Jig Antic

Goliath stood up straight and tall
But David knew that he would fall
Goliath was stoned
And everyone groaned
His shoelace tripped him after all!
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Volumes Avatar
August 26, 2022 at 9:03 AM
Ahh Rico, I always wondered how David brought him down ! Your poem is a revelation. Each of your poems invite thought from the reader and are thoroughly enjoyable.
Leffanta Avatar
August 26, 2022 at 10:23 AM
Thank you for ready and commenting, Wendy! Much appreciated! Aloha!
Dietrich Avatar
August 21, 2022 at 8:21 AM
Love this one!
Leffanta Avatar
August 21, 2022 at 10:50 AM
I thought about naming it, "Sundae School" as it reminds children of the importance of tying their shoes, but then wondered what child today laces their shoes? Aloha!
George Avatar
August 20, 2022 at 9:21 PM
You have given an interesting version to the David- Goliath story in your own unique way ! Enjoyed it, Rico
Leffanta Avatar
August 21, 2022 at 10:51 AM
Anything to keep you happy! Aloha!
Bauer Avatar
August 20, 2022 at 2:39 PM
perfect title, as always, rico! love the double meaning of stoned (or is that just me?)...
Leffanta Avatar
August 21, 2022 at 10:49 AM
"Goliath was stoned" is about the only thing Middle Easterners agree upon! Thank you for reading and commenting! Aloha!
Lawrence Avatar
August 20, 2022 at 2:16 PM
Love the giant and the shoelace ! What will be next ? Only your inner mind knows. Always love your imagination Rico ! Hugs, Susan :)
Leffanta Avatar
August 21, 2022 at 10:48 AM
Nothing compares with your, "Dust in the Wind!" Aloha!
Hankins Avatar
August 20, 2022 at 10:16 AM
Aw, this is funny! You have a fascinating sense of humor, Rico, and I can't figure out how you come up with these!
Leffanta Avatar
August 21, 2022 at 10:48 AM
No telephone, so my train of thought is seldom interrupted. Thank you for reading and commenting! Aloha!
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