Susan Gentry Poet Pantoum

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Karma Confused

Sometimes victim is volunteer
As far as good and bad karma go
To me this makes it all unclear
I think it's important that I know

As far as good and bad karma go
How does karma affect free will
I think it's important that I know
Too many karma for me to deal

How does karma affect free will
If past to present to future in line
Too many karma for me to deal
Factor in reincarnation time

If past to present to future in line
I'm karma confused as you can  see
Factor in reincarnation time
Ten Commandments do it for me

I'm karma confused as you can see
To me this makes it all unclear
Ten Commandments do it for me
Sometimes victim is volunteer

April 28, 2018


Karma Contest - Pantoum Rhyme
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Gracie Woodsinger May 21, 2018 at 9:54 AM Not to be over-critical, but the word you need here is 'affect'. The effect of karma is its affect on you. Otherwise, it is cleverly written. Susan Gentry May 21, 2018 at 12:23 PM Thank you so much!! I really do appreciate you pointing this out and can't believe no one else did. I appreciate any suggestions or input you or anyone would like to give. :)

Robert Johnson April 30, 2018 at 10:47 PM I am not a religious scholar, I leave that to God. :) But I do think there's a lesson here. Good, bad or odd. :) Susan Gentry April 30, 2018 at 11:59 PM lol I certainly tend to agree :) as you might notice as I nod :) Thanks for reading and commenting.

Andrea Dietrich April 29, 2018 at 8:19 PM what a clever way to approach the theme. I kind of like the reincarnation idea but who can say for sure about that? I just think it's natural Karma will bite you in the behind if you have done evil! (maybe in the next life if not THIS one) Susan Gentry April 30, 2018 at 12:22 AM I like the idea sonebody does wrong, i can't get revenge, it will happen. Next life is up to God, heaven or wherever. To get blindsided for something from past life I don't even know I did is most unfair. Some things just happen. I would like karma like in pay it forward. My guilt and Judgement Day will take care of the rest lol. Who knows... Thanks for commenting.

Rhoda Tripp April 29, 2018 at 8:00 PM Susan...I love the reading the pantoum form as it is not an easy one to write and have it flow, but it appears you have it whipped. Great write. Love it! Susan Gentry April 30, 2018 at 12:07 AM Thanks Rhoda! It is a fun form I think. You're so sweet.

Viv Wigley April 29, 2018 at 2:49 AM A fine write, Susan, well woven.Good luck in the contest. Viv x Susan Gentry April 29, 2018 at 12:16 PM Thank you Viv! Always appreciate your input. :)

Faraz Ajmal April 29, 2018 at 1:37 AM This is a really beautiful written poem, I was looking for the examples of pantoum poems and i m glad that I come across this one, Karma is a hindu belief, that our actions is one life affect our next life, all Hindus believe it ( I m not Hindu) but the strange thing is that this concept isn t in their books, their scholars made it coz they couldn t answer how one can be rich, while other poor, one handsome, other black, one fien other disable, so they come up with this idea Susan Gentry April 29, 2018 at 12:16 PM Thank you, Faraz, for reading and input. I see what you are saying, and before now I was all into the what goes around comes around, then I started thinking why even bother if bad karma from previous life was going to get me :) I need keep it simple and you can't go wrong with just doing the next right thing... Life stuff is always going to happen. It's how we handle it that matters. Good luck with you pantoum. They are fun.

Probir Gupta April 28, 2018 at 12:28 PM Wonderfully meaningful pantoum ... The music couldn't affect the serious karma theme ... Great ... Susan Gentry April 29, 2018 at 12:48 AM Thank you! :)

Sandra Haight April 28, 2018 at 11:01 AM A great Pantoum, Susan. Your poem brings forth many questions about 'karma' versus free will and rules to influence our free will. Well done, and GL with the contest. Hugs, Sandra Susan Gentry April 29, 2018 at 12:47 AM Thanks so much Sandra. I've read some really good ones.

John Gondolf April 28, 2018 at 6:43 AM Susan, this is a very well constructed pantoum, it should do well in the contest. John Susan Gentry April 28, 2018 at 6:47 AM Thank you John. It's a fun form.

Kai Michael Neumann April 28, 2018 at 3:28 AM 1o commandments link in very nicely with Karma and with many of the great philosphers of all time. Nice one, Kai Susan Gentry April 28, 2018 at 6:46 AM Thanks Kai. Appreciate your input.