Just Fingertips Apart

Each step I take along the way is more than I can endure and every curve in the lonesome road becomes a detour back to you because movin' on is somethin' I just can't do, not if movin' on means no longer will I be with you I can't explain what I hear when you don't say a thing But my heart dances to every word of the songs you sing I feel an ache so bittersweet when with a ragged breath I whisper and you're not here. Juliet dies another death I can't rewrite history, but if I could I'd steal time from stars All I can do is pencil in, "I loved you" on pages of memoirs When dying embers of us become ash without a spark I'll be lost without love in my life, wandering in the dark Emptiness is a painful emotion no dictionary can explain A chorus of 'What could've beens' I'll echo in sad refrain. But what can I possibly say to console my broken heart when it realizes that we're no longer just fingertips apart?
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Bangalee Avatar
March 28, 2023 at 9:26 PM
wo how wonderful the poem is; just great; great to read; congrats for being selected the poem as POTD
Logan Avatar
March 31, 2023 at 1:51 PM
Thank you so very much for liking this one, Mahtab.
Watt Avatar
March 27, 2023 at 6:46 PM
Jenna, you certainly have the talent to write such a poem as a work of fiction, but I believe this one bubbles up from the deep waters of real anguish and emptiness. The genuine nature of your words is what gives them such gravitas and makes them so powerful and moving. My favorite lines are the first two of stanza three... "if I could I'd steal time from stars" is such an original and heart-tugging phrase, as is "pencil in 'I loved you' on pages of memoirs". I also loved the "Juliet dies another death" line, along with "just fingertips apart". Also, the picture you chose sets an apt tone of "wandering in the dark". Amazing writing, I'm glad to see you get healthy exposure to this from your POTD. Admiringly ~ John
Logan Avatar
March 27, 2023 at 7:15 PM
Hi John and after reading your wonderful review, and many others, I'm very overwhelmed by the way this one has been received. I usually write and edit several times, but after one pass I didn't see a single word I wanted to change. That's a rarity for me. I always enjoy comments in which a reader tells me what he enjoyed the most, and you always do that. My favorite in this one was the Juliet line. I'm very fond of the title, too, and admit they were not my words, yet too perfect not to use. You are always gracious with your remarks...very much appreciated.
Rodrigues Avatar
March 27, 2023 at 4:53 AM
Those poignant final two lines, leave us with an indelible image! Congratulations on POTD!
Logan Avatar
March 27, 2023 at 7:16 AM
Dear Kim, I've been in awe of the comments this poem has drawn, and those that state specifically what was liked. This poem means more to me than any potd or prize could ever offer, so I sincerely thank you for letting me know how much you like it.
Goldsmith Avatar
March 26, 2023 at 7:10 AM
Congratulations on your POTD win. A wonderful write. Love your line, "I can't rewrite history, but if I could I'd steal time from stars." Have a Blessed Day/Week writing away...............
Logan Avatar
March 27, 2023 at 1:02 AM
Hi Paula. Thank you so much for visiting this poem. I always like seeing you.
Baker Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 11:45 PM
Deeply touching poem, Jenna. Well deserved POTD! The mind has miraculous powers. It can create pain or joy, it is up to each of us to define the experiences we have them remain as memories as moments in time or for eternity. Peace be with you, Bill
Logan Avatar
March 26, 2023 at 2:10 AM
Good morning and thank you, Bill. I wish our minds were capable of healing our hearts. Wracking up memories in the "heartache" column leaves much to be desired.
Chuuk Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 4:45 PM
WOW!! Jena, absolutely beautiful poem, and a big congrats on potd. :)
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 6:41 PM
Thank you so very much, Fin.
Edmonds  Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 2:14 PM
So sad, yet this is so nice Jenna, fingertips apart is a lovely expression of being closely in love. I hope you are in love and this write is fictional… Belle
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 2:21 PM
You are such a caring lady, Belle. Always concerned about the wellbeing of other poets. Fingertips do not have to touch each other physically to find a way to express their feelings. I truly appreciate your thoughts.
Andresen Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 1:34 PM
- Congratulations on this beautiful poem, Jenna - Without love... life is empty - hugs
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 2:13 PM
Anne-Lise, I agree with you. Feeling empty is far worse than feeling all alone. Thanks for coming over to leave your comments.
Gentile Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 11:46 AM
Jenna, emotion runs so deep throughout your heartfelt lines, that I can really feel them! No wonder this is POTD! Congratulations and enjoy xxoo
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 12:57 PM
Hi Mike. Because of the nature of your romantic poetry, I knew you'd feel the sorrow woven into these lines. Thank you for reading me and leaving your thoughts.
Slaughter Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 10:43 AM
"Moving on" seems such a simple thing to do...and yet...A great piece for POTD, Jenna.
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 12:54 PM
Thank you for your thoughts, Jim. 'Moving on' are just 2 simple words, but when love is lost it becomes a tangle of frayed heartstrings.
La France Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 9:00 AM
Jenna, absolutely a beautiful poem and congratulations on receiving the POEM OF THE DAY honor, blessings, Constance
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 9:16 AM
Thank you so sincerely for leaving your gracious comments for me, Constance.
Y. Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 8:36 AM
WoW! Jenna, You penned such a good poem on longing to be with someone and heartache. This poem is so worthy of the poem of the day. Congratulations on your honor. Have a great day and weekend:-) Alexis
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 9:15 AM
Hi Alexis. I'm so glad to see you. We haven't connected here lately. Thanks for the congrats.
Elless Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 8:11 AM
Jena, Congratulations on Your POTD. It's beautiful. Shows great emotion and compassion. Have a Great Day.
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 9:12 AM
Thank you so much my kind-hearted friend.
M  Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 7:49 AM
Perfect poem for POTD Jenna…..Congratulations you!! Debx
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 9:13 AM
Thanks for your congratulation comments, Deb.
Lawrence Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 7:26 AM
Beautiful emotions and magical expressions of love lost . I was taken away ! Congratulations on POTD dear Jenna . Susan :)
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 9:12 AM
I'm truly grateful for your kind words. Thanks, Susan.
Delaney Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 7:06 AM
Congratulations On being chosen POTD, Jenna: To steal time from the stars is a beautiful line. Best, SuZ
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 9:10 AM
Hi Suz and thanks so very much. I appreciate knowing the line you found most interesting.
May Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 6:34 AM
If we could only "steal time from the stars", to mend broken hearts, Very nicely penned, Congrats on POTD
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 9:10 AM
Many thanks for leaving me your thoughtful remarks, Joseph.
Fowler Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 6:29 AM
Beautifully written, as usual Jenna. I find it romantic and a little erotic as well. Congratulations on POTD! :)
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 9:07 AM
Hi Linda. Both of those emotions are spilled. There's great need for that love to continue turning back, but the inevitability of it not lasting seers with a burn too deep to ever heal. Thank you for your sensitivity.
Kyser Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 6:29 AM
We don’t dial those up from nowhere- sorry for your obvious pain and loss - a well-deserved POTD to be sure.
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 9:08 AM
Sadly, this heartache is all too real. More painfilled than any unrequited love could ever be. Thank you, Jeff.
Ray Choudhury Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 6:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTD, Dear Jenna. A poem about heartbreak, and "what could've beens'...bittersweet emotions! Loved the passionate line "Juliet dies another death". Best wishes, Dear Poet ~ Mala
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 9:00 AM
Hi and thank you, Mala. That line brought me to tears, and I'm the one who wrote it! Thank you for appreciating my poem and for the congratulations.
Seeker Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 5:59 AM
Leaves a lingering ache of longing in the heart, I like the concluding stanza best ~ warmest congratulations on POTD, Jenna
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 8:58 AM
Thank you for your comments, Seeker. Heartache as deep set as this one would leave a permanent scar upon most hearts... definitely on mine.
Feeley Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 5:07 AM
Congrats Jenna on this excellent POTD. You have definitely captured the heart.
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 5:35 AM
Thank you very much, Elizabeth.
Kitchin Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 4:38 AM
Jenna, back to congratulate you on POTD, a well deserved honor!
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 4:46 AM
Thank you so very much for your congrats, Tania.
Koplin Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 4:28 AM
Congratulations on POTD my friend!! I’m so proud of you, great job Jenna!!!
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 4:38 AM
Good morning, Mark. You always know exactly what words to give me when I need them most. You are a treasured friend. Thank you.
Lawless Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 4:19 AM
Beautifully done and finished with a sledgehammer final couplet.
Logan Avatar
March 25, 2023 at 4:36 AM
Thank you for leaving me your words of lauding, John. They're so encouraging.
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