Just One More Day

(Hi Dad)
Hi dad, it's so nice to see you? I'm sorry for what you had to go through. That awful disease that you had to endure left you fighting so hard, but there was no cure. When last I saw you, when you last opened your eye, You were weak and fragile and knew you would die, You told me as much when we spoke on that day Your fear I could see but you smiled anyway. We spoke for a while and just at the end I said tomorrow I'd see you again, but as I started to turn away you raised in your bed with something to say Your breathing was weak as you tried hard to speak, but struggle as you did the words wouldn't come and I left that last day emotionally numb. I wanted to talk with you for so very long, but all of my words seemed to always be wrong. If only I could share with you a final last day, I would ask you to tell me what you wanted to say.
12/07/15
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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December 16, 2015 at 12:31 AM
JAMES, congrats on your fine win. SKAT
Inman Avatar
December 16, 2015 at 7:05 AM
Thank you SKAT.
Gentry Avatar
December 15, 2015 at 1:00 AM
Oh gosh. I really liked how you did this. Congratulations on your win.
Inman Avatar
December 15, 2015 at 9:49 AM
Thank you Susan.
Kimathi Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 5:58 AM
I love the key-hole shape your poem has! Congrats for your top placement in the contest! ;-)
Inman Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 7:16 AM
Thank you Teddy.
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December 13, 2015 at 11:48 PM
I think all of us think the same, that his words would have been how much he loved you. This is beautifully penned James and a big Congratulations on your wonderful first place win!
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December 14, 2015 at 7:16 AM
Thank you for the sweet words Connie.
La France Avatar
December 13, 2015 at 11:25 PM
James, oh how sad and so emotional, I feel the pain that still lingers in each word, I can hear his words, I love you, is what he wanted to say, congratulations on your wonderful win ~
Inman Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 7:15 AM
Thank you BW, I have a much longer one that I mentioned to you some time ago that only my wife and sister have read, both were in tears.
Dietrich Avatar
December 13, 2015 at 7:24 PM
I bet he just wanted to say he loved you and was proud of you. Congrats on a great win, my friend.
Inman Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 7:04 AM
You are so sweet Andrea, thank you.
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December 13, 2015 at 4:52 PM
Very touching, congratulations.
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December 14, 2015 at 7:03 AM
Thanks Richard.
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December 13, 2015 at 4:36 PM
Oh, this contest isn't fair to empathetic people, I'm at risk of feeling sad - there is so much raw emotion in them, in all that I've read so far. Real, authentic, complicated father-son emotions that left you without the finality of his statement. I feel that for you, great poem and Congrats! CayCay ... 7
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December 14, 2015 at 7:03 AM
CayCay, thank you, and I don't know how many more I can read.
Haight Avatar
December 13, 2015 at 4:22 PM
Back to congratulate you on your fine win, James! Sandra
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December 14, 2015 at 7:11 AM
Thanks again Sandra
Lane Avatar
December 13, 2015 at 3:33 PM
congrats, James.
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December 14, 2015 at 7:10 AM
Thank you Lin.
Allison Avatar
December 13, 2015 at 3:30 PM
oh that final line is one so many can relate to James congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Inman Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 7:09 AM
I must admit, Jan, we were luckier then most. My dad got to see all of his six children and many of his grand kids the days before he left us.
Scars Avatar
December 13, 2015 at 3:12 PM
Beautiful James, thank you for being a part of my contest -luloo *smiles*
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December 14, 2015 at 7:06 AM
Laura, how in the world did you manage to read all of these. Incredibly emotional contest. Thank you for hosting it.
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December 7, 2015 at 4:46 PM
This gave me goosebumps, James. So deep and sad. I know your poem will do very well for the contest. 7, Sandra
Inman Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 7:01 AM
Thank you Sandra.
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