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Just a Girl

Just a girl in a room, sitting on the floor, I can see her in this window, but I see no door Crying her song of anguish, of this unspeakable pain, Has every intention never to feel it again I rock, I tremble, my life is at cost All I know is this shell, for it's myself...my core...my all I have lost From the start I new this fight could only last so long, I aimed to defeat it, striving to remain strong Each day in and day out, facing the demon, fighting the doubt At a moment with no warning, without any clue I was losing my strength...my energy...all the will I once knew For now, my all is lost, my memories are faint, There is no pretty picture left for me to paint This girl on the floor, in this empty room Was this girl condemned for a life of doom My tears disappeared, like they'd never been there Dried up with my soul, the time is clear Wanting to shake her, make her open her eyes To show some hope, the blue is still in the skies Then, out of nowhere, I found the door I wanted to save the girl on the floor As I neared and inched to her close She wasn't that girl, what I saw was a ghost As I turned to walk out, stopped by a noise I heard the laughter of girls and of boys With that came a voice of peace and of grace She told me, she's happy, no-more demon for her to face I am calmed, I'm reassured, I'm no longer in pain She was the broken me, but now I am strong again

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 12/12/2013 9:14:00 PM
This is such a fantastic poem!! You have inspired me to start writing poetry again. Keep up the amazing work.
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Date: 7/19/2013 11:12:00 AM
Woah..wonderful piece of work! Love it!
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Date: 7/17/2013 8:02:00 AM
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Date: 7/17/2013 7:54:00 AM
In both of your poems I see a problem and then the insight resulting in the resolution of that problem...I LOVE that! I have been on the Soup for over 5 years now so I hope you don't mind a bit of advice...Don't bother replying to a comment, the commenter will never see it...Instead, click on the commenter's name, pick a poem of theirs and then post a comment... You can also go to the new poems section and comment on the poems there. By doing this, you get exposure and a lot of reads on your fine poetry - Tim
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Date: 7/16/2013 11:05:00 PM
your poem is deep, and moving. glad you are a strong girl, Katee , your first poem on the soup is excellent for the readers, I love it!! Stopping by with a nice and sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup fan and "FRIEND"....... God Bless........... Hugs* SKAT"
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Katee Surface
Date: 7/17/2013 12:04:00 AM
This is really the first time I have ever really put my writings out there, and I must say...it is people like you, Skat, that keep me writing. I can't thank you enough for all you have said!! Much love~
Date: 7/16/2013 12:49:00 PM
Stunning poem... so full of emotions and truths. Welcome to P/Soup. xx
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Katee Surface
Date: 7/17/2013 12:06:00 AM
Kim, thank you. I have felt nothing but a great sense of love and welcoming here. I am so grateful!! :xx
Date: 7/16/2013 11:57:00 AM
nice poem well done keep it up :)
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Katee Surface
Date: 7/17/2013 12:07:00 AM
Aaron, I will certainly do so as long as you keep reading!!! xoxo
Date: 7/16/2013 10:22:00 AM
-Hi, Katee. - A good written poem. - Like it a lot. - Welcome to P-Soup. - Thanks for your first poem, hope there will be many more in the future. - Have fun with poetry. - Good luck! - Greetings from Norway / / Anne-Lise :)
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Katee Surface
Date: 7/16/2013 11:47:00 AM
I am so very touched, thank you kindly for your so sweet compliment!!! :)))
Date: 7/16/2013 8:04:00 AM
Absolutely! This is what I like to read. Recognition of your pain, but actually DOING something about it. Dwelling on shortcomings keep one from standing tall. I admire this piece.
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Katee Surface
Date: 7/16/2013 11:47:00 AM
Keep your eyes open, there will be more!!

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