully sad is an excellent way to say it. I feel that way when I watch some of the shows on tv about people and how they destroy their lives. Keep up the good work. Richard Lamoureux February 11, 2014 at 7:28 AM I believe she may have a variety of issues. Thanks for commenting.

Gwen Benita Mason Gibbs February 10, 2014 at 6:37 PM Wow awesome poem Richard, you captivated me Richard Lamoureux February 10, 2014 at 7:21 PM Thanks again Gwen.

Debbie Guzzi February 10, 2014 at 10:13 AM yes, do you like? those slight changes make it even more sophisticated ;) Light & Love Richard Lamoureux February 10, 2014 at 6:33 PM Yes, I like the changes.

Debbie Guzzi February 10, 2014 at 9:25 AM Such a thought full verse!!Count me in with Criag & Donna's comments too you are growing in leaps and bounds! [Richard you left me such a nice message! I don't write much free verse here it isn't accepted well.] Light & Love Richard Lamoureux February 10, 2014 at 6:32 PM Thanks Debbie it was my pleasure, I really like your poem.

Donna Jones February 9, 2014 at 8:20 PM Wow Richard...like all below you are growing growing or maybe just opening those flood gates...knowing when to step back and wait for someone to help themselves is a fine line and hard call sometimes. You captured it...hope your vacation was nice Richard Lamoureux February 9, 2014 at 10:49 PM Thanks Donna still on vacation, havn't ha a lot of time to read, enjoying the mexican sun.

Joseph May February 9, 2014 at 7:49 PM Great write with depth of emotion... Richard Lamoureux February 9, 2014 at 7:58 PM Thanks Joseph.

Eileen Manassian February 9, 2014 at 2:34 PM A very interesting write, Richard. If a person is not a professional swimmer, he risks being dragged down with the drowning person he is trying to save. I suppose it is good to know ones limitations and to point the person to someone who can be of real help. Addiction, in any form, is a vicious cycle. It isn't about the addictive substance itself, food, drugs, sex....it is about needs that aren't being met any other way. Mental illness takes on many forms. Thank God for Life guards! Richard Lamoureux February 9, 2014 at 8:05 PM Still we can try to do what we can, however their is no assurance our help will be welcomed.

Kayod5 Kayode February 9, 2014 at 11:01 AM This is in class of its own Richard, no doubt one of your multiple perfections. Great one it is. Richard Lamoureux February 9, 2014 at 8:09 PM Hi Kayod5, you are very kind. Thanks for your visit and comment.

Nette Onclaud February 9, 2014 at 9:25 AM ohh, to be able to realize when you are being sucked in a vortex of darkness, rich...a liberating piece so well done!.. huggs Richard Lamoureux February 9, 2014 at 8:13 PM Hi Nette, thanks for being the first to comment.