Katee Surface Poet Ode

Just a Girl

Just a girl in a room, sitting on the floor,
I can see her in this window, but I see no door
Crying her song of anguish, of this unspeakable pain,
Has every intention never to feel it again
I rock, I tremble, my life is at cost
All I know is this shell, for it's myself...my core...my all I have lost

From the start I new this fight could only last so long,
I aimed to defeat it, striving to remain strong
Each day in and day out, facing the demon, fighting the doubt
At a moment with no warning, without any clue
I was losing my strength...my energy...all the will I once knew

For now, my all is lost, my memories are faint,
There is no pretty picture left for me to paint
This girl on the floor, in this empty room
Was this girl condemned for a life of doom

My tears disappeared, like they'd never been there
Dried up with my soul, the time is clear
Wanting to shake her, make her open her eyes
To show some hope, the blue is still in the skies

Then, out of nowhere, I found the door
I wanted to save the girl on the floor
As I neared and inched to her close
She wasn't that girl, what I saw was a ghost

As I turned to walk out, stopped by a noise
I heard the laughter of girls and of boys
With that came a voice of peace and of grace
She told me, she's happy, no-more demon for her to face

I am calmed, I'm reassured, I'm no longer in pain
She was the broken me, but now I am strong again

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December 12, 2013 at 9:14 PM This is such a fantastic poem!! You have inspired me to start writing poetry again. Keep up the amazing work.

Husna Mirza July 19, 2013 at 11:12 AM Woah..wonderful piece of work! Love it!

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Skat A July 16, 2013 at 11:05 PM your poem is deep, and moving. glad you are a strong girl, Katee , your first poem on the soup is excellent for the readers, I love it!! Stopping by with a nice and sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup fan and "FRIEND"....... God Bless........... Hugs* SKAT" Katee Surface July 17, 2013 at 12:04 AM This is really the first time I have ever really put my writings out there, and I must say...it is people like you, Skat, that keep me writing. I can't thank you enough for all you have said!! Much love~

Kim Van Breda July 16, 2013 at 12:49 PM Stunning poem... so full of emotions and truths. Welcome to P/Soup. xx Katee Surface July 17, 2013 at 12:06 AM Kim, thank you. I have felt nothing but a great sense of love and welcoming here. I am so grateful!! :xx

Aaron Wilson July 16, 2013 at 11:57 AM nice poem well done keep it up :) Katee Surface July 17, 2013 at 12:07 AM Aaron, I will certainly do so as long as you keep reading!!! xoxo

Anne-Lise Andresen July 16, 2013 at 10:22 AM -Hi, Katee. - A good written poem. - Like it a lot. - Welcome to P-Soup. - Thanks for your first poem, hope there will be many more in the future. - Have fun with poetry. - Good luck! - Greetings from Norway / / Anne-Lise :) Katee Surface July 16, 2013 at 11:47 AM I am so very touched, thank you kindly for your so sweet compliment!!! :)))

Poet Tacito July 16, 2013 at 8:04 AM Absolutely! This is what I like to read. Recognition of your pain, but actually DOING something about it. Dwelling on shortcomings keep one from standing tall. I admire this piece. Katee Surface July 16, 2013 at 11:47 AM Keep your eyes open, there will be more!!