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June Bug

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Created for High Fives for June contest offered by Andrea Dietrich

father-san said no
to my succulent June bug
who wrote me love songs
we harmonise together
under the swinging lanterns

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 7/1/2025 7:21:00 AM

Sweet love. Congratulations Beau! :)

Beau Barberis
Date: 7/3/2025 10:33:00 AM

Thank you!!

David Crandall

Date: 6/26/2025 2:33:00 PM

Aww...how can you say no to a succulent June bug? I say yes to the June bug!

Beau Barberis
Date: 6/26/2025 4:17:00 PM

She said yes too. I like love stories with a happy ending. Succulent June bug as a term of endearment just makes me smile!

Ink Empress

Date: 6/26/2025 5:38:00 AM

I love " swinging lanterns" how stunning and creatively written! Beautiful flow to your word weaving too , i especially love "who wrote me love songs we harmonise together" cuteness! Pleasure reading. Well deserved top win! Congratulations! Sending you light

Beau Barberis
Date: 6/26/2025 4:09:00 PM

I’m so pleased you like it! Thanks so much for the feedback and kind words!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/25/2025 10:31:00 AM

A beauty! Congrats!

Beau Barberis
Date: 6/26/2025 4:07:00 PM

Thank you, Kim!

Jim Healey

Date: 6/25/2025 8:00:00 AM

Very unusual and creative take on the tanka form. Well done. (Btw, I lived in Japan for a year teaching ESL, although it was many years ago!) Cheers from Canada. Jim

Beau Barberis
Date: 6/26/2025 4:06:00 PM

Thank you for the kind words. We are really enjoying Japan!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/24/2025 1:09:00 PM

This is such an unusual poem, and I found the use of succulent to be a bit odd, and yet, it still works because the whole thing is so dang cool!! Congrats in my contest.

Beau Barberis
Date: 6/24/2025 2:47:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea! I tried to weave in the history of Tanka (love notes in Japan with a twist in the last two lines). I'm writing to you from Japan so this placement is doubly sweet!