Judging the Science Fair

I come across a very life like display
(doubtfully claimed to be the work of some
first grader) of every planet and star
in the Milky Way sky.  For the solar system
he’s used Styrofoam balls, and each of them
are unique artistic expressions: on Mars,
it seems the sea came to be by a thumb
being pressed on the surface.  The array
of color in Jupiter’s eye fill my
own with tears for their beauty, as do Pluto’s
light brown heart and Venus’s orange swirling paint.
But what really gets me is the moon’s faint
outline of a smile that for no reason glows.
“You made this?” I ask; “Believe it.” - His shining reply.

5/9/2017
For Shadow Hamilton’s Night Time Sky Sonnet Contest
(this has a rhyme scheme of: a/b/c/d/d/c/b/a/e/f/g/g/f/e)

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Date: 5/17/2017 6:45:00 AM
I love how you draw us in with unique imagery, fully keeping our attention and then stun us with an emotional ending that warms the heart. You are so good at making us feel Phillip. 7 ; )
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Date: 5/12/2017 3:40:00 PM
I loved those times when the children and my children made their projects so inviting as your poem. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest. ~*
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Date: 5/9/2017 4:30:00 AM
This sonnet is exquisite, the first thing I notice is the easy flow of it, as if there's no intricate rhyme scheme underneath: two enclosed rhymes 1x8, 1x6... I love it Phillip, and the story is simply wonderful too :) Good luck in the contest (and now go read my May Showers!!!!!)
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